Wyhe Posted July 9, 2008 Report Share Posted July 9, 2008 are you still having writers block? several of us are still waiting for chap 5 :Pso am I...but roxas,you should calm out & think things over. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Oncoming Storm Posted July 9, 2008 Report Share Posted July 9, 2008 Hey Roxas, PM me what u have so far, and i'll write some of it. Then let's see of you're writer's block clears up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted July 10, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 10, 2008 All I got is a small intro, which still needs a bit fixing, leading to what you sent me. Then I added a small bit. I got it in my head, but I need it written down. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Oncoming Storm Posted July 10, 2008 Report Share Posted July 10, 2008 Send it to me anyway. I want to take a look at it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted July 10, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 10, 2008 Okay, I'll send it to you, but let me just get one thing straight: I'm writing this story for fun to show how I think it should have ended. I do not have to do this. It gets really annoying when you bombard people with questions on when the next one of their series or whatever comes out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sportsplayer627 Posted July 19, 2008 Report Share Posted July 19, 2008 Did you stop doing this Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted July 19, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 19, 2008 Read have the above post. I don't have to focus on this alone. I can enjoy summer if I want to. I have been working on bits of it, though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted July 24, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 24, 2008 Okay, it's been a month, and I managed to finish Chapter 5. Chapter 5: Shadow of the Night "The D used to be possessed by the Light of Destruction." Aster began. "No doubt he's probably under complete control now." Jaden nodded. "So, how bad is he?" Aster took a card from his deck and showed it to Jaden. It was Destiny Hero - Plasma. "He used to have this. If he wants revenge, he's probably strong enough he stop this." Suddenly, the door burst open. Everyone turned and saw a boy dressed in black. "Who are you and what are you doing here?" Jaden asked the stranger who had walked into the room. The boy smirked. The smirk was oddly chilling. "My name is David. David Mitchell, to be exact." He sat down in a nearby chair. Jaden looked around at the corner. Almost everyone looked confused at the newcomer, but Atticus and Yusuke were looking at him with identical odd looks: it looked like shock. "Jaden," Alexis asked him. "Do you know if we can trust that guy? He might be a Celestial Warrior." "I don't think he's a Warrior, Alexis. Just calm down, ok?" Alexis nodded. "Just be careful, ok?" Jaden nodded, and then approached David. "Like I said, what are you doing here?" Jaden asked him again. David kept smirking. "I know quite a bit about you, Jaden Yuki." he said. "Like, about how you're destined to destroy the Light of Destruction." Jaden looked surprised, but let David continue. "You see, I’m also on a quest to destroy the Light, and these mysterious Celestial Warriors." Jaden thought he knew was coming. "I've come to ask for a partnership." said David. "You and me. Together, neither the Light of Destruction nor the Celestial Warriors could stand a chance." Jaden almost said yes, but then he heard a warbling sound in his ear. Winged Kuriboh had returned. "Hey, what's up, Winged Kuriboh?" asked Jaden. Winged Kuriboh warbled again. "This guy is dangerous? But he seems harmless enough." He turned back to David. "You see, Jaden, I use a special object to win my duels. Here, let me show you." He then pulled out a strange-looking medallion. It was a dusty gold color, with a red jewel in the middle. It looked very familiar to Jaden. And suddenly it hit him. "That medallion!" burst out Jaden. "Where did you get it? I have one just like it." David smiled again. "It's an interesting story, Jaden. I wasn't always as good a duelist as I am today. I found it during my travels, and it gave me the power of the Shadow Realm, making me a powerful duelist." Jaden was shocked. Now he knew why Winged Kuriboh had warned him, and why Atticus and Yusuke looked startled. Both of them had been controlled by a dark mastermind, and must've somehow sensed some kind of darkness around David. However, he had a feeling David wasn't being entirely truthful. "Just think about it, Jaden, our combined power eradicating the Light of Destruction!" David continued. "No." Jaden said firmly. "Look, David, I want the Light gone as much as anyone, but resorting to using the power of the Shadow Realm is going too far. I think you've overstayed your welcome." David got up, a look of annoyance on his face. "Very well." he finally said. "But mark my words, Jaden. You and I will meet again. Do not underestimate me." He walked out, but Jaden took his Duel Disk out. “Not so fast. If you work with Nightshroud, you can’t stick around.” David chuckled. “No. Believe me, you’ll need my help. At least for now. You see, if we duel, I can assure you you won't survive. That's something I won't let happen until the Light is truly eradicated. However..." David turned his head, his eyes glowing red. Jaden went down on his knees and was in pain."You mentioned that you had a medallion like that of my own. Care to tell me where it is?" Jaden looked up, the eyes of Yubel and the Supreme King active. A force pushed David back, who put his hands up to block. He brushed off the attack."So this is the power I have heard of. Very well, I will take my leave." David turned and left for the door. Some students went to stop him, but he we psychically knocked away, but David didn't even move a muscle in defense. Jaden snarled, but fell unconscious. Aster and Alexis went to help him. They looked at door, which was already closed. David was gone. ........................................... The four remaining Celestial Crusaders were in an undisclosed location looking down into a circle in the middle of the room showing the events that just happened."Nightshroud?" one of them asked."I believe so." another, much younger voice answered."Milord, what do you wish for us to do?" a third one answered. The leader stared into the circle as he watched David wander around the island."For now, we allow young David to survive." This answer was greeted with surprise by the others."But he is the closest tie to Nightshroud!" the first Crusader shouted."You dare question my orders, Zathan?" he questioned with a dark tone his voice. His eye, which was as red as blood, stared at Zathan, who knew that he had gotten on a his master's bad side, as usual.Zathan turned his head and snarled. "My apologies, sir." "Good. Now, proceed with original plan."All three of them nodded and replied "Sir." Two of them left, leaving Zathan to remain with his leader."Zathan, you have proven yourself a failure to be time and again. I suggest you control yourself this time. If you fail as disgracefully as Marcus, you will suffer a far more worse fate than his own." Zathan nodded and turned to leave, but his master wasn't finished."However, if you bring me a fragment of the Emblem, you might be forgiven this time.""Is that all?""That's all." Zathan left the area, vanishing in a flash of light. The remaing Crusader watched as Alexis and Aster carried Jaden to the Red Dorm."Aster, before this is over, I will have my revenge."He removed his hood, revealing the face of none other than Kyle Jables: The D. In his hand was a card, but it was glowing very brightly so that it's feature could not be seen. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Supreme Gamesmaster Posted July 24, 2008 Report Share Posted July 24, 2008 w00t. Wasn't expecting him to be a complete failure at dueling, but w/e. Just make sure he gets a bit of that emblem-thing, XD. Good chappie, but it's really... short... well, who am I to talk? I haven't updated Sonic Beyond in a year on FF.net... Speaking of which, I'd better get to work on that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted July 24, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 24, 2008 Zathan isn't a failure at dueling, but he usually doesn't find success with orders that don't require dueling. I know it's kinda short, but I think I got enough for the Chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted July 25, 2008 Report Share Posted July 25, 2008 After so long,chapter 5 is finally up at last.so the D is really there,wonder what deck he will use this time seeing that Aster took away Plasma Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted July 25, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 25, 2008 Trust me, it'll be good. Wait, I forgot to add something to the end of the new Chapter! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted July 26, 2008 Report Share Posted July 26, 2008 I saw that last part.If I recall, Sartorius' Light Ruler was also like that too.Maybe it's a powerful card representing the Light of Destruction. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted July 26, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 26, 2008 Yeah, that's what I was trying to reference. As for what the card is, you'll just have to wait... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted July 27, 2008 Report Share Posted July 27, 2008 It ended a bit too suddenly for my personal likeness. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted July 27, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 27, 2008 How so? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Oncoming Storm Posted July 28, 2008 Report Share Posted July 28, 2008 Cool chapter! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted July 28, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 28, 2008 Thanks! However, now I am completely stumped for the next chapter. Any ideas? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted July 28, 2008 Report Share Posted July 28, 2008 Well, it was a little bit too short for my likeness. It felt like something more would happen. And for the next post, you still haven't let Jonathan in, although introducing new characters each chapter might not be a good idea. Let the characters rest for a while from the dueling and develop the plot. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Oncoming Storm Posted July 29, 2008 Report Share Posted July 29, 2008 I'll get back to you. I've been kinda busy for the past few weeks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted July 29, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 29, 2008 Alright then. I already got an idea for the next chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sportsplayer627 Posted August 2, 2008 Report Share Posted August 2, 2008 cant wait for chap 6 and also i cant wait to see how ehbs come out :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted August 3, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 3, 2008 Yeah, about him: Mind if I change his name to Darkedge? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sportsplayer627 Posted August 3, 2008 Report Share Posted August 3, 2008 WHy? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted August 3, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 3, 2008 Idk, it just sounds cooler to me. But I guess I'll keep the original name, since it's your card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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