Last Minute Redemption

[YamiNekoChan]

A nice card to go along with the Solemn brigade.

Edit 1: Changed wording of cost and added restrictions.

[The Nyx Avatar]

A nice card to go along with the Solemn brigade.

 

For that, wouldn't it have to have "Solemn" in its name?

 

Regardless:

This isn't much of a fair cost; you could easily empty your hand by Setting, Summoning, or activating; thus, reducing your cost to only 1000, or even none. Though, that can be looked passed (especially with the condition) if the second effect wasn't there. A free Special Summon after negating a monster effect and destroying said monster? No.

[YamiNekoChan]

Would it be considerable if I changed it to maybe "After this effect resolves; Draw 1 card"? Or maybe put restrictions such as "1 Level 4 or lower monster."

[The Nyx Avatar]

Would it be considerable if I changed it to maybe "After this effect resolves; Draw 1 card"? Or maybe put restrictions such as "1 Level 4 or lower monster."

I don't really think there should be any follow-up after the negation and destruction. I think you could just have this card negate a monster effect, without the condition of it being Summoned that same turn; however, to do that it'd be best to change the "max 3000" to min "1000". However, if you really do want to gain something after negating, I'd suggest a heavier cost.

[Yuuji Kazami]

A nice card to go along with the Solemn brigade.

So, like you stated, this card pretty much joins the Solemns (Mainly Strike) with a secondary effect that acts as a COTH/Oasis of Dragon Souls. The first effect is a little confusing as it states that you must pay LP x 1000 equal to the cards in your hand, with a maximum of 3000. I'm assuming that if you have 3 or more cards in hand (As the card states a maximum of 3000 LP can be payed), then the card's effect will be missed as the cost cannot be resolved properly. On the other hand, there's nowhere on the card to state the occurrence if you had no cards in your hand. Would it act as a free Solemn, or had you also initially meant that the effect would be missed if you had no cards in hand? The card's text is worded so that the effect cannot resolve if there are no cards in your hand.

 

I personally don't mind the second effect too much, but you have to remember how it would impact the meta if it was brought into play. (E.G. Kozmos using this card can be devastating with the second effect as Dark Destroyer and Sliprider trigger their effects upon Summon). Dracopals could also be very devastating with this card if they can reborn a Ignister Prominence, and especially since they still have Guiding Ariadne to act as a searcher for the Counter Traps.

 

If you decide to re-work the card's text, remember to decide on how it will affect the current metagame. Maybe add a hard OPT usage, or something similar, but it's all up to you in the end. After all, you're the creator.

[YamiNekoChan]

So, like you stated, this card pretty much joins the Solemns (Mainly Strike) with a secondary effect that acts as a COTH/Oasis of Dragon Souls. The first effect is a little confusing as it states that you must pay LP x 1000 equal to the cards in your hand, with a maximum of 3000. I'm assuming that if you have 3 or more cards in hand (As the card states a maximum of 3000 LP can be payed), then the card's effect will be missed as the cost cannot be resolved properly. On the other hand, there's nowhere on the card to state the occurrence if you had no cards in your hand. Would it act as a free Solemn, or had you also initially meant that the effect would be missed if you had no cards in hand? The card's text is worded so that the effect cannot resolve if there are no cards in your hand.

 

I personally don't mind the second effect too much, but you have to remember how it would impact the meta if it was brought into play. (E.G. Kozmos using this card can be devastating with the second effect as Dark Destroyer and Sliprider trigger their effects upon Summon). Dracopals could also be very devastating with this card if they can reborn a Ignister Prominence, and especially since they still have Guiding Ariadne to act as a searcher for the Counter Traps.

 

If you decide to re-work the card's text, remember to decide on how it will affect the current metagame. Maybe add a hard OPT usage, or something similar, but it's all up to you in the end. After all, you're the creator.

Hm.. In that case I might make it 2000 LP and make the additional effect " You can Special Summon 1 Level 4 or lower monster from your hand, negate its effects."

Sounds good?

[The Nyx Avatar]

Hm.. In that case I might make it 2500 LP and make the additional effect " You can Special Summon 1 Level 4 or lower monster from your hand, negate its effects."

Sounds good?

You could lower it to 2000 and removed the "turn it is Summoned" part.

[YamiNekoChan]

You could lower it to 2000 and removed the "turn it is Summoned" part.

Okay

[Yuuji Kazami]

You could lower it to 2000 and removed the "turn it is Summoned" part.

She can keep it as it is, except change the cost to 2000 LP and keep the rest of effect negation as well as the COTH/Oasis effect. Just needs a hard OPT as well so you can only activate 1 per turn. You can add an additional limitation for the Graveyard SS, if you wish.

 

It's better for the creator to stay as close to the original as possible. Changing everything up too much, if not necessary, isn't as much of a learning experience because it's putting too much of your own style into someone else's card.