2 cards from story fan fiction : Dark Return

[Khensi17]

Zombi Girl: level 1* atribute dark( this card belong enemy caracteer Pheonix Yakizuky after his lose Emma won this card)

 

Atak: ? Def: ?

 

This card can be special sumon if you have any Girl name on deck,hand,removed play,graveyard and extra deck. Oponen't cano't activate any spells,traps or efect monster wen this is card is special sumoned. Wile this card is on field oponent canot 't activate spells,traps, efect monster ,set any card,normal sumon or special sumon. If this card is ataked player no recive damage after batale calculation she go insted deck shufle and oponent skip draw phase for 3 turns. If this card is destoryed in any way, removed play sended deck or hand by oponent this card go insted deck and shufle and draw 3 cards. You can send this card from hand to deck for shufle and ad 5 any cards on hand except Blak Dark Magian Girl.( This efect cano't be ignored.)

 

 

Girl World: field spell card

 

oponen't cano't activate spells,traps efect monster. Once pe turn you can normal aditional a Girl monster from deck,graveyard,hand or removed play. Any girl card gain atak and def 3000 . If i girl atak any monster is no't destroyed by batale is removed insted play and oponent stil recive damage life. If this card is destoryed any way ,sended hand,deck or removed play is go insted deck and shufle and you can special sumon 3 Dark Magian Girl from deck,hand ,graveyard or removed play and oponent recive 3000 life damage. If Dark Magian Girl is special sumon this way is become unfected by spells ,traps or efect monster oponent til duel end.

[Flash Flyer - Sakura]

I understand that English is not your primary language, but please make an attempt to clean up your text so it's easier to understand. I'll just fix the text for everyone.

 

Zombi Girl

Level 1 | DARK | (what type is this?)
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If you have a "Girl" monster in your hand, Deck, Graveyard, Extra Deck or currently banished, you can Special Summon this card (from where?). When this card is Special Summoned, your opponent cannot activate cards or effects. Your opponent cannot Normal or Special Summon monsters, also they cannot activate card effects or Set cards. When this card is targeted for an attack: You take no damage, also shuffle this card into the Deck after damage calculation, then skip your opponent's next 3 Draw Phases. When this card is destroyed, banished or returned to the hand or Deck by an opponent's card: Shuffle this card into the Deck, then draw 3 cards. You can send this card from your hand to the Graveyard; add 5 cards (from where) to your hand. This effect cannot be negated.
 

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You know what, I'll just review the Zombi Girl card, and I'll be blunt: This card is overpowered as hell, and is basically a "no, you cannot play Yugioh" card. Card can be summoned from where if you just have a "Girl" monster anywhere in your possession and cannot be chained to. Opponent is barred from playing ANYTHING, loses their Draw Phases if they attack and then we have this being a massive draw / search card. Couple that with being unchainable, and this card is just broken.

 

I'm trying to avoid being like my colleague here, but really, this card is really broken. Same goes for the Field Spell; both are just terribly designed.

 

(Moved to Joke/OP'd cards)