Umbra Posted June 12, 2008 Report Share Posted June 12, 2008 This poem once again is based on my life, but rather than being about unanswered love, it's the other way around. When yesterday was tomorrowwhere I did not yet knew what you thoughtIn protection of nightcovered by darknessyou told me what you felt And I couldn't be happierI had started to like youeven beforeperhaps it was just as a friendperhaps as something more Now, yesterday is yesterdayand a chapter has passedWe perhaps won't meet as often nowbut that doesn't matterBecause you've CATCHED me now... No more worriesabout being left aloneJust responsibilitiesagainst each othernow that I am... CATCHED Sometimes, I think of the futureWhat will happen in five yearsor ten years?Will we ever knowor does it even matter? Now that we are... CATCHED Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted June 12, 2008 Report Share Posted June 12, 2008 I'd like to know your reasoning for using "catched" like that lol, you use it like a punch to the face (so to speak)... I find it tasteful but lacking a zest ya? Point is there but not much. Interesting still.... a follow-up of some sort would be nice ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted June 12, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 12, 2008 The whole CATCHED thing is just for an emphasizing effect. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted June 12, 2008 Report Share Posted June 12, 2008 Lol I realized that.... but I thought there was more.... Either way, you are improving ^_^ and a Good Poem :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Soul Of The Heart Posted June 12, 2008 Report Share Posted June 12, 2008 Good poem. Is this poem based on your relationship? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted June 12, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 12, 2008 Good poem. Is this poem based on your relationship? More around the events directly before it and my thoughts about it. I haven't actually met her since that party, since she was sick today. :( Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sander Posted June 12, 2008 Report Share Posted June 12, 2008 Good poem. Is this poem based on your relationship? More around the events directly before it and my thoughts about it. I haven't actually met her since that party' date=' since she was sick today. :([/quote'] Don't be sad, I'm pretty sure that you'll see her soon ^_^ Also, nice poem ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted June 12, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 12, 2008 Good poem. Is this poem based on your relationship? More around the events directly before it and my thoughts about it. I haven't actually met her since that party' date=' since she was sick today. :([/quote'] Don't be sad, I'm pretty sure that you'll see her soon ^_^ Also, nice poem ^_^ The fact that today was the last day of school in 9th grade and she isn't going to the same school as me next year... Well, I'm sure we will meet. And thanks for your comment. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RiffMaster Alex Posted June 12, 2008 Report Share Posted June 12, 2008 Pretty good poem! It should be Caught though. :/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted June 13, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 13, 2008 I supressed grammar in order to give it a nicer flow. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Willieh Posted June 13, 2008 Report Share Posted June 13, 2008 I think someone likes to use metaphors :)Or maybe i'm too slow to catch literal meanings...Either way I like the poem, you might want to try submitting a poem to a magazine, or maybe even getting one published :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted June 13, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 13, 2008 I think someone likes to use metaphors :)Or maybe i'm too slow to catch literal meanings...Either way I like the poem' date=' you might want to try submitting a poem to a magazine, or maybe even getting one published :D[/quote'] I don't think I used that many metaphors in this one. So maybe it's the second. I don't think I'll try to publish this one, though. But thanks anyway. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Willieh Posted June 13, 2008 Report Share Posted June 13, 2008 When yesterday was tomorrowIn protection of nightcovered by darkness Aren't these metaphors? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted June 13, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 13, 2008 When yesterday was tomorrowIn protection of nightcovered by darkness Aren't these metaphors? They're just strange wordings. They mean exactly what they say. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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