my first card plz be honest and rate

[Tyty224]

[A●O●J]

attack=ATK

graveyard=Graveyard

magic=Spell

other player=your opponent

life points=Life Points

When this card is sent to the Graveyard as a result of magic or trap card=When this card is sent from the field to the Graveyard by the effect of a Spell or Trap Card

In the card maker, click on your finished card. A link should appear under your card. Copy and Paste the link into your thread and the card will appear bigger.Picture is pretty cool, but make sure to give credit to the artist next time.Work on your ocg and grammar. 4.5/10

[Sleepy]

I'll be honest, you should definetely not use attachments. just paste the code in the same place you write. it will be a lot better because I can't see the picture(too small)

[╬「Selatcia」╬]

It needs negative effects. It looks very overpowered.

 

7.5/10

[†Gravity Binder†]

NOT that GOOD.... 6.9/10

[Shocked]

spell = Spell

trap card = Trap Card

Nice!

5/10

[Professor Cobra]

Change level to 10, good pic, shorten the name, raise DEF to 3500, should be:

When this card is destroyed by a Spell or Trap Card controlled by your opponent, inflict 1000 points of damage to your opponent's Life Points.

Change the Type to Dragon. 6/10

[Sammidysam]

OCG errors correct before. 6.1/10

Some newbies make good cards, some do not.

[pitchblack64]

honestly it's good ocg 6.5/10

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i meant it was good and it had ocg problems

[Sleepy]

Change level to 10' date=' good pic, shorten the name, raise DEF to 3500, should be:

When this card is destroyed by a Spell or Trap Card controlled by your opponent, inflict 1000 points of damage to your opponent's Life Points.

Change the Type to Dragon. 6/10

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totally agree. besides it is good that you learned to not use attachments. and also, the monster looks overpowered for a 4500 ATK that only requires 2 tributes and CAN be special summoned in any way.

[Mark Gerardi]

I didn't understand the effect do you mean to inflict damage to the player? or how does one inflict damage to a monster?

[Sleepy]

I didn't understand the effect do you mean to inflict damage to the player? or how does one inflict damage to a monster?

 

I guess in the same way slifer's "second mouth" works. (lowering the ATK and stating it as damage in the efect) is only a guess but it seems to me this way.

[KageKatana]

Its alright