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Korlash, Heir to the BlackBlade

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This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set, this card can only be Special Summoned by Releasing 2 DARK monsters. When this card does Direct Damage to your opponet's Life Points. Inflict 500 damage to your opponent for each DARK monster on your opponet's side of the field.

 

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Please no Negative Comments, Btw Releasing is a other word for Tributing

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K.B. strategist Newbie

K.B. strategist

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You're using master ocg, but "inflict Direct Damage to your opponent's Life Points" is old. "If this card attacks your opponent's Life Points directly..." is new ocg.

 

"on your opponent's side of the field" is also older ocg. "Your opponent controls" or "on your opponent's field" is newer.

 

You mixed up the the set ID; it should be TRC-EN039.

 

Pic is a bit blurry, good ocg and useful effect.

 

8/10

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╬「Selatcia」╬ Newbie

╬「Selatcia」╬

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You're using master ocg' date=' but "inflict Direct Damage to your opponent's Life Points" is old. "If this card attacks your [b']opponent directly[/b]..." is new ocg.

 

"on your opponent's side of the field" is also older ocg. "Your opponent controls" or "on your opponent's field" is newer.

 

You mixed up the the set ID; it should be TRC-EN039.

 

Pic is a bit blurry, good ocg and useful effect.

 

8/10

 

Semi-Fixed.

 

Set ID's have 4 characters before the hyphen.

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I agree on probably wanting to find another pic.

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You're using master ocg' date=' but "inflict Direct Damage to your opponent's Life Points" is old. "If this card attacks your opponent's Life Points directly..." is new ocg.

 

"on your opponent's side of the field" is also older ocg. "Your opponent controls" or "on your opponent's field" is newer.

 

You mixed up the the set ID; it should be TRC-EN039.

 

Pic is a bit blurry, good ocg and useful effect.

 

8/10

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"K.B. Strategist", your idea on the older OCG is wrong.

Proof lies in the recently released "Seed of Flame". It's effect goes as follows (look at the underlined part):

"When this card you control is destroyed by a card effect and sent to the Graveyard, you can Special Summon 1 Level 4 or lower Plant-Type monster, except "Seed of Flame", from your Graveyard. Also, Special Summon 1 "Seed Token" (Plant-Type/EARTH/Level 1/ATK 0/DEF 0) to your opponent's side of the field in Defense Position. This Token cannot be Tributed for a Tribute Summon."

 

So that's definitely not true... but now let's look at the card here. There have been a lot of good comments on this one..

hmmmm..

..Okayyy, problem here.

Since when will your opponent up and LET an 8-star monster attack them? Only if they're a complete idiot...

 

So it takes 2 DARK Monster Tributes (alright, you need to play a DARK Deck), then it deals 500 Direct Damage to your opponent if you inflict Direct Damage with "Korlash", right? Well, that's never gonna happen. Your opponent knows this is an 8-star monster and will stop it in its tracks with a Spell, Trap, or Monster effect. And this card doesn't have enough ATK, DEF, or any effect that will help it clear the field FOR a direct attack in the first place. Not much of a point here... I know it seems kind of original, but originality won't make up for everything.

Technique: C

(Well, sure it could be called original. But it's more DIFFERENT than original. Plus there are lots of holes which take out the usefulness of this card.)

 

As far as wording (OCG) goes, this has quite a few holes. I'll rewrite the effect because I'm lazy and it's easier this way:), and I'll bold the stuff you missed:

"This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by Tributing 2 DARK Monsters. When this card attacks your opponent's Life Points directly, inflict 500 points of Direct Damage to your opponent's Life Points for each DARK Monster on your opponent's side of the field."

Sorry to scare you, but there's no such thing as "master OCG" or whatever it's name was. "Released" is "Tributed" right now. If it changes, then it will be different and THEN you can use it that way in a card effect. But right now it's "Tributed", and it will stay that way.

Wording: D+

(I'm not proud of this. It's kind of a mess, but at least you got the first and last part right!)

 

As far as visuals go, the picture is fine (looks a little 2-dimensional though). The name is good, but you need to reverse your Set ID (TNC-EN039 instead of "EN039-TNC") so it's correct. Also, remove the circulation -- that's only for putting Editions (LIMITED EDITION and 1ST EDITION, namely).

Visuals: B

(fair, like I said, the picture worries me. It's quite 2D, but the picture fits the name, which is also good. Those two make up for most of the score here. The Set ID and circulation are messed up, though.)

 

Average Grade: C

 

It's not terrible, but it's not great. Of course, you're doing well for a 2-star member. Keep looking to improve your wording, and try to make effective cards, just being different and not overpowered aren't enough.

Thanks for looking this review over! :mrgreen:

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