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[spoiler=Effect]If more face-up LIGHT monsters exist on the field than face-up DARK monsters, destroy this card. When this card is sent to the Graveyard, destroy all face-up DARK monsters on the field and shuffle all LIGHT monsters in both players' Graveyards into their owner's Deck. Once per turn, change the Attribute of 1 face-up monster to DARK. While this card is in the Graveyard, all DARK monsters gain 400 ATK. When a LIGHT monster's Attribute is changed to DARK, the controller of that monster takes 500 damage.

 

[spoiler=Quote]The Morning Star. The Prince of Air. He was the highest among us, second only to our Lord. Ah! His beauty! His perfection! His fall... Arrogance. Pride. Envy. How these dark hatreds burned within his soul! And so he was cast. Cast out to the abyss. How the Heavens mourned his passing...

 

[spoiler=Art Credit]Here

 

[spoiler=For those who haven't figured it out...]Yeah, this is Lucifer, more commonly known as Satan.

 

 

OCG change courtesy of Dark Edo

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K gais, time 2 get srs. ROOBRIK OF DOOM! DUN! DUN! DUN! DUNNNN!

 

OCG:

 

If more face-up LIGHT monsters exist on the field than face-up DARK monsters, destroy this card. When this card is sent to the Graveyard, destroy all face-up DARK monsters on the field and shuffle all LIGHT monsters in both players' Graveyards into their owner's Deck. Once per turn, change the Attribute of 1 face-up monster to DARK. While this card is in the Graveyard, all DARK monsters gain 400 ATK. When a LIGHT monster's Attribute is changed to DARK, the controller of that monster takes 500 damage.

 

Errors:

 

If there are more LIGHT monsters than DARK monsters on the field = If more face-up LIGHT monsters exist on the field than face-up DARK monsters

 

"while this card is on the field" isn't necessary since for the effect to activate it must be on the field anyway.

 

"back" isn't necessary.

 

"into their Decks=into their owner's Deck."

 

Monsters on the field need to be face-up for you to know their Attribute. Apply this when making your effects.

 

"you can select 1 monster on the field and change it's Attribute to DARK." = "Once per turn, change the Attribute of 1 face-up monster to DARK."

 

"As long as this card remains in the Graveyard"= "While this card is in the Graveyard"

 

Increase is outdated, gain is used now.

 

deal = inflict, but even so inflict/deal don't work because the context isn't right for it.

 

10/20

 

Name:

 

Prince of Air is too vague of a name if it also just happens the be the king of darkness, hell, and evil. Might want to integrate something about that into the name.

 

3/5

 

Picture:

 

I'm not seeing signs of satanic evil and hatred, I'm just seeing an angel. Looks a little blurred too.

 

10/15

 

Effect Quality:

 

The effect does not suit a WIND Attribute monster, I'd assign a different effect or change the Attribute. Very repetitive in that every sentence somehow involves DARK or LIGHT monsters, making the WIND attribute make even less sense. The only way in which the Attribute does make sense is the fact that it fits the name, which is too vague.

 

14/20

 

Balance:

 

It's extra support to Spellcasters, which've already been steadily gaining support. It'd easily fit into a Spellcaster Deck, while disabling Lightsworn and DARK decks when it's sent to the Graveyard, which is much too easy to do with cards like Foolish Burial.

 

15/20

 

Originality:

 

The idea of changing Attributes is somewhat original, but anti-DARK and Lightsworn effects are nothing new. 8/10

 

Little Details:

 

Serial number and circulation are unrealistic and wouldn't occur on an authentic card. Erase the circulation and use a random Set ID.

 

6/10

 

 

TOTAL: 66/100

 

You can do better.

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Wow. That was bit overwhelming.

 

Ignoring such things as my apparently outdated OCG knowledge for the moment, let me start with Name/Picture/Effect quality.

 

Name: True, I could have made the name something like "Lucifer - Dark Angel of Burning Hell", but that's so....overly done. I was trying to get less of "Satan" and more of "Lucifer". I agree the name could have been better though.

 

Picture: Again, I'm tired of demons. I was aiming for something along the lines of Lucifer pre-fall. And just fyi, just because he's the devil doesn't mean he isn't also beautiful. I'm pretty sure it says somewhere that in fact, he is visually stunning. And I swear, everyone is paranoid about blurring pictures. There's no blur, it was a HQ pic.

 

And that leads me into...

Effect Quality: I'll start with why I chose WIND. Well, yeah, naming it "Prince of Air" had something to do with it, but also, contrary to popular belief, most demons have domain over air and water, not fire (and I'm sick of making DARK monsters). (If you think about it, that makes a degree of sense...why send demons into pits of eternal flame if they like the stuff?) As for the rest of the effect...Again, trying to simulate Lucifer's fall. When Lucifer was cast out, so were the 1/3 of angels that supported him. Translated, I put it as destroying all DARKs on field. Treating the Graveyard as his "hell", it doesn't make much sense to keep all those pretty LIGHT monsters trapped in there...so lets lets send them back to their Decks (which would be heaven, I guess). Satan may be trapped in hell, but he holds influence over earth (which would be the field). So let's give a nice ATK boost to all those DARK monsters inhabiting "earth". Next, there's nothing Satan enjoys more than corrupting a soul. Showing that corruption, change the attribute to DARK. If the soul happens to be that of a believer, all the better! Now we're hurting the Big Guy Upstairs (via LP damage).

 

Balance: This card was pretty much just for fun. I kind of figured it would turn out OP. I think it didn't turn out as bad as I had feared it would though.

 

Little Details: No one ever wins on this stuff. I've seen people put Kazuki's name in the copyright to be more "realistic", and have a bunch of users call them down for it.

I use the circulation for art credit. Always have, always will. My last card I just linked it, but looking at it, the left side looked really empty. lol, so I'm back to putting art credit there. As for the serial number...every single card I have ever made has had 1337 in the bottom left corner. All the cards I ever will make will have that in the corner. That's not going to change in an attempt to be more "realistic".

 

Originality: Not everyone can do something completely new and revolutionizing every time...

The idea behind this effect may not be the most original, but the effect itself is (to my knowledge) one of a kind.

 

OCG: Corrections are always welcome, although this does dent my confidence in OCG knowledge a bit, lol...

I will keep in mind to use gain and inflict now (although personally, I still think increase sounds better).

 

As for the "You can do better." at the end...

First, thanks for having faith in my ability XD

Second, to quote Hunter, "I can't top myself every time"

 

And...

"Roobrik" haha. That took me a couple of seconds to get. XD

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