(Improved) Coming of the Angelics

[lpbomb]

Now I inproved them a bit but I don't have any fancy photoshops or anything so there was nothing I could do about the pics........

 

 

 

 

 

DISCLAMER: All images on the cards hosted above are not mine and all credit goes to thier origional owners. They were all found at: http://images.google.com/imghp?um=1&hl=en&safe=off&btnG=Search+Images

[Sleepy]

first card:

FLIP: Destroy 1 monster on the field and return this card to your Deck.

 

Second card:

listing materials is not the condition of a synchro.. that's suppose to be a fusion

 

third card:

you don't have an idea of how to use synchros do you? -_-" you don't have a tuner for them..

When this card battles with another monster, change target monster to face up Attack Position. If you used this effect, send the top card from your Deck to the Graveyard.

 

fourth card:

oppenent = opponent

don't need these ---------> " "

 

fifth card:

Increase this card's ATK and DEF BY 300 points for each monster in your Graveyard.

I suggest you make its ATK/DEF 0. or just leave one "?" in each.

 

sixth card:

graveyard = Graveyard

 

seventh card:

Send 2 or more Fusion Material Monsters that are listed on an Angelic Fusion Monster Card from your hand or field to the Graveyard, and Special Summon the Angelic Fusion Monster from your Extra Deck.

 

I'm getting lazy so..I;ll probably continue later :) 7/10

you got pretty good pics and decent effects for a Level 1 ^-^ half the new people do divine beasts with 9000 ATK so.... congratulations :)

I see you rearranged your cards ^-^" ..well... it kinda is understandable what I wrote for which card ... I suppose :D

[lpbomb]

Thanks for the comments and suggestions. Luckly I saved the pics so all I gotta do is rewrite the effects ^^. And no, I have never even dueled someone with a synchro, let alone actually owned one.

 

 

Anyway.....gotta go to bed I'll do it tommorw. Anybody else just leave a comment/suggestion and I'll come back to it in the morning.

[Chevalier]

Grammar/OCG Errors. Pics could use some work. I realize this is probably your first set so I won't go into too much depth in my criticism.

[lpbomb]

I suck at grammer DX

[Chevalier]

First card "Destroy" instead of "Distroy"

[╬「Selatcia」╬]

Some of the pics are overused.

 

sleepy pointed out your errors.

 

Some of the effects could be more interesting... or at least longer.

 

7/10

[lpbomb]

Thank you all for the comment ^^ I will work on them.

[lpbomb]

Okay I tried to work on them a bit......please tell me what else needs to be inproved (Besides the pics)

[Sleepy]

Gordon - The Angelic Breaker:

1 "Angelic" Monster + 1 "Angelic" Monster

Attack Position

Im not sure how to reword the effect but you don't need "off" in there ^-^

 

so far its almost your deck there :D the rating is going up from my part 7/10---------->8.5/10

:):):):):):):):)

[lpbomb]

Thanks. Fixed it ^^ I'm also trying to look on photobucket for better pics and so far I've founds some good ones XD