schattenwolf Posted December 31, 2008 Report Share Posted December 31, 2008 Hello people. One more card of mine, would be nice if you could rate it or give me a feedback or critique. Here she comes:[spoiler=Soul of Music][spoiler=Effect][Fairy / Effect]This card cannot be destroyed by battle. This card cannot be Tributed by a Tribute Summon. During either Player's End Phase, place 1 "Music Note Token" on your field for each monster that was destroyed this turn. "Music Note Token" in Spell and Trap Card Zones are treated as Continuos Spell Cards and "Music Note Token" in Monster Card Zones are treated as monsters (Fairy-Type/Light/1 Star/ATK 0/DEF 0). "Music Note Token" cannot be destroyed by battle. "Music Note Token" cannot be Tributet by a Tribute Summon. If you control 3 or more "Music Note Tokens" during your Standby Phase, you can pay 1000 Life Points and switch control of this card to your opponent to destroy 2 "Music Note Tokens" you control. If you have to place a "Music Note Token" while all your Monster, Spell and Trap Card Zones are occupied, destroy all cards on your field, except this card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadowbreath Posted December 31, 2008 Report Share Posted December 31, 2008 I like it, interesting effect and a token using card nice. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
schattenwolf Posted December 31, 2008 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2008 Thanks. I'm sure that I have to change the effect text, but I don't know how and where, so I wait for OCG pro's to tell my where and what ^^ I wonder if "(Fairy-Type/Light/1 Star/ATK 0/DEF 0) if on a Monster Card Zone, (Continuos Spell Card / No effect) if on a Spell or Trap Card Zone." would be better, but I think both ways to write it could be wrong... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tommers2008 Posted December 31, 2008 Report Share Posted December 31, 2008 i find that effect very confusing i cant understand what you mean... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
schattenwolf Posted December 31, 2008 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2008 Yup, this is why I need an OCG pro to help me write the effect correctly ^^' (Is it realy so confusing?) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tommers2008 Posted December 31, 2008 Report Share Posted December 31, 2008 i cant make sense of the part with the token... i really just cant make sense of it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eternal Rival Posted December 31, 2008 Report Share Posted December 31, 2008 Hmmmmm... Change "During End Phase" to "During your End Phase" Now with the Tokens... Make it so the token shows like this, (Fairy-Type/LIGHT/1 Star/0 ATK/0 DEF) Then put this after it.If all monster card zones on your field are occupied, you may Special Summon this token to your Spell and Trap Card Zone as a Continous Spell Card instead. That's probably the best way I can think of to word the tokens, as it's quite difficult to word such a strange card. Good Work! :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
chaos_demon Posted December 31, 2008 Report Share Posted December 31, 2008 NICE! it fit purfectly with the ojama combo of filling the opoonents field 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
schattenwolf Posted December 31, 2008 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2008 Thank you very much, Eternal Rival (once again xD) But now you made a mistake :3 It's never "may", always "can" ^^ Thanks for the other feedbacks. Edit: So, changed it now. I didn't do it exatly as you told my, Eternal Rival, could you tell me if I wrote the sentences right? It was no mistake that I wrote "During End Phase" instead of "During your End Phase", because this effect is activated on each End Phase. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mister Sir Posted December 31, 2008 Report Share Posted December 31, 2008 Work on your Spelling. Please. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
schattenwolf Posted December 31, 2008 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2008 Sorry, I usualy play with german cards so I never saw many english effects. (Also I usualy speak german) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sleepy Posted December 31, 2008 Report Share Posted December 31, 2008 This card cannot be destroyed by battle (Battle Damage is aplied normally). This card cannot be Tributed by a Tribute Summon. During either player's End Phase, place 1 "Music Note Token" on your field for each monster that was destroyed this turn. "Music Note Tokens" in Spell and Trap Card Zones are treated as Continuous Spell Cards and "Misic Note Tokens" in Monster Card Zones are treated as monsters (Fairy-Type/LIGHT/Level 1/ATK 0/DEF 0). "Music Note Tokens" cannot be destroyed by battle (Battle Damage is aplied normally). "Music Note Tokens" cannot be Tributed by a Tribute Summon. If you control 3 or more "Music Note Tokens" during your Standby Phase, you can pay 1000 Life Points and switch control of this card to your opponent to destroy 2 "Music Note Tokens" you control. that's how I think I would write it although I feel like I wrote extra words I shouldn't have written.. I like that effect... 8.5/10 :DI know what you are talking about.. I usually speak in spanish :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
schattenwolf Posted December 31, 2008 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2008 Thank you very much, that helps a lot ^^ (I didn't wrote "Tributed by a Tribute Summon" because it also can't be tributed by cards like mystik wok the way I wrote it. Also I won't add the "(Battle Damage is aplied normally)", because those realy are extra words which aren't needed.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sleepy Posted December 31, 2008 Report Share Posted December 31, 2008 okay :) ... for now.. the best person at correcting that I know is DeMeNTeD... hope he's online and see this thread... so wait for him :D I know this may be longer but..maybe, only maybe.. there could be a posibility that its like this:This card cannot be Tributed by a Tribute Summon or by a card effect. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
schattenwolf Posted December 31, 2008 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2008 Well, I changed it now and it's now by a Tribute Summon, so I can at least be sure that it's right that way ^^ Also I added a little extra on the end of the effect ^-^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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