Huntar! Posted June 3, 2009 Report Share Posted June 3, 2009 [align=center]Avatar the Last Airbender-Tales of Betrayal- -Background-[This story takes place in the Avatar World, shortly after Prince Zuko becomes Fire Lord Zuko. He ended up with May. For an entire year, Zuko ruled the Fire nation along side May, his girlfriend and fiance. They were to be married the next summer. But for an entire year, Zuko remembered Katara. The beautiful Water Tribe girl who had won his heart. Zuko loves May. He will til' the day he dies but he realizes that he has feelings for her like a sister. Not a wife. So Zuko embarks on a scheme that will tear the world in half, all for the hand of one 16 year old girl from the south pole.] [spoiler=Chapter 1: Recognition of Nostalgy] The Fire Lord awakes in the morning from his massive bed, with gold plated trim, and fine silk sheets, does his usual routine of bathing, getting dressed, eating his morning meal of assorted meats and grains from all over the world, then visiting his fiance in her room, down the hall in the palace. He is forbidden to sleep in the same bed with her until they are married. But Zuko was fine with that. He enjoyed spending time with May, because they got along famously and she adored him.But Zuko as we all know is not one for the everyday. He is an overachiever. He wants more than what he has. He wants something different from the everyday. He wants to change his life. The first thing that aggrivated him to no end, was his schedule. His advisors, priests, servents, and masters never left him alone. He was 18. He wanted his privacy. So, that morning he ordered everyone to have a paid vacation to Ember Island for a week, while he takes a rest from his routine.Once he did that, he could finally be alone with May. His fiance that he was to marry in several months. After spending several days straight with her, he reailized something that he hadn't before. May was evil. Behind the pretty face was a mean, vindictive, cruel, heartless, jabroni. And Zuko met his senses one day. He took a hike through the forest behind his palace. He liked it there. It was dark, peaceful, and it let him be in touch with nature as it was. It let him get his head straight.He realized through meditation and days of hard reasoning, that he didn't love May afterall. And that there was only one person that he truely adored, Katara. But how was he to handle this delecate situation? If he broke May's heart, there is a chance he might lose his life. If she finds out about Katara, she might kill her from jealousy.But where to find her? The last time he saw her was at his enoguration ceremony as Fire Lord. Nearly a year ago that day. He had recently seen Aang, and even Sokka, but Katara was nowhere to be seen. She could be at the Waterbending academy at the north pole, where she teaches, visiting family at the south pole, helping rebuild the Earth nation, or advising the Earth King as she seldom did. But Zuko was smart. Last time he saw her, she was with Aang. Not with Aang, WITH Aang. If he could find the avatar, he could find katara.So, he packed his bags, and told May that he was leaving on an expedition to explore the world. He took his uncle Iroh, the swordmaster, and the fire bending sage, with him. And a small crew of 20. It was important that it look like an expidition, not a stalking party. So port by port, he left the crew, until only the masters, his uncle, and himself remained upon the ship. He raised his sail, his large fire nation insignia emblazed upon the flag. He set sail for the North Pole. The waters were calm. The wind was blowing. And once again, fire burned within Zuko's eyes as he was once again hunting the avatar. But this time, not for the avatar. But this time, for her.[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Haseo Posted June 8, 2009 Report Share Posted June 8, 2009 Seems like a nice twist to the story. I will like to read the second chapter! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Soul Legacy Posted June 10, 2009 Report Share Posted June 10, 2009 Intresting......... Never knew you wrote fics =] I'll be keeping an eye on this ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted June 10, 2009 Report Share Posted June 10, 2009 impressive chapter Hunter. Though if I may, could you please try to post the next chapter aligned to the left? Not that I can't handle this it's just that it gets disorienting at times. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Huntar! Posted June 13, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 13, 2009 ok guys. I'll try to write another chapter today. ;D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted June 13, 2009 Report Share Posted June 13, 2009 will it go up by the end of the day too, Hunter? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr. Hyde Posted June 14, 2009 Report Share Posted June 14, 2009 GAHH!! Not cool. Katar + Aang forever. LOL!I can't wait for the second chapter. And if Aang has to fight Zuko again, this'll be a heartbreaker. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted June 14, 2009 Report Share Posted June 14, 2009 Despite being a fan of Kataang and Zumai, this is okay, although it has quite a few problems. 1) As Ragnarok stated, it would be better if it was aligned to the left.2) Please separate into paragraphs more clearly.3) "Nostalgia", "servants", "delicate", "inauguration", and "Mai" are all spelled wrong.4) The "swordsmaster" and the "Firebending sage" lack names.5) There was absolutely no dialogue6) It's a Zutara Fanfic I hope to see Sokka, Toph, Suki, Ty Lee, Ozai, and Azula later in this if possible. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted June 14, 2009 Report Share Posted June 14, 2009 Oh I don't really care about the paragraph separation, that's not as disorienting to me, though if you could do that too, I've appreciate it, Hunter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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