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There is Weather Reports, Foe Fiction, and Phantom's Divination's. These topics showed us that we have great, good, and terrible writers here on YCM. But now there is a new review topic. As a Pokemon will review FanFics. Pichu's reviews. A new generation of reviewing has come.

 

I shall take requests.

 

[spoiler=#1: When Worlds Collide by PikMan]

We start our first review with When World Collide.

 

Episode 1-Laser Tag, You're It!/Part 1

 

We start the story with a retarded name...

 

Welcome to Gameville. Yeah, the name’s kinda dumb,

 

NO! REALLY![/sarcasm]

 

but I had to call it something, and Videoland was already taken. So, here we are.

 

There was a Videoland.....

 

One day in Gameville, Jacob was walking down the street with his roommates, Torchic and Kirby. Everything seemed normal enough;

 

Yeah! Real normal! You're walking down the street with a black hole and a Pokemon. That's normal alright!

 

The sky was partly cloudy, the plants were carnivorous, plumbers jumped on mushrooms with eyes,

 

I believe their names are, M and L.

 

and guys without arms could carry stuff.

 

WHOOP-DE-DA! Give `em a prize!

 

Then they heard the familiar call of “Eggs tree! Eggs tree!” It was Homestar. He was doing his part time job as a newspaper boy. He stopped next to Jacob and chucked a newspaper at them, and ran off.

 

Nice town. All you need is an emo Pikachu and Gameland or whatever is perfect!

 

Jacob picked it up. “Whoa, there’s going to be a Lasertag championship in 3 weeks!” Said Jacob.

 

Lasertag.... lasertag.... Why can't it be something better like..... OH! Ann 10 comes to town!

 

“It seems like you’re hyped”, said Torchic,

 

HOLY S*** IT TALKS! But wait... I'm a Pichu and I can talk. What do you think Ann?

 

HOLY S*** IT TALKS!

 

Well she is a human!

 

who had the ability to speak English after a run-in with Iggy Koopa. “It’s just too bad you got kicked off the Lasertag team last year.”

 

YOU WERE KICKED OFF!

 

Jacob chose that time to have a brain fart. “Wha-?!” He asked. “Don’t you remember what happened last year?” Replied Kirby.

 

No we don't, marshmallow! TELL US!

 

Then Jacob had a vivid flashback of the moment: In Gameville, the Lasertag rules state that if a Team Captain gets gunned down, that team loses. Jacob was the team captain,

 

Smart idea! Giving the human the spot of team captain!

 

but Rayman was the brains behind him. Rayman explained their plan. “All right, we’re gonna have Kirby and Mario flank left while me and Jacob head straight. I’ll take off from Jacob to cover his rear while Link helps Jacob gun down Bowser. So Tails, how’s our plan?”

 

Bowser is an easy target! He's FAT!

 

Tails stepped up. “Our chances of success are about 2,846 to 1.”

 

So you have a human, a bunny killer, a black hole, a plumber, a warrior, and a fox with two tails. GREAT TEAM! Not...

 

“That’s better than we usually do”, said Rayman.

 

Jacob (Who had been daydreaming that he was in the bathroom)

 

Gross... just gross....

 

suddenly shouted “All right, time’s up chumps, let’s do this!” He grabbed his gun in his hand, and as he bolted out he shouted at the top of his lungs “LEERRROOOOOOOOOY JENKINS!!!”

 

Leeroy Jenkins?

 

I have no idea who he is.

 

He was barely 10 yards away from his team when he tripped on thin air. No, it wasn’t air- It was Larry Koopa, Bowser’s 2nd youngest child.

 

With who?

 

As Larry aimed his gun, he taunted, “The force is strong with you, Jacob, but you are not a Jedi yet.” Bang.

 

I thought he was a koopa, not Yoda!

 

Then Jacob snapped back into the present. "No, I don't", he lied. “That figures”, said an unbelieving Kirby.

 

It just hit me that Kirby can't talk ether.

 

Jacob is roommates are two characters who can't talk.

 

And he thinks he can magically make them talk?!?!

 

Just then, Mega Man and his sister, Roll, walked by.

 

First humans, then talking Pokemon, the walking gumball, the mean paperboy, and now robots....

 

(And please don’t ask me to explain Roll’s name, I’m not in the mood.) “Hey guys!” Said Mega Man. “What’s up?” Roll walked over and saw the article in the newspaper about the Lasertag championship. “This is about the Leeroy Jacob incident, isn’t it?” She said.

 

Now it's Leeroy Jacob? What happened to Leeroy Jenkins?

 

Before they even had a chance to answer, Roll continued. “Well, good news for Jacob; The legislation was passed so that people cannot get kicked off the team, so Jacob’s back in.”

 

No can get kicked off but Jacob.

 

Jacob, Kirby, and Torchic had a simultaneous “WHA-?!”

 

Can't talk!!!

 

The look in Mega Man’s eyes made it clear he wasn’t enthusiastic about the idea either. “Hey don’t look at me, it was Roll’s idea to ask Dedede.

 

How in hell did I get in the story!?!?!

 

Ah, well. See you in 3 weeks.” Both of the androids left.

 

Back to the human and the two who can't talk.

 

Once they were out of earshot, Mega Man decided to mess with Roll a little bit. “You just suggested that to Dedede because you like Jacob!” Roll blushed. “Wha- No I don’t!”

 

Here-here! Here-Here! To the people and talking gum of my land! Roll likes Jacob!

 

Oh Dedede!

 

Isn't he funny?

 

Mega Man smirked. “That’s fine, your secrets safe with me!” Roll groaned, then blushed some more.

 

Meanwhile, one of them awkward silences fell upon Jacob and his friends. Kirby broke the silence after a full 2 minutes. “Welp, we’re boned.”

 

They're not talking! YAY!

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Thanks to my guest stars,

King Dedede and Ann Tennyson!

 

 

[spoiler=#2: Yugioh: We Who Are About to Duel by Resonating Lust]

Our second review is a request. We now review Yugioh: We Who Are About to Duel

 

Prologue

 

One of the stories that have a prologue! This will be good!

 

It all happened so fast. Who knew the joining of two world, two dimensions, could be so anti-climatic. The Government...

 

Sucks...

 

They tried to bring an end to the war. They tried to end Tragoedia. They learned, however, to not test the hand of Death. The claw released its great power, and the entire world..all of the living beings died.

 

This seems really emo... I'm guessing we have another emo on YCM!

 

Their spirits searching frantically for bodies to once again be alive in.

 

But everyone is DEAD. Every single being on What-ya-mah-call-it is dead.

 

They found them in this dimension. The human dimension.

 

Try the Pokemon dimension. At least you'll have powers as a Pokemon.

 

The souls joined and fused with those who where compatible, by size, power, mind, or even feelings.

 

Does that mean the human dimension is filled with emos?

 

However, none of this was even noticed by this dimension. Life went on as normal. While some people have changed in looks, or abilities, they are not noticed, as the fusion has seemed to had an affect on memories.

 

Believe normal is walking down a street with a talking Torchic and a talking gumball. Isn't that right guys?

 

Yes it is!

 

In Game.... Place...

 

So with this, a new world has been created. A world made up of two different worlds.

 

A new WORLD. Then there's new WORLDS. Make up your mind already!

 

And as sad as it is for them, the Government

 

Still sucks......

 

on the monster dimension had succeeded in destroying Tragoedia...or so they believe.

 

*Pause for Dramatic Effect*

 

In a tall building not far from the center of the city, a group of people are sitting in a room with the windows open, around a circular table.

 

Nice description.

 

Most are yelling at each other, apparently in arguments they are unable to reconcile. One man is sitting with his chin resting on his cupped hands. He has grown increasingly annoyed by the arguing.

 

Who wouldn't!?!?!

 

But aren't they emo?

 

They get mad at everything!

 

Kirby has no idea what emo means...

 

"Thats enough!" he says. "The time has come. The world will know what the meaning of true power is.

 

The true power is a small yellow hamster named, Pichu!

 

Thank you, Mister!

 

The world will fall under a new order. Most of all, my friends, the world...Will be ours. Let us begin to build our army. Now go, Xan. Bring me my soldiers!"

 

The guy's name is Xan.... Most people make names up like that...

 

A young man, who looks to be no more than 21, steps forward. "Yes, my lord. I shall bring you no less than the best."

He stands smiling as the wind blows his white hair.

 

He seems like a brave young man that wishes to fulfill his boss'es orders.

 

A young Alex Davis is walking during the early morning. Today is the day he is supposed to have his Entrance Exam into the Eastern Duel Academy.

 

At least it's not the Western Duel Academy on the West Side... Get mugged on thw to schoold and back!

 

Excited by the opportunity, he looks on as he comes closer academy arena. The bright sun

 

MY EYES!

 

only helped to make the smile on his face more apparent. After waiting for over four months, he was finally invited to join in the exam. He is going to do whatever is takes not waste this chance.

 

He'll have sex for money.

 

As he walks up to the front door of the giant arena, he takes a second to think. Could he do it? If he did, what class would he be in? As he thinks to himself, a cool breeze blows by. It blows his black hair,

 

Black hair+soul from an emo world=emo

 

and the flowers around the arena. The flowers soaking up the sunlight, and the birds singing in the sky. The calmness of the moment calms his nerves. He opens the door in front of him, and enters.

 

And the Prologue ends with a hanger. I like this piece of writing a lot. Now I must read the rest of this FanFic

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Thanks to my guests:

Torchic and Kirby!

 

 

[spoiler=#3: Ann 10: New Protecter of Earth by ► Jolta ◄]

My third review is from Ann 10: New Protecter of Earth

 

We now start my third review.

 

Chapter 3 - Sssschool

 

There is three more S's then there should be.... *DUN-DUN-DUUUAAAAA!*

 

Every superhero needs to go to school. Including Ann Tennyson, now declared awesome. Like all of you, she has to go to school every weekday. Pretty obvious, anyways, lets get to the story.

 

But I just started Summer Vacation. Wow! Ann is in summer school!

 

Don't make fun! I don't test well.....

 

Her outfit in the previous 3 chapters, was a rather sleazy outfit. In school, you don’t wear sleazy outfits, because those are awesome. Instead, you wear less revealing clothes.

 

In Pokemon school, all girls wear revealing clothes! Then again we are Pokemon and we don't wear clothes. Right big bro?

 

Going to school with no clothes, BRING ON THE LADIES!

 

You pervert Pikachu!

 

She wears a yellow, long sleeve shirt with red stripes. Or was it a red one with yellow stripes? But whatever, no diff, don’t care about colour. As long as NO ONE sees her Omnitrix.

 

What's wrong with people seeing a watch that doesn't tell time!?!?

 

Hello! I turn into aliens!

 

And your point?

 

She’s still wearing her red skirt though.

 

*Pikachu tries to look under Ann's skirt.*

 

YOU PERV!

 

“Oh effing gawd, school.

 

Swearing! This is where it gets good!

 

I’ll use my Aliens on those bullies…” Ann thought as she nervously went to school. “Who should I use? Crystal Skull? Killing Time? Polaron?” she thought. She had to eventually go to school.

 

She was going to be late, so Ann slammed down her watch and transformed into Killing Time. The superfast alien sped to school. When she was an inch away from school, she changed back to Ann.

 

Because when you get an Omnitrix, you magically unlock Master Control.

 

“Oh look, smexilicious, its Angelina Tennyson!” a voice from behind boomed. It was William and Sam, the school bullies.

 

They're bullies and calling her sexy....

 

“Give us your lunch money, redhead,” William said. “Yeah, or we’ll beat you to the pulp!” Sam continued. “Don’t interrupt,” William wailed at Sam.

 

My mom always said not to hit girls unless they hit you first. HIT SOMEONE ALREADY ANN! I WANT SOME ACTION!

 

“I’ll be right back,” Ann said. She went to the nearby girl’s bathroom. The duo stalked her. Lolicons.

 

William and Sam scream Pikachu.

 

What?

 

We're calling you a perv like my school bullies!

 

Ann went into a cubicle. The duo were trying to peep, but failed. Ann noticed their presence. “Gee Tee Eff Oh, pervs!” the redhead- I mean, pinkhead, or whatever, screamed. “This’ll teach them to trifle with me,” Ann thought. She slammed down her watch. Transformation began.

 

Time to change into a drawn alien.

 

Jolta drew that, not me!

 

Yep! I drew all of Ann's aliens!

 

No answer...

 

Her bewbs grew flatter. OWAIT- she was already flat-chested.

 

Thank you for sharing.. I guess.

 

Her arms were transformed into wide bird-like wings, covered with scales. Her whole body was covered with scales. Her teeth became jaws and her body became Serpentine. “LEVIATHAN!”

 

Transformation description! I like that!

 

[spoiler=Leviathan, able to manipulate Envy.]

 

 

A snake with wings! Does it fart butterflies?

 

A mammoth, motherfuxing sea serpent emerged from the cubicle Ann was in. “RUUUN!” William yelled like a little girl. So did Sam.

 

Harecord Comdey

 

“Ssssso, you dare trifle with Leviathan, boyssss?”

 

I would! You big old snake thingy!

 

Shut up you freak!

 

Leviathan questioned. He shot electric bolts at the boys through his mouth. Or ssshould I sssay, ssshot electric boltssss. “I am the ssssmexiest person you’ve taken on.

 

Got that right!

 

Facccce my wrath!” boy, Leviathan sounds very annoying, I like that.

 

“What are you going to do with ussss, snakeface?” teased Sam. “Sssso, you wanna fight? Very well, ssssuckers! Tornado Ssssmackdown!” Leviathan spun around and around and around and around. He spun so quickly, he himself became a humongous sepent tornado. It carried Sam and William.

 

Good-Bye little boys who scream like girls!

 

I hate those boys!

 

“Oh my, ssso you are having fun like me? Ssssit down and we will have ssssome more…” Leviathan cleared his throat, “Owait, you can’t. Sssss.”

 

And we bring an end to a chapter where a sssssnake talksssss like thisssss! I think this FanFic is worth reading. I can't wait to read more adventurs of Ann 10!

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Thanks to my guesses:

Big Bro Pikachu, Ann Tennyson, and ► Jolta ◄

 

 

[spoiler=#4: Rosario + Vampire/The Forbidden Seal by bakupenguin]

My forth review is from the story Rosario + Vampire / The Forbidden Seal

 

 

Chapter 1

 

Wait, wait, wait, wait! No name to the chapter!?!?!

 

"Headmaster! Headmaster you must here this! It's...It's Tsukune!" Said Shizuka as she rushed into the Headmaster's office. "He's transformed and no one can stop him!"

 

Who's transformed?

 

I bet I could stop him!

 

Everyone meet my brother, Raichu.

 

"Again?"

 

What do you mean again? I'm so confused!

 

Said the Headmaster, "Alright, I'll go stop him." The headmaster walks calmly out of the room at toward the cafeteria where the awakened Tsukune was holding a werewolf by the neck.

 

I'm thinking this is like the Twilight Saga. I hate Twilight 100%!

 

Beside him was Mizore laying on the ground unconscious bleeding badly. Suddenly, the headmaster jumped forward and placed a crucifix symbol on Tsukune's head, forcing him to return to his natural form. The werewolf ran off, while Tsukune fell down unconscious.

 

Werewolves, vampires, and the headmaster who is like a wizard in one place. This also seems like a mash-up between Wizards of Waverly Place and Twilight.

 

In the nurse's office, the badly bruised Tsukune was just waking up."Uhhhh, where am I?"

 

In a nurse's office, duh!

 

Said Tsukune while rubbing his head. "Owww..." "Your in the nurse's office, Tsukune" Said the nurse,"And by the looks of it, your going to be here quite awhile." "What happened to Mizore?" "He asked, looking around. "She's right over there," Said the nurse pointing to a stall. "She's badly hurt, but recovering quickly." "That's a relief." Said Tsukune. "Yes, but your

 

VAMPIRE!

 

Please tell us!

 

... never mind. But what is my true form?" Replied the shaken Tsukune. "You will have to find out for yourself."

 

He's a vampire! He has to be!

 

Said the Headmaster, "But for now, I'll leave you to recover and get some rest." with that, the Headmaster left the room. "Tsukune! You have some visitors!" Said the nurse. "Uhhh...ok. Bring them in i guess." He said. "TSSSSUUUKUUUUNNEEEE!!!!" Yelled Kurumu as Yukari, Moka and she entered the room. "ARE YOU ALRIGHT??!!"

 

Tsukune has some fangirls!

 

She yelled as giving him the usual Kurumu-Hug. "CAANNNTTT......Breathe!" Gasped Tsukune as he was struggling for breath. Luckily, Yukari gave Kurumu the frying pan treatment

 

FRYING PAN TREATMENT!?!?!? Sounds painful. But it might be good if there was some pancakes on that frying pan!

 

as it smacked her on the head. "Cut it out you guys! Tsukune and Mizore are trying to recover! said Moka. Hey Tsukune, is Mizore alright?" "-You bet I am!"

 

Mizore had too much sugar as the next sentence states:

 

Shouted the hyper Mizore as she jumped off her bed. "Thank you so much Tsukune for saving me." She said in a much quieter voice.

 

This is like getting high. You're all crazy at first then you crash and rest.

 

"It was nothing." said Tsukune. "We're so sorry we weren't there when it happened." Moka said is a saddened voice, "this guy wanted us to show us where the lockers were at precisely the same time as the incident. I wonder if it was all planned...?"

 

*Dramatic Music*

 

We may never know!

 

"But who would want to hurt my Tsukune?!" Said Kurumu.

 

I would.

 

At an abandoned warehouse,

"When are we gonna finish them off, boss?" Said the werewolf to a shadowy figure "Later," Said the mysterious stranger. "Let's see his true form first."

 

I'm seeing the next generation of Twilight here.

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Thanks to my guest star,

Raichu!

 

[spoiler=#5: Skayne A Pokemon Romance by Yae/WARNING! Contains SLASH]

My next review comes from a SLASH story called Skayne A Pokemon Romance

 

My next review contains SLASH.

 

Note: This Fan-fiction does contain SLASH: That is' date=' homosexual romantic content. If this offends you, DO NOT READ this fan fiction.[/size']

 

That also means that you shouldn't read this review if this offends you. Now we must start.

 

Skayne: Prelude

 

Skarlet's eyes slowly opened, then quickly closed again as the almost sickening warmth of the sun poured down upon him, his dark curtains offering him little protection. But while normally, he'd have grumbled and moaned, Skarlet almost jumped to his feet, excited. This was the day he'd spent the last 13 years waiting for, He'd finally get his first Pokemon.

 

I hope we get some background behind Skarlet before the rest of the story. Is he in Kanto or Sinnoh? Is he getting a regular starter Pokemon?

 

He sat up in the double bed he was lucky enough to have, it was almost 'girly' in appearance, purple bedclothes adorned it, and the pillows were very slightly frilled around the edges.

 

As we see, Skarlet is a boy, but he's feminine.

 

Skarlet stood, and peered around his room. Every inch of it's white wall was seemingly covered in pictures of musicians that according to anyone you could ask 'only emos could like'.

 

Since I am emo, I know all these bands.

Panic at the Disco, Cobra Starship, 3OH!3, etc.

 

And more importantly to the boy, posters of famous contestants and signed replica contest ribbons.

He trod across the soft, purple carpet that matched his bedclothes to a tee. He threw the poster-covered doors of his closet open. In his excitement he grabbed a pair of his signature red skinny-legged jeans and slid them readily over the black boxers that were his sleepwear.

 

Skarlet also dresses emo. At this point it makes me wonder if he is emo.

 

Skarlet turned to the full-length mirror that hung on the inside of the door. His hair was a frightful mess, the red of his fringe standing out on bizarre angles,

 

Part of his hair is red. Skarlet reads emo all over. I see that Skarlet dresses some-what like me. I have purple hair over my eye.

 

his jeans however looked good on him, accepting this, he reached for the wrack that hang on the other door, removing a belt and several chains. He slid the belt in around his waist, adjusting it several times lining the buckle up perfectly with the fly.

 

EMO

 

Some would call Skarlet a bit obsessive over little things like this, and they'd probably be right, he was very absorbed with his physical appearance. He clipped each chain to his pants with care, particularly his favorite. A long silver chain with a large heart shaped pendent of similar silver with a black stone of the same shape embedded in it. Staring into the mirror, satisfied to a degree, Skarlet reached for his shirt. It was his a long sleeved black shirt that sat almost skin tight against his body, it had no collar and was opened by a gritty, yet appealing zipper. Skarlet had soon finished dressing and was prepared to leave.

 

We end the first part of this Chapter with Skarlet getting up and dressing like an emo. But is Skarlet emo? We need answers.

 

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The boy wound his way through the streets of his home town of Saffron City, many people looking as his red and white heeled boots fell on the stones of the foot path.

 

Background info! He is in Kanto! And he has emo shoes.

 

Skarlet had chosen to adopt the 'emo' look knowing that this would be his fate.

 

My question has been answered! He isn't emo!

 

He didn't mind people looking at him, in fact he saw it as a triumph, he was different and he was proud of that. To Skarlet, turning heads was never a bad thing. And he was glad to be seen as unique.

 

Skarlet is an outgoing boy! This makes this a FanFic worth reading!

 

The boy was paying very little attention to where he was actually going, he was too excited about what would happen when he got there! His very first Pokemon was waiting there for him! It was that lack of attention that caused Skarlet to not only miss his destination, but to stub his to on the mailbox of the breeder's neighbor. Skarlet cursed rather loudly before turning, feeling both stupid, and and excited, almost to the point of being sick with anticipation.

 

What Pokemon is the breeder breeding? We must find out!

 

He'd arrived he was mere moments away from obtaining his first pokemon. He approached the quaint little house, its white-painted wooden walls, he knew, contained an Eevee for him.

 

An Eevee! He is going to get a Eevee for a starter Pokemon!

 

What Skarlet didn't know these walls contained was true love. Yes, this was a fateful day by his own design, but Skarlet couldn't possibly have foretold what would happen this morning.

 

Since this has SLASH, I bet that Skarlet is going to fall in love with a boy.

 

The boy approached the door to the house, his finger slowly descended, pressing into the doorbell, he was almost nervous, for a reason he couldn't identify for the life of him, as the bell rung out, the sound of a litter of Eevee pups responded, it was among the cutest things Skarlet had ever heard.

 

If only it was little Pichu mice that responded....

 

He let out a sigh, feeling content already as he heard foot steps approaching the elegantly carved and painted wooden door. Skarlet's smile had seldom, if ever been wider as the breeder opened the door to her warm, well-maintained home.

 

An Eevee and true love? I must read on!

 

"Good morning. Why, don't you look... Interesting?" The woman's hesitation was clear and pointed.

 

We now have some dialogue in the story!

 

She didn't approve of Skarlet's attire, but few people did. Skarlet simply beamed up at the woman and answered softly.

"I try ma'am, now, My name's Skarlet. I'm here about an Eevee, is there a chance you could show them to me?" The woman seemed almost reluctant, but eventually she stepped to the side, revealing to Skarlet, the pristine white walls adorned with pictures of younger people, presumably relatives, and of the woman's prize-winning Eevees.

 

This woman takes care of her house nicely.

 

Skarlet noticed that there were multiple pairs of shoes by the door, including one pare of Converse sneakers.

 

Another emo-like guy!

 

They were of a size similar to his own boots, which he was now removing without the prompting of the elderly woman, who seemed surprised, she removed the thick glasses from her face and rubbed at them, before re-fitting them over her button nose.

 

We now find out that the woman is older.

 

The woman was a former coordinator many years ago, and her body would have once been very fitting for the job, it was a stark reminder to Skarlet that he wouldn't be a star coordinator forever, if he even managed to follow his dream at all.

 

A great motivator here! This let's everyone know to follow your dreams!

 

"This way then, follow me." Skarlet obeyed, his heart-rate had increased slightly with anticipation, to think that just down this hallway with it's soft white carpet was a room containing his new companion, the Pokemon that would not only keep him company and be a friend when he didn't deserve one, but also help him launch his coordinating career. The woman walked at a snail's pace, her legs obviously weak with age, but eventually they arrived at the other end of the hall, where her slender, bony fingers gripped the doorknob, these were perhaps the final few seconds of a chapter in Skarlet's life. The door swung open and the sight before Skarlet had him immediately captivated.

 

So he doesn't plan on being a trainer. Interesting....

 

The yapping of easily the cutest Eevee in the room in Skarlet's opinion, a tiny, blue-eyed female, set the tone, there was an urgency to her bark as she stood on her hind legs struggling to balance, and nearly tripping over her unusually bushy tail. An adorable boy with a shock of vivid blue hair sporting a pair blue jeans, a white shirt of cradled another Eevee in his arms, it was a scruffy little male, its ears larger then usual.

 

His Eevee and his gay love! WOW!

 

The female, who Skarlet had already chosen pawed up at him, clearly missing her brother. Skarlet wasted no time and moving next to the boy and scooping up the little female, holding her next to her brother, they happily nipped and played, immediately cheering up. "Hi, I'm Skarlet, and I think I'm naming this little one Angel." The nerves were obvious in Skarlet's speech, he was anything but a social butterfly. The boy tucked his Eevee under one arm and smiled back to Skarlet, he extended his hand, Skarlet tucked Angel away in the same manor and the two boys shook hands, to Skarlet, it just screamed. "Yes!" almost like he was meant to know this boy, like the meeting was fate. And that it was.

 

Skarlet: Dresses emo

Feminine

Bisexual

Lives in Kanto

 

"Rayne" the response came to Skarlet's ears and ran through his mind, if a thought could ever be described as 'warm' then this was a warm thought, it was, intriguing, it was special.

 

Skayne... I GET NOW! It's like SonAmy and KeroTama.

 

Returning his Eevee to the ground, he approached the breeder, produced his wallet and quickly handed over the money to the woman. She took it and greedily counted every cent before nodding approvingly. Skarlet turned, seeing the two Eevees belonging to himself and Rayne frolicking and playing together, to the exclusion of the three other Eevee pups. It was absolutely gorgeous, Skarlet couldn't wipe the smile off his face if he had tried.

 

It would be better if the Eevees were Pichus.

 

He turned his beaming eyes to Rayne, and slowly spoke with a tone laced with unexplainable affection. "So, what are you doing now? I think these little fellas could do with some more time together, they love each other so much."

 

Lucky the Eevees are boy and girl....

 

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The boys sat happily together in a local park, the sky was clear, the sun was shining, it was hot, but the boys had retreated to the shade of a tall pine tree, many Pidgeys whistled away happily in the tree,

 

Pidgeys don't whistle. They attack!

 

Skarlet couldn't comprehend why, but this just felt like it was meant to be. He looked over to Rayne who was focused on the playful Eevees chasing one-another around trees. Ranye looked adorable to Skarlet, fashionable, unique, and compellingly handsome. As Rayne turned head to face Skarlet, Skarlet turned, blushing slightly to the Eevees.

 

Two gay guys and their Eevees. What could be better? OWAIT! A lot.

 

He didn't realise he was being met with a similar stare. In the few few hours they'd sat there, they'd learned interesting things about one another. Both were bought up in Saffron City since birth. Both seemed to have fears of judgment, While Skarlet was usually rather shy, Rayne was more outgoing.

 

I thought I stated back in the first part of this review that Skarlet was outgoing....

 

Skarlet was often too down, depressed, or simply un-motivated to do things,

 

I swear in the begaining of this FanFic Yae said Skarlet was motivated and all that other crap!

 

Rayne on the other hand was a self-professed "hyperactive" While some would see these things as clashing traits, Skarlet found the idea of it more like perfect contrast. There was definitely a connection, one that seed as though it was meant to be.

 

Now what does Rayne look like? Is he emo-like like Skarlet?

 

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They'd sat in the park for some 6 hours, and the sun had set on them. Now, Skarlet sat alone on his soft bed, this had been the best day of his life to date, his Eevee laid there curled, slumbering, nestled in amongst his purple pillows.

 

He got his own Pokemon and a gay friend! I've had better days then that!

 

Skarlet stared out his window at the full moon. He closed his eyes, and let out a happy sigh, this was the first day of forever.

 

With this being the first SLASH FanFic I've ever read, I think this is a good story! I have no idea why Yae made this all bisexual-like. I will read more of this and I hope everyone else will too!

 

 

[spoiler=#6: Summer Duels by Ecoboy1324]

We now have another review! We will dive into Summer Duels......

 

The Pro Journal-Summer Duels

 

A story written in the form of a journal!

 

June 17, 2035

 

2035! Way to get into the future!

 

The crisp golden sun was in the air as I strapped on my duel disk. Dueling for the fun of it just like we used to way back when dueling was everything to us and we were without holographic projectors. Back when dueling was not for the sake of money, fame or even for the sake of winning but just to enjoy the game game itself.

 

Now you make dueling sound like crap.

 

So many plays and weird strategies I came up with during those golden summer days. Though I have gained the status of professional duelist with the fame and the money from the sponsorships, I have never forgotten my roots which is why I am dueling today.

 

DANG IT! He's a pro.... Now that means that there will be no mistakes in a duel...

 

The deck that I chose for today's game is Ojama's.

 

WHAT THE F***! The Ojama's! Are you outta your mind?

 

We aren't that bad!

 

I think we're great!

 

Better then ever!

 

Oh great! The Ojama Trio is here...

 

Specifically, Its a style known around the pro's as Delecure Ojama's. It is a style for playing Ojama's I invented about 20 years ago and is part of what led to me becoming as popular and successful as I am. I still remember like it was yesterday the first duel I used it. It was against my friend Ryial and it is a crowning moment of my childhood.

 

Ohhh! Flashback!

 

I'll get the popcorn!

 

June 17,2015

“I have two Marauding Captains and Royal Decree on the field, Shang.” Ryial said confidently looking at the playing field. “Granted I have used up every card in my hand, but it still doesn't overcome the fact that you have two thousand life points left without any monsters and two face-downs that can't be activated. How do you expect to win this duel if you can't attack or activate any of your traps?”

 

As you see, in five years from now, a boy named Shang will be stuck in the worse position ever in a Yu-Gi-Oh duel! We now must read on!

 

“I guess all I can do is try my friend. I shall draw to being my turn.” I said somewhat doubtfully, but then I picked up my card and smiled inside as I knew, then and there, that this move was a long shot but that luck would be on my side. “You may have a full eight thousand life points but with this one move I can win if luck is on my side.

 

Quick! Get away from him, Luck!

 

I'll start off by summoning Snipe Hunter and then tossing Ojamagic for it to activate its effect, but first I'll activate Ojamagic's effect pulling Ojamas Black, Yellow, and Green out of my deck.

 

Look!

 

He's using us!

 

Now, Ryial, I assume you know what Snipe's effect is?”

 

“Well, yes of course. First you toss a card to the graveyard, then you choose one card on my side of the field and roll a die.” He said with a calmness to his voice reminiscent to his calm demeanor.

 

Ryial sounds like a know it all!

 

“If the result is anything but one and six, the card in question is destroyed.”

 

“Yep” I said with a hint of cockiness. “How lucky are you feeling my friend?”

 

“Very” he said still with that coolness.

 

“You Sure” said I sensing some misplaced sarcasm.

 

This is where you use a sarcasm tag, children. I will now show you what on is.

 

 [/sarcasm] 

 

“Yes, I have two monsters that you must destroy in order for you to attack.” Starting to lose his

trademark coolness he exclaimed. “Not to mention a Trap that makes your Traps null and void. I'd say that I had the upper hand.”

 

That means Ryial is winning!

 

“Well lets let fate decide then” I said boldly as I picked up and began to shuffle a die lying right beside me in my hand releasing it as I say. “For my first target I choose Royal Decree.”

 

The die rolls for about three seconds. Three long and suspenseful moments filled with a hint of bittersweet saccharine but when it landed on the table finally the top showed 4, and I smiled to myself.

 

YAY! *Crowd goes wild*

 

“Lucky!” He exclaims as he put his trap into his graveyard “What Now?” he said out of polite and yet somewhat strange for him curiousness.

In answer to his question with that cockiness I reply as I pick up the die again.

 

I thought I told you to get away from him Luck!

 

“Now I discard Ojama Black

 

Say what?

 

to activate Snipes effect again, This time on your Marauding Captain.”

 

The die rolls for those 3 suspense filled moments again landing on two.

 

“Your really pushing me here Shang you know that.” He sighs as he places his monster on top of his trap but then starts to get slightly nervous as he says. “Anymore?”

 

If Shang has more Ojama's, yes.

 

“I'm about to push it even further.” I said using all the force I could muster. “I activate Ojama Country”

 

SEE! MORE OJAMA!

 

Taking a pause to collect myself I place it on the mat right under my deck. “I am assuming you know what this does?”

 

I think all of us know but Ecoboy is going make Ryial explain the card.

 

“Yes Yes I know.” Said Ryial now completely nervous for he knew, From our past duels, that I was going to do something either incredibly dramatic or stupid and he wasn't exactly sure which it was yet. “Provided you have a Ojama creature on your side of the field. The attack and defense points of all monsters are switched.” He takes a short break to compose himself. “You can also send one Ojama from your hand to the graveyard and summon a Ojama from the grave once per turn if I'm not mistaken.”

 

He tells us!

 

“You are not,” I said still not exactly sure if what I was about to do was going to work. “Now let me proceed with my face down Macro Cosmos.” I flip the card on my left face up. “This removes all cards from the game instead of them going to the graveyard.”

 

“This is a very weird deck your playing.” He said , Voice calming, and took a sip of water out of the water bottle that was right next to him.

 

Drinking water was kinda random.

 

“Are you sure you know what your doing Shang.”

 

Of course he does! He's a pro!

 

“What would make you say that Ryial” I said trying to keep him from noticing my nervous expression but failing miserably.

 

“Come on Shang, Macro Cosmos in a Ojama deck.” He exclaims “Even for you that is a very weird choice for a archetype centered on locking down your opponent. Don't you think?”

 

I still have no idea why he has to use an Ojama deck...

 

But we're great!

 

We can kick @$$!

 

You guys suck.

 

He's right....

 

Quick! Go get a fusion card, Ojama Green!

 

I'm on it!

 

What the hell are you guys doing?

 

You'll see!

 

.

“Just watch and learn.”I said. “I remove Ojama Yellow from the game for Snipe Hunter's effect.”

 

COME ON!

 

Putting it right besides my deck I continued.”I then select your last marauding captain and roll my die.”

 

The die rolls for a third time for those three awkward and suspenseful seconds only this time a certain feeling filled the atmosphere, It was a feeling of extreme tenseness as I realized yet again that I had to prove my self

 

Bad grammar alert!

 

I got it!

 

Why does Ojama Green have a fusion card?

 

Get over her Ojama Black!

 

We all have to have our hands on the card!

 

WHAT THE HELL!?!?

 

Ojama King!

 

Uhhh! I'm sorry for telling you guys that you suck and.. and...

 

Too late fool! Goodbye!

 

NOOOOO!

 

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Hey there fellow reader! This is Pichu big brother, Pikachu, here! Pichu has been hospitalized because Ojama King sat on him. That was golden! I wish I could show you the tape, but we have young people on this site.

 

Remember the part when his eye popped out? LOL!

 

HAHA! But that wasn't the best part, Raichu! The best part is when Ojama King...

 

THERE ARE KIDS ON THIS SITE YOU BISH!

 

Dang it! I forgot... Well anyways, Pichu couldn't finish this review due to the hilarious incident. He won't be able to do the next review. So that's where I step in! I shall do the next review! So tune in next time for Episode Seven: A Review by Pikachu!

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Pichu told me to give thanks to his guest stars. Yes even the one who crushed him! So here you go. Thanks to:

Ojama Yellow, Ojama Black, Ojama Green, Ojama King, Raichu, and me, Pikachu!

 

 

[spoiler=#7: A Review by [color=#FFD700]Pikachu[/color]!: Yu-Gi-Oh! T9 by ► Jolta ◄]

Hello readers! If you read the last review, you must have heard of Pichu's accident with the Ojama King. Due to Pichu being hospitalize, I, Pikachu, will review a FanFic!

 

TriangleJoltaTriangle has written another FanFiction.

 

WTF? Where am I?

 

It's okay, Ann! We will make TriangleJoltaTriangle pay for leaving you!

 

Let's make the Ojama King sit on him! ;3

 

I'll give the Ojama Trio a call!

 

While Pikachu is doing that, I will start the review with the link to it! Yu-Gi-Oh! T9's review is starting!

 

Prolouge

 

Well I should point out that PROLOGUE is misspelled....

 

My name is Eria the Water Charmer

 

Oh Smexy Eria!

 

, friend of a novice duelist, 13-year old Jolta Goh. I, together with my other friend, Yata-Garasu, we are his Duel Spirit partners.

 

A new trio! In the past we've have:

Jacob, Torchic, and Kirby, the magic talking trio!

Yellow, Green, and Black Ojama's, the fusing, Pichu crushing beast!

And now! Smexy Eria, Jolta, and Yata! The YGO Trio!

 

We are the ones who assist him when in need. He deserves it for he has a rather kind soul, and a rather soft heart. Apparently, this tale takes place 10 years after the fall of the cruel, fiendish, Earthbound Immortals.

 

Immortals... immortals..... AH-HA! Vampires! Oh great, more Twilight....

 

Here we have a blue-haired blue-eyed boy, Jolta. He is quite a hunk. So, he knocks on a door while Yata-Garasu and I watch. The door knob started moving. The door had started moving!

 

She sounds like the door is the best thing since high-speed-internet!

 

This was great! Out from the door came out a middle-aged blonde-haired woman that Jolta calls Madam Rhodes.

 

RHODES! That sneaky Meowth!

 

Madam Rhodes is a Meowth, Pikachu?

 

Meowth Rhodes, the master of acting like middle-aged woman!

 

Madam Rhodes, or should I say, Alexis Rhodes, was a former Obelisk Blue Student from Duel Academy. There she met her husband, a brown-haired childish person named Jaden Yuki. Now, Jaden is still the childish person he was many years ago. He graduated as a Silfer Red, I’m not sure why.

 

Jaden Yuki from YGOGX!?!?!

 

How dare he make me old in this!

 

“So Jolta, you want to bring Yuki out again? Its good that she has such a reliable friend! YUKI! JOLTA’S HERE AGAIN!” Madam Rhode’s voice was as loud as a thunder during an Earthquake. A girl, the same age as Jolta, walked up. Her name was Yuki Yuki. Yes, very stupid name, whatever you say.

 

Why did you name your child Yuki when her last name is Yuki?

 

I didn't write this. Answer the question, Jolta.

 

I ran out of names!

 

Sure....

 

Yuki Yuki had brown eyes like her father, and blonde hair like her mother’s, except they were twintails. She wasn’t a rather outgoing person, so every week, Jolta takes her out for walks. Sometimes they would duel.

 

As you see here, Jolta is a nice person.

 

But he left me!

 

So, Jolta and Yuki started walking to the park, and yes, there are parks in an era with Card Games on Motorbikes.

 

GX and 5D's in the same story!

 

“So you like duels Yuki? Why not we have one?” asked Jolta. Yuki nodded. Most of the time she was silent, but she was louder than her mother during duels.

 

And we come to the end of TriangleJoltaTriangle's second FanFic.

 

How did ya like it?

 

It was good! But now we get down to business.

 

What do you mean?

 

Why did you leave me?!

 

Well?

 

I just wrote another FanFic! Big deal!

 

It is a big deal! Ann is better then Yuki Yuki!

 

Guess who?

 

Ojama King! You're back!

 

Good! Sit on Jolta!

 

I got a Video Camera!

 

Wait! We can work this out right?

 

Wrong! Goodbye!

 

NOOOOOOOO!

 

Ohhhh! That's going hurt!

 

Dang!

 

Maybe you should stop tapeing.

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And we end Pikachu's Review with a Ojama King crushing a YCM Member!

Well anyways. Thanks to my PikaGuest stars:

Ann Tennyson, Jaden Yuki, ► Jolta ◄, and the Ojama King!

Well goobye for now! Pichu is going to be back for the next review! See ya!

~Pikachu

 

 

[spoiler=#8: Pichu's Back!: Pokemon Legends of Alph by Eury]

Hello readers! I have returned from the hospital! I don't plan on having the Ojama's back soon! Well, it's time for my review of Pokemon: Legends of Alph!

 

Episode 1: A Journey Begun!

 

“PIDGEY PIDGEY PIIIIIIIIIIIIIDDDDDDDDGGGGGGGGY!”

 

I will now try to talk to Pidgey's in our native language: Picha! Pichu! Pi-Pi!

 

Dude, we can speak human too.

 

Dang....

 

It was a cloudy Saturday morning and the Pidgey had begun chirping to wake the citizens of New Bark Town.

 

Cloudy, Saturday, Morning, Pidgey, and Johto. We have a nice description.

 

One citizen wasn't so eager to get up, however. Eur lay in his bed, holding his pillow over his head in an attempt to deafen the noise of the bird Pokemon.

 

Eur is just Eury minus the 'Y'. You have a open mind, Eury. [insert Sarcasm Tag Here]

 

As Eur kept pressing the head tighter on top of his head, his mother, Janice, came in through the door and pulled the blankets off of him. “It's time to get up Eur. You, Amy

 

Rose the Hedgehog,

 

and Ethan all start your journey today.

 

Eur, Ethan, and Amy Rose the Hedgehog!

 

I don't want to be in this FanFic!

 

Amy, I was making a joke!

 

You need to go eat breakfast and prepare Totodile for the trip. That Pokemon is so immature. He found it funny to stick a Caterpie in my undergarments drawer this morning before I woke up.” Eur couldn't help but laugh.

 

Slap Stick Gold Comedy.

 

“Haha. That's my Totodile. Has he eaten yet?” As Eur was talking he got up out of bed and started walking out towards the kitchen. Janice followed him and responded, “He's eating now. He really loves that Carvanha Crunch cereal.”

 

WTF? They're eating Carvanha now!

 

Tasty, tasty!

 

Weirdo, weirdo! Freaking water types always have the weird cravings.

 

As they got into the kitchen Totodile was sitting on the floor stuffing his face with cereal. Unfortunately in his rampaging feast, he had gotten cereal and milk all over the floor. “Goddammit Eur, you need to take more care of this thing. MISMAGIUS!” As she yelled, a purple Pokemon came floating in through the door. “Mismagius, could you please use your Psychic to clean all this up?” Mismagius nodded and it's eyes grew a bright purple. All the cereal and milk started floating off the floor and back into Totodile's bowl. Totodile looked at Mismagius with a bewildered look

 

I look like that too if a monster just glowed and milk floated!

 

and then continued eating again.

 

CONTINUE EATING?!?!?! Weirdo Totodile!

 

I was hungry!

 

“Eur, eat and go get dressed. Be quick, Elm wants you at his lab at 8:30. It's already 8:00.”

 

Kay, Pidgey's! We need to attack Eur on his way to the lab so he'll be late!

 

Eur looked at his mom with a look of utter disbelief and said, “So you decide to wake me up when I only have thirty minutes to get ready? Unbelievable.”

 

Not as believable as waking up late and not getting a starter, but you get a Electric Bastard who won't listen to you and won't get in a Pokeball!

 

Eur grabbed a bagel out of the cupboard and ran back up to his room. He quickly put on his clothes while devouring the bagel. He grabbed some Poke Balls from his closet and went back to the kitchen. Totodile had finished eating and was waiting for Eur to come back. Janice looked back up at Eur and told him, “It's 8:15. Better get going.

 

It took him 15 minutes to eat a bagel and put on clothes?

 

Did you remember your Pokegear?” Eur felt his pockets to see if he remembered to grab it but it wasn't there. “Bon of a sitch.

 

Bon of a sitch?

 

I thought it was Son of a B***h?

 

Be right back.” Eur quickly ran to his room, grabbed the Gear, and ran back. “There, got it. Come on Toto, let's go. Love you mom!” “Love you too hun. See you later! Have a good time.”

Eur walked out the door with Totodile following close behind towards Professor Elm's lab. As he was walking he saw Amy not too far ahead with her Chikorita by her side.

 

Amy's Chikorita is nice and pretty and caring and pretty!

 

Eur decided to run up to her and say hi. So Eur quietly ran up behind her, grabbed her by the shoulders and pulled her close yelling, “SODOMY!”

 

I thought it was SonAmy?

 

It's really ShadAmy.

 

He-he, Shadow. :3

 

Eur did not expect her to scream so loud. She quickly turned around and without even thinking slapped Eur across the face. As Eur fell to the ground holding his cheek, Amy covered her mouth with her hands and said, “Oh my Arceus Eur are you okay? I didn't know it was you, you scared the crap out of me.” She held out her hand to help Eur up.

 

Oh my Arceus? Really? I think it would be better if it was 'Oh my Qwilfish!'

 

Eur took her hand but as he was coming up, he pulled her down. She yelped and fell face first on the ground. “There we go, I think we're even. So anyways...what's up?” Amy stood back up and patted the dirt on her shirt off while saying, “Oh, nothing much. I'm kinda nervous though. I mean, we have to travel the entire Johto region. Just the three of us together.” “Amy, speaking of three, where's Ethan?” “Oh, he called me a couple minutes ago. He said he's already at the lab waiting for us to get there. So, we should hurry up.”

 

Go Pidgey's! Attack!

 

Amy and Eur started walking towards the lab, talking about stuff they did during the week. Totodile and Chikorita were following close behind, also talking to each other in their Pokemon lingo.

 

They said:

Toto: Isn't that Pichu guy such a God?

Chiko: I know right?

 

As they all reached Elm's lab, Amy picked up Chikorita and Eur pulled Totodile close telling him, “Toto, I swear to Arceus

 

Swear to Qwilfish!

 

if you misbehave you will face the most horrific punishment you can imagine. No more Carvanha Crunch cereal for a month! Am I understood?” Toto looked at Eur with a horrified face nodding slowly. The mere thought of not being able to eat the cereal made Totodile flinch. “Alrighty then, let's go.” The automatic doors swung open and they all walked in seeing Ethan and Elm talking to each other.

“Eur my man! Sup bro?” Ethan got up from his conversation and came over to bro fist Eur and hug Amy. “Bout time you guys got here, Elm was getting impatient.”

 

It just dawned on me that everyone has Pokemon, why go to Elm's.

 

“Indeed I was.” Elm got up from the couch and walked over to the three teens. He shook hands with Eur and Amy and said, “Now, let's get talking shall we? I'm sure you guys know why you're here. You're about to go on a journey all across Johto to take the Pokemon League Challenge.

 

I think Amy should be a Cornianter.

 

And Chikorita!!!

 

Now, how do you guys plan on doing this? Are you all going together or by yourselves?” Ethan spoke up and quickly said, “I'm planning on going by myself. I'm sure Cyndaquil and I can take care of ourselves.” Elm looked at Ethan and nodded. “Eur? Amy? What do you two plan on doing?”

Eur looked at Amy and she looked back. Eur knew she really didn't want to go by herself, so he smiled and said, “Amy and I are going together.” Amy smiled and whispered “thank you” to Eur. Elm smiled. “Very well then. So you guys don't end up taking the same path, I suggest Ethan goes north of Route 29 and detours through Dark Cave to get to Violet City. Your Cyndaquil's flame should provide enough light to see in the cave. Eur and Amy, you two should take the traditional path through Cherrygrove and Routes 30 and 31. Ethan will get to Violet faster, but you two should get more training in.

 

What's wrong Ethan? Leaving your friends. But maybe there will be sparks between Eur and Amy! (Hint-hint)

 

Now before you leave, I'll give you guys a tip. No, two tips. First tip, in Violet City there is a building called the Sprout Tower. If you go to the highest floor, you will find the Elder. If you can defeat him in a battle, he'll teach your Pokemon the move Flash. Second tip, the Gym Leader of Violet City is named Falkner.

 

I think that Falkner's real name is Fu*kner.

 

He uses Flying type Pokemon so Amy, you should probably catch something else as Chikorita might not do so well.” Chikorita stuck her tongue out at Elm and turned away from him. Amy laughed and picked Chikorita up hugging her. “It's okay honey.”

 

It's okay honey! But if I battle Fu*kner with you, he would kill you!

 

Elm looked at the three again and nodded. “Okay. You guys are ready. Be careful and have fun!” All three turned towards the door and said, “Thanks for all the help!”

They all walked towards Route 29 and as they approached it Ethan turned to Amy and Eur. “Well, I guess this is goodbye for now I guess. See you guys soon I hope!” Ethan hugged Amy, shook Eur's hand, then walked up north towards Dark Cave with Cyndaquil following close behind. Amy and Eur looked at each other and nodded. They began walking together towards Cherrygrove with Chikorita and Totodile. Their journey was now underway.

 

They nodded. No kiss or passionate hug? Lame....

 

It's Eury's story, Shadow!

 

I will read the rest of this FanFic! I want to read that epic battle between Eur and Fu*kner!

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Thanks to my guest stars:

Pidgey, Amy Rose, Totodile, and Shadow the Hedgehog!

 

 

[spoiler=#9: Dragon Ball ZX: Rise of Evil by mason1999]

9th review time! We now start Dragon Ball ZX: Rise of Evil.

 

Please note I know nothing about Dragon Ball.

 

Volume 1

Episode 1:The Three Deaths

Part 1

 

It was 12:00 PM on Earth in the Plains that Vegeta and Trunks were training.....

"Big Bang Attack!"

 

That's funny! I'm watching Big Bang Theory and I read this.

 

said Vegeta aiming it at Trunks. Trunks dodged the blast and turned Super Sayian.

Trunks un-sheathed the sword he got from Tapion, Trunks charged to Vegeta in the air ready to go for a deathly blow, Vegeta dodged the stab and hit Trunks so hard Trunks went crashing to the ground a mile away.Time to go Super Sayian 2 thought Vegeta, he then transformed into Super Sayian 2 form.

 

We have a big battle sence here! Who doesn't like battle sences?

 

"Time to die Trunks, hahahahahaha!" said Vegeta while spreading his arms apart on both sides of his body, "Final Flash!" said Vegeta closing both hands together and shooting a beam from both hands together. The beam then penetrated Trunk' armor strait into his chest........

 

Sounds painful. Like the Frying Pan Treatment.

 

The training room Bulma made that simulates battles transformed back into its original state.

"Father,you beat me again. I have failed,for the twenieth time." said Trunks with a playful smile on his face,"You still should try to fight Piccolo or Gohan."

 

Father!? Twenieth time!? The 20th Star Wars: Trunks, I am your father!

 

Bulma then walked through a door saying, "Trunks that wasn't the worse you have fought on the twenty recordings against Vegeta, besides your father was using one of his strongest moves in his Super Sayian 2 form,"

 

Super Sayian? I fear it is like Super Sonic.....

 

said Bulma looking to where Vegeta was a second a go,"He must have left to go train, how 'bout you give it a break and rest for a couple of hours?" suggested Bulma. Trunks then nodded and left to go change.

 

That was short! OWAIT! There's more!

 

Part 2

 

Gohan felt a very strong Ki towards the North,where the Dragon Ball Shrine is,and also where all seven Dragon Balls were,

 

Dragons have seven!?!?!?

 

"I have to get there before they get inside and make a wish on the Dragon Balls,

 

I thought it was make a wish on a shooting star not make a wish on a dragon's private area.

 

even if Father stops trys to stop them he may fail with a Ki that strong!" Gohan then made a mad dash towards the Dragon Ball Shrine.......

When he arrived he saw that Vegeta and Piccolo were fighting off three strong villans:Broly,Cell and a unknown demonish monster. How could Broly and Cell get out of Hell?! Gohan thought, he then turned into Ultimate Gohan(Mystic Gohan) and dove into the battle..........

 

A battle for the balls! Ewwwww.

 

"Vegeta! What is that monster?!" yelled Piccolo while dodging Broly's punches, when Gohan came and delivered a mortal blow to Cell.

"Its name is Janemba!" said Vegeta fighting the evil monster Janemba.

"Hahahahaha,I remember you!" said Janemba,"The only way you stoped me was using the Fusion Technique, whch wont work now!" said Janemba pulling out his sword,"Ready to dance with death?!" while stabbing into Vegeta's armor.

 

NO! HE CAN'T DIE! IT'S NOT EVEN CHAPTER 3 YET! ALL THE DYING HAPPENS IN CHAPTER 3!!!!!

 

"Noooooo!!" said Gohan as he was fighting Cell, "I'm getting tired of this Cell! Super Kamehameha!" said Gohan when he was about to release the blast Janemba grabbed Gohan and stabbed him letting go of the sword.

"Gohan!" said Piccolo as Broly threw him against rock solid stone,"Go........han.......go.....to....Den....de" said Piccolo as he transported him to Dende's Tower.

 

Why........is........he.......ta.......lking.....l.....ike.......t.....his?

 

"Gohan!" yelled Dende as he saw the bleeding Sayian on the ground with a sword in him,"Don't worry Gohan I will heal you!" said Dende.

"Den......de......Broly........Cell....and..........Janemba....are going to get the Dragon Balls...." said Gohan........

 

Shooting Stars are better!

 

"Gohan,I will heal you!" said Dende desprately trying to heal the mortal wounds.

"Dende......warn....the...others........" said Gohan before he died.

 

OoO! Two deaths! OH NOIES! Chapter three is when everyone dies, as I quoted. I will read the rest of this story to find out if they come back to life!

 

 

[Yankee]

...Right.

This seems like..idk..Foe Fic, but for stories that aren't supposed to be bad.

 

Care to do chapter 1 of mine for lulz?

 

I wanna see how you really do...

[Phantom Roxas]

Anten's color is wrong, so I am assuming this is someone else claiming to be here.

[CrabHelmet]

Struggling to cast aside his history of being a plagiarist, HyphenPichuHyphen starts a fan fiction review series on YCM formatted exactly like Foe Fiction featuring Ann 10 as a guest commentator who speaks in purple text.

 

Struggling to cast aside his history of being a sexist, HyphenPichuHyphen robs Ann 10 of her personality, gives her virtually no important lines because the men are the feature here, and makes her look like a colossal moron when she does speak, such as by simply parroting what HyphenPichuHyphen already said or by having never heard of Leeroy Jenkins.

 

Struggling to cast aside his history of being a terrible writer, HyphenPichuHyphen writes a review that sucked.

[CarlinFan]

*repeatedly bashes head into desk until blood is drawn*

Imitating Crab won't change the fact that he despises you and you're a terrible writer. Ripping off his guest writers (even the same damn color) is just insulting to him. You say you take requests, so here's one: Please stop before I gouge out my own eyes and commit seppuku on the kitchen floor with a butter knife.

[PikMan]

Care to review part 2 of Laser Tag, You're It? Your first review was (unintentionally) funny!

[Jolta]

http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/thread-203490.html

 

Choose any Chapter you like, just not the first one. In the meantime I'm gonna think of a new Alien.

 

You could review the part where Ann used Leviathan to fight back to the bullies.

[Twig]

Just to let everyone know.

THIS IS NOT LIKE FOEFICS! JUST REVIEWS OF FANFICS!!!!

 

Sarcasm tags plox.

 

Anyways, this isn't good. Reviews are suppose to help the authors know what's wrong with the fic. This was just...random commentary. You need to explain grammar and punctuation mistakes. I think you're just trying to make it funny, but it's not working.

 

This is what I could call a FFF(Fail Foe Fic).

[Kaisu]

lolWeatherReport - Standstartedafad.

 

It's not a Foe Fiction, it's called...

 

Yet another imposter of...

 

WEATHER REPORT!!!

 

Honestly. I demand that Weather is recognized as the one that started this style of reveiwing on YCM. Even if Crab thought it up by himself, Weather got there first.

[Pichu]

Care to do chapter 1 of mine for lulz?

 

I wanna see how you really do...

sure.

 

Care to review part 2 of Laser Tag' date=' You're It? Your first review was (unintentionally) funny!

[/quote']

i might

 

http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/thread-203490.html

 

Choose any Chapter you like' date=' just not the first one. In the meantime I'm gonna think of a new Alien.

 

You could review the part where Ann used Leviathan to fight back to the bullies.

[/quote']

thats the chapter i like!! your up for a review!

[CrabHelmet]

lolWeatherReport - Standstartedafad.

 

It's not a Foe Fiction' date=' it's called...

 

Yet another imposter of...

 

WEATHER REPORT!!!

 

Honestly. I demand that Weather is recognized as the one that started this style of reveiwing on YCM. Even if Crab thought it up by himself, Weather got there first.

[/quote']

 

Weather was here first, but my independent arrival was what set off this particular wave of reviewers. And this one in particular is directly based on Foe Fiction.

[Pichu]

no it is not!

[CrabHelmet]

You have Ann 10 as a guest reviewer who speaks in purple text and made this after your story was on Foe Fiction.

 

You may have gotten away from the CtrlCCtrlV style of plagiarism, but your copying is no less obvious.

[Pichu]

well im sorry if im pissing you off! i just want to review fanfic. not make foefics!!!

[PikMan]

Actually, can you review all of episode 1 of my fanfic?

[CarlinFan]

So let me get this straight. You don't want to make foe fics, you just want to review with the exact same style, format, and guest reviewers. But as long as you put a little disclaimer at the top, it's all perfectly okay, right? XD

 

I'm not sure just how stupid you think we are, but we're certainly not as dumb as you. If you want to be taken seriously as a reviewer, start by trying to go three seconds without making a grotesque grammatical error and not carbon-copying Crab's (or Weather's) guest reviewers. Until you can do that, please just stop before your sheer incompetence makes me bash my head into a wall repeatedly.

[Weather Report - Stand]

Okay, let's take it from the top...

 

PICHU! Your reviews aren't very... in fact, they're bad. They're not cool. The reason being: you're not using your own concepts, and your reviews are mostly full of random bashing. Now, bashing is okay to do, as long as you point out what to fix later on. When I do a review, I always try to point out every plot hole, while sometimes "yelling", and at the end try to tell them what to fix or assure them that their idea is good. Yours... no. And when you threw in your Ann 10 character, who I doubt that anybody besides you and Jolta care much about (sorry, the story just isn't that special, I realize at least one person may get mad for me saying that), I thought of two things:

1. Random insertion? No. DO NOT DO. Crabhelmet's good with that because he only makes up guys for the reviews. Your taking a character from a story felt lazy. And yes, I do remark about me doing that GX fan fic often, but I don't take it that far. I hope.

2. Yeeeah, you can't really do that at all without being accused of copying Crabhelmet.

 

So, what I'd suggest: Find something else to do, like fix up your grammar. It's hard to look like a great reviewer when all you say is made up of snarky remarks and grammatical misfires.

 

CarlinFan: You're too extreme.

 

PikMan: Shut up! Nobody asked you!

 

Jolta: I think it's weird to have him review your story when he keeps systematically posting on your topic. Don't you?

 

Twig: Hey, that's what I said!

 

Kainine: Exactly.

 

Crabhelmet: Yeah, that too.

 

Me: I hope that you realize you COULD have gotten away with this if it weren't for Ann 10 and whoever the orange guy tends to be.

[CrabHelmet]

The world of Fan Fiction is a wide and varied realm. You have your adventure fanfics that flesh out an amazing and colourful world. You have your character study fanfics that explore the protagonist in ways the original author never imagined. You have your tender romantic shipping fanfics that depict a warm and fuzzy relationship between two characters that make an excellent pairing. And you have your comedy fanfics that can make the reader laugh out loud.

 

Unfortunately, that's not all you have. You also have your fanfics that grasp the English language so badly that you begin to wonder what language they are actually written in. You have your fanfics in which a new Mary Sue appears and destroys the entire actual cast. You have your fanfics in which characters' actual personalities and histories are completely mangled to the point where they may as well be someone totally different with a similar name. You have your fanfics with totally nonsensical relationships, where the author suddenly reveals that McCoy and Snape are secretly lovers. You have your fanfics where so little follows logically that it can barely be called a story; where flat and bland characters perform mundane activities that nobody cares about; where the canon story is rehashed so directly that one wonders what the fan actually contributed; and where mediocrity is so omnipresent that one cannot find the interest to continue reading.

 

If you are a fan of quality fanfics but you are a foe of mediocre-to-bad fanfics, then you've come to the wrong place - because today is a day for Foe Fiction.

 

Come off it, future-me-Salty-person. This is my series.

 

I would appreciate it if you would not interrupt me during my review, Crab - and you too, Izzy. If you don't let me finish this review, I'm afraid I might have to have Anten executed. You wouldn't want that, would you?

 

Why, you b-

 

Crab. Shut up.

 

Listen to your friend. He gives good advice.

 

Now, what shall we examine today? Another Duel Academy story? A Naruto fanfic? No, there's nothing special there. This is the season finale, and the last one for which this Crab will still be alive! We need something special. I shall review... a review!

 

What, like we already did way back in 10 Little Indians?

 

That was mostly just a review of the original story, with Weather Report's brief review included as well as an added bonus. No, this time, we'll be focusing our review entirely on the review itself.

 

I'm pretty sure we never got permission to review any other review.

 

Oh, we don't need permission. First of all, it's written by -Pichu-, the misogynistic plagiarist, so nobody cares if we don't get his permission. Secondarily, his review is such a clone of Foe Fiction that it even has Ann 10 as a guest commentator who speaks with purple text, so we pretty much have automatic permission there. Sixth and lastly, I came here from the future to steal my own show from myself and kill several people; do you really think I'm going to care about journalistic ethics?

 

Now, to avoid confusion, here's how the colours will work. The original text of the story that -Pichu- was reviewing will be presented in plain italics. In keeping with the previous instance of a review being covered by Foe Fiction, -Pichu-'s words will be presented in blue italics, and his guest commentators will have their words presented in whatever colour they were originally printed in, but italicized. I'll be the only one in the studio talking - Crab and Izzy dare not speak, and Grell's forgotten how - so only my text is original to Foe Fiction. Anyhow, let's get started.

 

We start our first review with When World Collide.

 

Indeed, only one world is colliding here. It's good to see that -Pichu- put great effort into this so that he wouldn't end up botching the title of the story he's meant to be reviewing.

 

Episode 1-Laser Tag, You're It!/Part 1

 

We start the story with a retarded name...

 

Anyone who's ever heard of any Japanese show will tell you that that name is par for the course. SPOILER ALERT: The worst part is that this line here - "ur name is retarded lolololol" - is the best criticism -Pichu- delivers in the entire piece.

 

Welcome to Gameville. Yeah, the name’s kinda dumb,

 

NO! REALLY![/sarcasm]

 

And then he moves on to another urnameisdumb gag that consists purely of agreeing with exactly what the narrator just explicitly stated and requires the use of sarcasm tags, because those are totally classy.

 

but I had to call it something, and Videoland was already taken. So, here we are.

 

There was a Videoland.....

 

I swear that I'm not making this up - that line is actually written by -Pichu- as part of his review. Don't ask me what the point of that line was. Don't ask me why it was supposed to be funny. I don't understand it at all; I can only assume that this was written while -Pichu- was stoned out of his mind and reduced to just typing gibberish.

 

One day in Gameville, Jacob was walking down the street with his roommates, Torchic and Kirby. Everything seemed normal enough;

 

Yeah! Real normal! You're walking down the street with a black hole and a Pokemon. That's normal alright!

 

Remember that story that mentioned a Grand War of the Elements - I'm pretty sure I reviewed that before the point where I came back to steal this show - where I spent several paragraphs harping about what a stupid name that was for a war and about how it made no sense for a world where elements were used everywhere to name a war after the elements, because elements would be as common to them as, say, vehicles are to us? The point of all that was that you need to remember how things would be viewed not by inhabitants of our world but by inhabitants of the story's world to properly gauge their thoughts and actions.

 

Here, -Pichu- has not done that. He sees someone walking with Torchic and Kirby, so he reacts with ZOMGNOTNORMAL. But the whole point is that, in Gameville, walking around with video game characters is perfectly normal. Is Jacob supposed to think it's unusual for him to be walking with his roommates? According to -Pichu-, he should.

 

Similarly, -Pichu- would doubtlessly complain if a Yu-Gi-Oh! fanfic had a major card game tournament in it because there's no way anyone would care that much about card games and it's completely sensible to expect characters to react to events as if they were raised in our world and then suddenly transported to the fictional world when the story begins.

 

The sky was partly cloudy, the plants were carnivorous, plumbers jumped on mushrooms with eyes,

 

I believe their names are, M and L.

 

-Pichu- is a brilliant reviewer who really adds to the reading experience with comments like this, where he figures out what nobody else ever could: that the plumbers jumping on mushrooms with eyes in a world of video game characters might just possibly be Mario and Luigi. He seems to believe that the reviewer's job is to point out things that everyone with half a brain can plainly see. Either that, or he's stupid enough to think that the Mario reference needed to be pointed out because nobody would notice it without his fabulous guidance. Either way, this is a terrible excuse for a review and -Pichu- is a moron.

 

and guys without arms could carry stuff.

 

WHOOP-DE-DA! Give `em a prize!

 

This is like some giant stealth advertisement for Foe Fiction. It's like it's designed to be as lousy a review as possible so that everyone will see how great Foe Fiction is by comparison.

 

Then they heard the familiar call of “Eggs tree! Eggs tree!” It was Homestar. He was doing his part time job as a newspaper boy. He stopped next to Jacob and chucked a newspaper at them, and ran off.

 

Nice town. All you need is an emo Pikachu and Gameland or whatever is perfect!

 

Again with the comments that don't critique the story and couldn't possibly be considered funny by anyone.

 

Bear in mind that Foe Fiction is variously described as a "riffing", "review", and "commentary", but -Pichu-'s series is called nothing but "review". Despite that, most of his comments seem to be nonsense like this that contribute nothing to anything but in particular contribute nothing to actually reviewing the story. So far, the only thing actually resembling reviewing that he's done so far consisted of calling a couple of names stupid. It's like he's trying to write a review series without bothering with the bit where you do any actual reviewing. Look, if you can't review, then don't write the review series!

 

Jacob picked it up. “Whoa, there’s going to be a Lasertag championship in 3 weeks!” Said Jacob.

 

Lasertag.... lasertag.... Why can't it be something better like..... OH! Ann 10 comes to town!

 

That's right. -Pichu-'s full response is that Lasertag isn't as good as Ann 10 showing up. Look, I honestly can't do much more than echo what -Pichu-'s saying in these parts because it's just so bad that I can't even describe how bad it is. His idea of reviewing is to say that the storyline would be better (for some arbitrary reason he never explains) if a character from an unrelated fanfic who isn't from a video game and thus would be completely out of place in Gameville were to show up. For comparison, imagine if I spent all of my reviews doing nothing but saying things like, "Card games? This would be so much better if it were Sailor Moon instead."

 

“It seems like you’re hyped”, said Torchic,

 

HOLY S*** IT TALKS! But wait... I'm a Pichu and I can talk. What do you think Ann?

 

HOLY S*** IT TALKS!

 

Well she is a human!

 

Where should I start?

 

First, -Pichu-, someone who has been caught plagiarizing (and then lying about it even after being caught) in the past, claims that his review series is not a ripoff of Foe Fiction when it has Ann 10 as a guest commentator who speaks in purple text. Granted, he changed screwed up the exact shade of purple - compare his Anten to my Anten - but that doesn't stop it from being about as obvious a copy as you can get without using Ctrl+C and Ctrl+V. Especially since -Pichu- has previously had a story murdered on Foe Fiction, so it's not like he can feign ignorance of Foe Fiction's exact details or anything like that.

 

Second, -Pichu-, someone whose misogyny was a major focus of the last review, has brought in a female character to, um, repeat what he just said and act surprised that someone who has been speaking all along is talking. She doesn't improve later in the "review", either - though admittedly her stupidity could just result from -Pichu- writing her dialogue, leaving her with the same stupidity as everyone else (-Pichu- not excepted) speaking in this piece.

 

Third, the Foe Fiction guest commentators may not have had a very deep personality, but they at least had some basic characteristics. Not so in -Pichu-'s review, where the guest commentators have no distinguishing features whatsoever - they're essentially -Pichu-'s normal words given a different colour for no reason other than that he saw Foe Fiction do it and decided to copy it.

 

Fourth, just look at that last line about Ann 10 being a human. It was presumably intended to be funny. I will say no more.

 

Fifth, giving Pokémon the ability to speak in fanfics somehow isn't that uncommon in general, but it's especially bizarre to complain about it in a massive crossover where Torchic was already stated to be someone's roommate. That puts -Pichu-'s running total for things that actually belong in a pure review at four: a complaint about a name being stupid when it really isn't stupid (with no reason to explain why it's stupid given, in contrast to things like the Grand War of the Elements complaint); a complaint about a name being stupid that is already called stupid in-universe (again with no reason given); a complaint that people in a world of video game characters should find video game characters unusual; and a complaint that Torchic can speak when there's no reason the author shouldn't be able to say he can speak in this universe.

 

Why, -Pichu-? What's the point of this? You're not good at reviewing. Less than half of what you've said belongs in a review, and none of that half is actually a legitimate complaint, and the other half of what you've said is random nonsense that isn't even funny. Why are you writing this? Why do you think you can write this? Why are you even here?

 

who had the ability to speak English after a run-in with Iggy Koopa. “It’s just too bad you got kicked off the Lasertag team last year.”

 

YOU WERE KICKED OFF!

 

And now he's reverted to repeating what the text just said. Brilliant.

 

Jacob chose that time to have a brain fart. “Wha-?!” He asked. “Don’t you remember what happened last year?” Replied Kirby.

 

No we don't, marshmallow! TELL US!

 

-Pichu- has never before seen a fictional work in which one character asks another what happened as a lead-in for the audience to see what happened at that time. I can't understand how this can be true and yet -Pichu- can still have internet access.

 

Of course, as with everything in this pitiful excuse for a review, it's worse than that. -Pichu- wants Kirby to tell Jacob something that Jacob already knows so that the audience can hear it. That's right. You know that As You Know thing I complain about once every couple of Foe Fiction commentaries where characters tell each other things that they both already know for no in-universe reason so that the author can provide exposition to the audience? You know how I'm always talking about how that's bad, lazy writing that forces the characters to act irrationally? That's what -Pichu- actually wants to happen here. He thinks that what this story really needs is characters telling each other things they already know for the audience to hear. As such, he not only fails to perform his duties as a reviewer but also actively encourages habits of bad writing. That's how bad this is.

 

Then Jacob had a vivid flashback of the moment: In Gameville, the Lasertag rules state that if a Team Captain gets gunned down, that team loses. Jacob was the team captain,

 

Smart idea! Giving the human the spot of team captain!

 

Assuming that this is sarcasm, that's... wow. That's actually one decent criticism - it really doesn't make sense for an ordinary person to be given the most critical role on the team when he doubtlessly has the least evasive capacity. I'm astounded. -Pichu- actually said something fairly sane that properly criticizes the story. I'm truly shocked.

 

but Rayman was the brains behind him. Rayman explained their plan. “All right, we’re gonna have Kirby and Mario flank left while me and Jacob head straight. I’ll take off from Jacob to cover his rear while Link helps Jacob gun down Bowser. So Tails, how’s our plan?”

 

Bowser is an easy target! He's FAT!

 

And then he rests on his own laurels and repeats pretty much the same criticism, forgetting that the changed context makes it rather less valid in this instance - Bowser has historically shown to have good evasive ability, such as when he teleported around in Super Mario 64 or quickly slid all over the small planets in Super Mario Galaxy.

 

Don't get a swell head over making one decent comment, -Pichu-. A decent review is made of nothing but decent comments, and your review - with only one - is still just plain awful.

 

Tails stepped up. “Our chances of success are about 2,846 to 1.”

 

So you have a human, a bunny killer, a black hole, a plumber, a warrior, and a fox with two tails. GREAT TEAM! Not...

 

"I am horrified that a team of people in a world of video game characters could be composed of various video game characters! For some arbitrary reason that I never bother to explain, I deem this to be stupid!"

 

I'm retracting the minor credit I gave -Pichu- for making one decent comment. It's pretty obvious that he's just blindly calling everything that happens stupid without any reason at all, and he just happened to get lucky that one time when the thing he said was stupid actually was stupid. Remember that I was the only person who gave any actual explanation of why it was stupid - he just did his usual thing of restating what just happened and then calling it stupid without saying why. This is not how reviewing is supposed to work - it's like non-constructive criticism, except it's so non-constructive and thrown around so randomly that it doesn't even qualify as that. -Pichu-, you're so awful that you can't even do non-constructive criticism properly. This isn't a review. Your review count is zero. None of these count. None of these are reviews.

 

“That’s better than we usually do”, said Rayman.

 

Jacob (Who had been daydreaming that he was in the bathroom)

 

Gross... just gross....

 

You may have noticed that Fake!Anten hasn't shown up again since that time when -Pichu- decided to ignore the story in favour of talking about how much better the story would be if its entire premise were dropped and it were replaced by Ann 10 showing up, then had her show up to say one line (with no personality at all, natch). She seems to have mysteriously vanished; knowing -Pichu-, she's probably busy screaming over lost earrings or making him dinner in the kitchen or something.

 

suddenly shouted “All right, time’s up chumps, let’s do this!” He grabbed his gun in his hand, and as he bolted out he shouted at the top of his lungs “LEERRROOOOOOOOOY JENKINS!!!”

 

Leeroy Jenkins?

 

I have no idea who he is.

 

Oh, she's back - just in time to parrot -Pichu- himself again because women can't say anything original, and just in time to continue to display her utter lack of a unique personality. Now that she's here I wish she were gone again.

 

Meanwhile, -Pichu- reveals that he doesn't know who Leeroy Jenkins is but still feels qualified to do reviews on the internet. That's sort of like the Green Goblin deciding that he feels qualified to be the head of S.H.I.E.L.D.; any positive feedback -Pichu- receives for his lousy reviews is sort of like the rest of the Marvelverse agreeing with that assessment. (Fortunately, -Pichu- has received virtually no positive feedback, proving that YCM actually isn't quite as stupid as the Marvel populace.)

 

He was barely 10 yards away from his team when he tripped on thin air. No, it wasn’t air- It was Larry Koopa, Bowser’s 2nd youngest child.

 

With who?

 

I honestly can't think of a less appropriate time to answer the question of the Koopalings' parentage - which has gone unanswered in the canon Mario series for twenty-two years so far - than the middle of a game of laser tag.

 

As Larry aimed his gun, he taunted, “The force is strong with you, Jacob, but you are not a Jedi yet.” Bang.

 

I thought he was a koopa, not Yoda!

 

-Pichu-, it's a reference. You see, Star Wars is kind of a fairly-well known series, so the author here is making a reference to it because people will get the joke. Yes, I know that when you copy someone's dialogue it's because you're copying the whole character as well (SUBTLE PLAGIARISM JOKE), but that's not how good actual writers work.

 

Then Jacob snapped back into the present. "No, I don't", he lied. “That figures”, said an unbelieving Kirby.

 

It just hit me that Kirby can't talk ether.

 

It's a video game world of video game characters! There's no reason they shouldn't be able to talk in this universe!

 

Not to mention that anyone who's played Super Smash Bros knows that Kirby can at least say "HIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII!!!"

 

Jacob is roommates are two characters who can't talk.

 

10/10 quality writing here. A++ review. Would read again. Specifically, would read again at a Vogon Poetry Convention.

 

And he thinks he can magicly make them talk?!?!

 

YES. What part of "this is a world of video game characters where they are just like regular people" is so difficult for you to understand? There is no reason that the author can't decide that his crossover universe enables all characters to speak normally.

 

Just then, Mega Man and his sister, Roll, walked by.

 

First humans, then talking Pokemon, the walking gumball, the mean paperboy, and now robots....

 

-Pichu-'s average comment consists of repeating what just happened and then acting like it's bizarre for a video game crossover universe to contain characters from many video games. My average comment consists of many, many tears of agony.

 

I'm going to repeat the question I reserve for only the most horribly awful of works: What is worse than this? What could possibly be worse than a review like this in which the reviewer makes an idiot of himself and doesn't do any actual reviewing?

 

(And please don’t ask me to explain Roll’s name, I’m not in the mood.) “Hey guys!” Said Mega Man. “What’s up?” Roll walked over and saw the article in the newspaper about the Lasertag championship. “This is about the Leeroy Jacob incident, isn’t it?” She said.

 

Now it's Leeroy Jacob? What happened to Leeroy Jenkins?

 

No, you idiot, it's a joke because his name is Jacob but he shouted Leeroy Jenkins because it's a reference to a World of Warccraft video where Leeroy Jenkins charged in blindly and ruined everything and I HATE THIS THING I HATE IT I HATE IT

 

Note how every single one of Ann 10's lines in this pitiful excuse for a review is completely devoid of any actual personality. They would all read exactly the same if they were just in normal (or blue in my transcription's care) text and were spoken by -Pichu- directly instead; in fact, in such a case, you could never tell that there was ever supposed to be a guest reviewer, and turning any random lines from the review purple would have exactly the same effect. There is no reason whatsoever for there to be a guest reviewer here save the fact that -Pichu- is copying Foe Fiction and Foe Fiction has guest reviewers.

 

Before they even had a chance to answer, Roll continued. “Well, good news for Jacob; The legislation was passed so that people cannot get kicked off the team, so Jacob’s back in.”

 

No can get kicked off but Jacob.

 

Sorry, guys, I can't even tell what this line is supposed to mean. It makes so little sense that -Pichu- must have misread not actually read the original text. All I can say for certain is that it contributes nothing to anything and provides more evidence (as if we actually needed more evidence) that -Pichu- is a moron and shouldn't even be attempting this.

 

Jacob, Kirby, and Torchic had a simultaneous “WHA-?!”

 

Can't talk!!!

 

THEY CAN TALK IN THIS UNIVERSE YOU MORON I HATE THIS THING I HATE IT I HATE IT I HATE IT I HATE IT

 

The look in Mega Man’s eyes made it clear he wasn’t enthusiastic about the idea either. “Hey don’t look at me, it was Roll’s idea to ask Dedede

 

How in hell did I get in the story!?!?!

 

Indeed, what is a video game character doing in a world populated entirely by a variety of video game characters!? That's absurd! This story is just so nonsensical and wacky, guys, I just can't handle it!

 

Ah, well. See you in 3 weeks.” Both of the androids left.

 

Back to the human and the two who can't talk.

 

In his next comment, I'm guessing -Pichu- complains that Kirby does not exist in the same universe as Torchic, which means that this whole story is just stupid.

 

Once they were out of earshot, Mega Man decided to mess with Roll a little bit. “You just suggested that to Dedede because you like Jacob!” Roll blushed. “Wha- No I don’t!”

 

Here-here! Here-Here! To the people and talking gum of my land! Roll likes Jacob!

 

What.

 

Oh Dedede!

 

Isn't he funny?

 

No. No, he isn't funny. The only thing that could be less funny than watching -Pichu- make Dedede act like a moron is watching -Pichu- make his author-insertion clones of himself talk about how funny his author-insertion clones of himself are. -Pichu- laughs at his own jokes and then adds other characters he controls to laugh at his own jokes because he's classy like that. (This is why my author-insertion clones of myself spend their time insulting each others' writing instead.)

 

Mega Man smirked. “That’s fine, your secrets safe with me!” Roll groaned, then blushed some more.

 

Meanwhile, one of them awkward silences fell upon Jacob and his friends. Kirby broke the silence after a full 2 minutes. “Welp, we’re boned.”

 

They're not talking! YAY!

 

That's it; I can't take any more of this. I'm done.

 

Fortunately, so is -Pichu-.

 

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Thanks to my guest stars, King Dedede and Ann Tennyson!

 

Seriously. That's it. It ends right there. There's no final opinion given of the story. There's no rating. There's no positive or negative recommendation. There's no conclusion. There's just the story ending and then -Pichu- wandering off.

 

This doesn't even qualify as a review. -Pichu-'s commentary consisted of three elements: calling random things stupid; calling everything fundamental to the concept of a crossover (like talking characters and multiple characters from video games) stupid; and random shenanigans that were presumably intended to be funny but that weren't and that contributed nothing. The actual "review" aspect seems to be missing here. No positive or negative criticism was given. No conclusion was reached. This was nothing but -Pichu- jumping around like a monkey. There was no final summary because -Pichu- had written nothing to summarize.

 

If you're masochistic enough to actually pay attention to -Pichu-'s horrible comments, you'll see that he doesn't seem to actually pay attention to the story at all. He latches on to several random tangential things like the Leeroy Jenkins business or the thing about Jacob being on or off the team, but the actual story (which isn't exactly deep or hard to follow) completely evades him. Here's what happened: in the past, Jacob screwed up as captain of a laser tag team and was kicked off the team, but in the present, a new competition has started and he's been brought back to the team by Roll. All of this was of course completely ignored by -Pichu-, who was far too busy complaining about Torchic and Kirby being able to speak. It's like he got to the point where he made that brilliant and totally on-topic comment about how laser tag wasn't as cool as RANDOM ANN 10 VISIT and then literally decided to stop paying attention to the story thereafter. Come on, how do you screw up "Let's review a story" so badly by omitting both the story and the review!?

 

The qualifications for writing a fanfic - write something worth reading - aren't that strenuous, but YCM still seems to fall short of that mark. The qualifications for writing a review are different - you need to be able to write something worth reading about another work, so you need to be good enough that you can bring something interesting to the table.

 

We've seen -Pichu-'s attempt at attempting to pass the fanfic mark. It was a disaster. He failed not only at writing something worth reading but also, through plagiarism, at writing something at all, which is about as terrible a fail as is possible in the known universe. Somehow, he took that as an indication that he was skilled enough to go on to review the works of others. The result throws into serious question whether he is skilled enough to even read the works of others.

 

Don't write the review series, -Pichu-! You're not good at it! You can't do it! You've proven that you can't do it! You're not even trying! Look at this! You can't possibly think this is good! You can't possibly think this is worth reading! You're terrible! You're stealing all but the actual text of your review from Foe Fiction and you're still terrible! Give up! Stop reviewing! Stop writing! Stop typing! Stop reading! Stop using YCM! Stop using the internet! You have horribly screwed up on a website where the average user is a ten-year-old kid making overpowered fake trading cards! That's like being in a special-ed class and being told that, nope, sorry, you're too stupid and you're going to have to leave! This is awful! All of this is awful! You're awful! Get out of here! Cut rotten pieces of the apple! Fall into a hole with not end! Just go! Leave! Begone, foul beast! When you're unspeakably awful by YCM's standards, something is very wrong!

 

I'm not trying to say that I am the One True Reviewer and everyone else should just go away because they cannot possibly match my brilliant reviewing. All I'm asking is for here some minimum level of Not Sucking As Much As -Pichu-. But look at this! You were bewildered by the very concept of a crossover! You failed to do any actual reviewing! Your writing was utterly worthless on every conceivable level! It's all there, black and white, clear as crystal! You stole fizzy lifting drinks! You bumped into the ceiling which now has to be washed and sterilized, so you get nothing! You lose! Good day, sir!

 

This concludes the only decent review that will ever be posted in your thread.

 

And... cut. Kill the cameras, Grell - we don't want anyone to see this. Well, gentlemen, it's been fun ending your season with you, but I'm afraid I can now renegotiate our contract so that the two of you are no longer required to exist, so I'm afraid you're going to have to die now. It may sound harsh, but with all of this time-travel, we've all killed each other several times before anyhow.

 

You-!

 

Don't waste your time struggling with your bonds; escape is strictly impossible, I assure you. Any last words? I'm afraid I won't be calling you a preacher or whoever you're supposed to call when someone's about to die.

 

I'll give you last words. You're a lousy reviewer and you'll never be any match for me.

 

I can't even begin to tell you how confusing that gets, since I used to be you anyhow.

 

Your skills have become unspeakably weak. But you're still several orders of magnitude better than -Pichu-.

 

You damn me with faint praise, my former self. I hope that when I die, my last words are better than yours. Well, goodb-

 

I have a last question.

 

Oh, do you?

 

Anten's dead, isn't she?

 

Eh? No, of course not. She's my hostage. What makes you say that?

 

If she were really your hostage and depowered as you claimed, you wouldn't have left her elsewhere, guarded by some unnamed associate of yours. You'd have brought her here with us, so you could guard us all together and make her far more useful as a hostage. Since you didn't but she hasn't shown up, you must have killed her!

 

Okay, fine, I fibbed a bit. I was afraid she might get back her powers at some point, so I couldn't risk letting her live - after all, my own superpowers that I gained using A.W.E.S.O.M.E. are horribly inconsistent, and though that's probably because they were taken from someone with inconsistent powers, I didn't want to take any chances. That's the problem with the inventions of mad scientists, isn't it? They're mad, and tend to go horribly wrong. Killing her was perfectly logi-

 

You. Killed. Anten.

 

Yes, I killed Anten. Now, goodbye. *stab*

 

You...

 

Now, on to you, former-me. I'm afra-

 

YOU. KILLED. ANTEN!

 

What the- no, those bonds should have been unbreakable! you can't-

 

YOU DESTROYED THE MOST PERFECT BEING IN THIS UNIVERSE!

 

Arrggghh, I-

 

HOW DARE YOU EVEN SPEAK HER NAME-

 

You can't-

 

WITH THOSE FILTHY LIPS OF YOUR-

 

AHHHH! My leg-

 

FOR YOU TO HAVE DESECRATED ANTEN-

 

Get off, it h-

 

AND TO THEN USE HER FRIENDSHIP WITH OTHERS-

 

My arms-

 

AS A WEAPON FOR YOUR DIRTY SCHEMES-

 

It hurts-

 

TO THINK THAT YOU ARE WORTHY-

 

ARRGGHHH!

 

TO EVEN EXIST IN THIS UNIVERSE AFTER YOU-

 

No, no, no-

 

HAVE YOU NO SHAME!?

 

I can't-

 

ALLLLLLL HAAAIIIILLLLLLLLL AANNNNNTTTEEEEEEEENNNNNN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

 

I think I'm- no- it's-

 

...I think I'm finished...

 

Of course... I should have realized...

 

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In... reviews........ of... bad... shonen.... fics... I... I... for........ got............... the........................ pow.............. er.................. of........ fr......... i......... e......... n......... d....... s........ h........... i................. p........................

 

Izzy! Izzy!

 

...

 

Ah, Grell, is that you over there? Come over here; I need your help. Yes, of course you're on my side. I seem to be in a spot of bother here; would you mind taking that knife from my future self and cutting me free of these ropes? Excellent. Thank you, Grell. I'll be taking that knife. Now, let's go check these bodies.

 

Izzy's... dead, I'm afraid. The knife must have hit something important. Future-me... well, he's alive. I suppose his inconsistent powers must have given him healing or something at the last moment. He's still unconscious, though. I should probably kill him, but I'm horribly confused around how time-travel works, and I'm worried that killing him now will kill me in the future when I come back to the past. Or something. But I need to get him out of the way, and eventually his inconsistent powers will give him the ability to overpower me unless I opt for a permanent solution. I don't- wait, is that A.W.E.S.O.M.E. on the floor there?

 

Goodbye, Grell.

 

Excellent. I've successfully incorporated Grell into my future self. Now, at the very least, he won't remember any of this, so he won't be coming after me again. And to get him away from here... he must have stored F.A.B.U.L.O.U.S. around here somewhere, right? Ah, here it is. I'll just throw him in here and send him off to a random time - and this mini-bomb will detonate afterward, destroying the machinery so that he can't come back. (Why is there a mini-bomb in my studio? It really is messy in here.) Hopefully, in another time with no memory, he - I - will be a much better and rather less murderous person. Goodbye, Salty.

 

FIN

 

 

 

EPILOGUE

 

LASERHANDSMAN went on to star in his own series on Fox.

 

Fox canceled it after four episodes.

 

Anten went on to become the most powerful being in the universe.

 

Batman sued for copyright infringement.

 

Izzy went back to the Digital World.

 

He remained there so long that he became a Digimon himself.

 

The Professor Young Boy became a professor of mathematics at MIT.

 

He still teaches sixth-grade English.

 

LASERHANDSMAN went on to star in another series of his own on Adult Swim.

 

Fox somehow canceled that one too.

 

And as for Future Crab/Salty...

 

MORE EPILOGUE - IN THE PAST

 

Ugh... where am I? I... who am I? I can't remember... anything. What's going on here? I should be able to remember. I seem to be injured. Clothes badly damaged. But I'm healing too quickly for it to be normal. And I feel unusual... power inside me. Where is this? I'm sitting in what looks like the wreck of some crazy machine. I must... I must be a superhero! That's the best explanation. I must have fought a mad scientist who used this device to wipe my memory before I destroyed it. But that won't stop me from being a superhero! From now on, I shall call myself... Captain R!

[Lord Smeagle]

We start our first review with When World Collide.

 

[spoiler=Lord Smeagle's Review Reviews!]

 

(Upon refreshing the page I find that Crabby has already reviewed your review. However, since I went to the trouble of typing this up just for you, I think I'll go ahead and post my inferior review-review anyway.)

 

Episode 1-Laser Tag, You're It!/Part 1

 

We start the story with a retarded name...

 

On the bright side, though, the author wrote the first chapter!

 

Welcome to Gameville. Yeah, the name’s kinda dumb,

 

NO! REALLY![/sarcasm]

 

but I had to call it something, and Videoland was already taken. So, here we are.

 

There was a Videoland.....

 

One day in Gameville, Jacob was walking down the street with his roommates, Torchic and Kirby. Everything seemed normal enough;

 

Yeah! Real normal! You're walking down the street with a black hole and a Pokemon. That's normal alright!

 

The sky was partly cloudy, the plants were carnivorous, plumbers jumped on mushrooms with eyes,

 

I believe their names are, M and L.

 

Really? I thought their names were Mario and Luigi. But maybe the author wanted to leave that open to interpretation.

 

and guys without arms could carry stuff.

 

WHOOP-DE-DA! Give `em a prize!

 

Shame on you, Pichu. These poor armless people are overcoming their challenges and you want to make fun of them? You hate women and now disabled people, too? For shame.

 

Then they heard the familiar call of “Eggs tree! Eggs tree!” It was Homestar. He was doing his part time job as a newspaper boy. He stopped next to Jacob and chucked a newspaper at them, and ran off.

 

Nice town. All you need is an emo Pikachu and Gameland or whatever is perfect!

 

Jacob picked it up. “Whoa, there’s going to be a Lasertag championship in 3 weeks!” Said Jacob.

 

Lasertag.... lasertag.... Why can't it be something better like..... OH! Ann 10 comes to town!

 

“It seems like you’re hyped”, said Torchic,

 

HOLY S*** IT TALKS! But wait... I'm a Pichu and I can talk. What do you think Ann?

 

HOLY S*** IT TALKS!

 

HOLY S***, IT REVIEWS!

 

Well she is a human!

 

who had the ability to speak English after a run-in with Iggy Koopa. “It’s just too bad you got kicked off the Lasertag team last year.”

 

YOU WERE KICKED OFF!

 

Jacob chose that time to have a brain fart. “Wha-?!” He asked. “Don’t you remember what happened last year?” Replied Kirby.

 

No we don't, marshmallow! TELL US!

 

Then Jacob had a vivid flashback of the moment: In Gameville, the Lasertag rules state that if a Team Captain gets gunned down, that team loses. Jacob was the team captain,

 

Smart idea! Giving the human the spot of team captain!

 

Clearly, Pichu also discriminates against non-humans. MARSHMALLOW CREATURES ARE PEOPLE TOO, YOU KNOW!

 

but Rayman was the brains behind him. Rayman explained their plan. “All right, we’re gonna have Kirby and Mario flank left while me and Jacob head straight. I’ll take off from Jacob to cover his rear while Link helps Jacob gun down Bowser. So Tails, how’s our plan?”

 

Bowser is an easy target! He's FAT!

 

Yes, because as a large turtle-creature, clearly he should conform to your human standards of skinniness. You racist bastard.

 

Tails stepped up. “Our chances of success are about 2,846 to 1.”

 

So you have a human, a bunny killer, a black hole, a plumber, a warrior, and a fox with two tails. GREAT TEAM! Not...

 

“That’s better than we usually do”, said Rayman.

 

Jacob (Who had been daydreaming that he was in the bathroom)

 

Gross... just gross....

 

suddenly shouted “All right, time’s up chumps, let’s do this!” He grabbed his gun in his hand, and as he bolted out he shouted at the top of his lungs “LEERRROOOOOOOOOY JENKINS!!!”

 

Leeroy Jenkins?

 

I have no idea who he is.

 

Protip: KNOW YOUR MEMES.

 

He was barely 10 yards away from his team when he tripped on thin air. No, it wasn’t air- It was Larry Koopa, Bowser’s 2nd youngest child.

 

With who?

 

As Larry aimed his gun, he taunted, “The force is strong with you, Jacob, but you are not a Jedi yet.” Bang.

 

I thought he was a koopa, not Yoda!

 

Place predicate in front of the subject, the koopa does not. Weak this joke is.

 

Then Jacob snapped back into the present. "No, I don't", he lied. “That figures”, said an unbelieving Kirby.

 

It just hit me that Kirby can't talk ether.

 

NO, REALLY? [/sarcasm]

 

Jacob is roommates are two characters who can't talk.

 

And he thinks he can magicly make them talk?!?!

 

And he thinks he can magically make this review good?

 

Just then, Mega Man and his sister, Roll, walked by.

 

First humans, then talking Pokemon, the walking gumball, the mean paperboy, and now robots....

 

Because clearly humans were here first in video game world. GET OUT, you filthy non-human immigrant scum.

 

(And please don’t ask me to explain Roll’s name, I’m not in the mood.) “Hey guys!” Said Mega Man. “What’s up?” Roll walked over and saw the article in the newspaper about the Lasertag championship. “This is about the Leeroy Jacob incident, isn’t it?” She said.

 

Now it's Leeroy Jacob? What happened to Leeroy Jenkins?

 

He left after you failed to recognize his meme.

 

Before they even had a chance to answer, Roll continued. “Well, good news for Jacob; The legislation was passed so that people cannot get kicked off the team, so Jacob’s back in.”

 

No can get kicked off but Jacob.

 

Jacob, Kirby, and Torchic had a simultaneous “WHA-?!”

 

Can't talk!!!

 

Can't review!!!

 

The look in Mega Man’s eyes made it clear he wasn’t enthusiastic about the idea either. “Hey don’t look at me, it was Roll’s idea to ask Dedede.

 

How in hell did I get in the story!?!?!

 

Ah, well. See you in 3 weeks.” Both of the androids left.

 

Back to the human and the two who can't talk.

 

Once they were out of earshot, Mega Man decided to mess with Roll a little bit. “You just suggested that to Dedede because you like Jacob!” Roll blushed. “Wha- No I don’t!”

 

Here-here! Here-Here! To the people and talking gum of my land! Roll likes Jacob!

 

Oh Dedede!

 

Isn't he funny?

 

Mega Man smirked. “That’s fine, your secrets safe with me!” Roll groaned, then blushed some more.

 

Meanwhile, one of them awkward silences fell upon Jacob and his friends. Kirby broke the silence after a full 2 minutes. “Welp, we’re boned.”

 

They're not talking! YAY!

 

He's done reviewing! YAY!

 

Well, kiddos, we've learned several important things from this review. First of all, that not only is Pichu not cut out for being a writer, he's not a very good reviewer, either. Second of all, he dislikes women, disabled people, and non-humans, even in video games. Third of all, he's a shameless plagiarist who not only acknowledges, but openly DENIES his plagiarism of our good Crab Helmet.

 

Why is this person still on the site? Surely there is a rule against this level of combined ignorance, rudeness, and disregard for people's basic rights? If not, I would like to peacefully submit that one be made.

 

 

 

[PikMan]

I have some things to clear up.

 

1- When Pichu said "No one can get kicked off except Jacob", he meant that it just said that PEOPLE can't get kicked off, and Jacob was really the only person per se.

 

2- Jacob actually isn't a person. He's a Mii, so don't get too creeped out by the "fingerless hands" comment in part 2 of that episode.

 

3- I actually gave a sentence of backstory as to why Torchic can speak english. It's by the introduction of Ann 10 as a guest reviewer.

 

4- So far, NOBODY HAS CRITICIZED THE FACT THAT A FRIGGIN' ROBOT HAS A CRUSH ON A HUMAN! Oh, sorry, I mean, A MII!

[CrabHelmet]

and at the end try to tell them what to fix or assure them that their idea is good.

 

That's dishonest. Not all ideas are good. Some suck. Case in point: -Pichu-'s idea that he should do a review series.

 

Yours... no. And when you threw in your Ann 10 character' date=' who I doubt that anybody besides you and Jolta care much about (sorry, the story just isn't that special, I realize at least one person may get mad for me saying that),

[/quote']

 

Anten is popular enough to have shippers. >.> But she's pretty much completely different from Ann 10 by now.

 

I thought of two things:

1. Random insertion? No. DO NOT DO. Crabhelmet's good with that because he only makes up guys for the reviews. Your taking a character from a story felt lazy. And yes' date=' I do remark about me doing that GX fan fic often, but I don't take it that far. I hope.

[/quote']

 

Well, actually, I steal guys from Foe Fics to be my guest commentators. It's just that I tend to ignore their original characterizations (heh, as if characters in Foe Fics actually have characterizations) and extrapolate everything from one line: Anten became a Mary Sue, Izzy became a guy who cares about his friends and nobody else, The Professor Young Boy became a professor who was also a young boy, and LASERHANDSMAN became some awesome guy who just shot lasers from his hands.

 

So' date=' what I'd suggest: Find something else to do,

[/quote']

 

THIS THIS A THOUSAND TIMES THIS

 

CarlinFan: You're too extreme.

 

There is no such thing as too extreme when someone is this bad at reviewing. There's a reason I brought back the "What is worse than this?" question in my meta-review - this really is about as awful as reviews can possibly get.

 

Jolta: I think it's weird to have him review your story when he keeps systematically posting on your topic. Don't you?

 

Well' date=' it's not like anyone else reads Jolta's story. >_> But there are serious impartiality problems there.

 

Me: I hope that you realize you COULD have gotten away with this if it weren't for Ann 10 and whoever the orange guy tends to be.

 

If he hadn't gone for Ann 10, it wouldn't have been copying - but that wouldn't have stopped the review from being awful.

 

I have some things to clear up.

 

1- When Pichu said "No one can get kicked off except Jacob"' date=' he meant that it just said that PEOPLE can't get kicked off, and Jacob was really the only person per se.

[/quote']

 

That would mean that everyone could get kicked off except Jacob, so it still makes no sense. Not to mention that, when you're in a universe shared by a wide variety of sentient beings, there's no reason to assume that People = Humans.

 

3- I actually gave a sentence of backstory as to why Torchic can speak english. It's by the introduction of Ann 10 as a guest reviewer.

 

Oh' date=' don't be stupid. -Pichu- didn't actually [i']read[/i] your story. He was too busy making his cat dance on the keyboard.

 

4- So far' date=' NOBODY HAS CRITICIZED THE FACT THAT A FRIGGIN' ROBOT HAS A CRUSH ON A HUMAN! Oh, sorry, I mean, A MII!

[/quote']

 

In a mega-crossover world where robots and Miis are sentient beings, I see nothing wrong with that. In fact, that's the sort of thing that good writers have used as allegories for interracial marriage and other stuff like that.

[Grunt Issun]

WOOOW this is definitly NOT foefiction rip off, especiallynot with anten as a guest speaker RIIIGHT

[Pichu]

funk u crab! rot in hell! all your foe fics are about making people feel like sheet! I HATE YOUR GUTS YOU MOTHERF***ER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! PikMan liked my review and you make it like its sheet! damn you! I HOPE U DROP DEAD!

[Grunt Issun]

yeesh! you have got to chill man, Ive seen abriged series that swear less. also, I think that Crab should ban you for verbaly assulting a mod, go ahead crab,doit.

[Yankee]

f*** u crab! rot in hell! all your foe fics are about making people feel like s***! I HATE YOUR GUTS YOU MOTHERF***ER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! PikMan liked my review and you make it like its s***! damn you! I HOPE U DROP DEAD!

 

If I may...

 

Your grammar is off.