Akeno_Ederis_17 Posted December 23, 2011 Report Share Posted December 23, 2011 [img]http://img338.imageshack.us/img338/7021/332516.jpg[/img] i do not own the image just edited it. how about this guys? [img]http://img265.imageshack.us/img265/7021/332516.jpg[/img] LORE: this card cannot be speccially summoned except by its own effect. if the effect of "betrayer of light - EVE" is activated and has resolved, banish this card from your deck or hand. on your 2nd main phase special summon this card from the banished pile. if this card is succesfully special summoned you can discard 2 cards from your hand to destroy all cards on the field except this card. if this card is destroyed return this card to the deck with 1 "betrayer of light - EVE". OCG fix really appreciated thanks again. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Not-so-Radiant Arin Posted December 23, 2011 Report Share Posted December 23, 2011 [quote name='sIege-eI' timestamp='1324616288' post='5724787'] OCG fix really appreciated [/quote] Challenge Accepted. [i]During either player's Damage Step, when a DARK monster you control battles a LIGHT monster: You can discard this card to have 1 DARK monster on your field gain 1500 ATK until the End Phase of this turn.[/i] OT: It's support for Dark Attribute Monster Cards. Tread carefully, my friend. In all honesty, however, this thing wouldn't stand up to Honest, and there is a chance that your opponent will have an Honest in your hand to counter this card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sleepy Posted December 23, 2011 Report Share Posted December 23, 2011 [quote name='Dante v. Nero' timestamp='1324616756' post='5724803'] Challenge Accepted. [i][b]During either player's Damage Step, when a DARK monster you control battles a LIGHT monster: you can discard this card and target 1 monster you control; target gains 1500 ATK until the End Phase.[/b][/i] OT: It's support for Dark Attribute Monster Cards. Tread carefully, my friend. In all honesty, however, this thing wouldn't stand up to Honest, and there is a chance that your opponent will have an Honest in your hand to counter this card. [/quote] Fixed that OCG fix a little. -After the condition of a DARK battling a LIGHT is met, the card doesn't actually specify that the monster gaining the boost must be DARK at all. -The way you worded the discard would be a cost, so it'll go before a semi-colon. OT: Card is interesting, but oddly specific. Still is both 1)Honest done balanced, and 2) Ally of Justice done right. It has my approval. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Akeno_Ederis_17 Posted December 23, 2011 Author Report Share Posted December 23, 2011 [quote name='Dante v. Nero' timestamp='1324616756' post='5724803'] Challenge Accepted. [i]During either player's Damage Step, when a DARK monster you control battles a LIGHT monster: You can discard this card to have 1 DARK monster on your field gain 1500 ATK until the End Phase of this turn.[/i] OT: It's support for Dark Attribute Monster Cards. Tread carefully, my friend. In all honesty, however, this thing wouldn't stand up to Honest, and there is a chance that your opponent will have an Honest in your hand to counter this card. [/quote] thanks for the OCG help .. i really designed her to not overpower or match up against honest , to maintain originality. anyways thnx ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Not-so-Radiant Arin Posted December 23, 2011 Report Share Posted December 23, 2011 [quote name='~Applejack~' timestamp='1324617326' post='5724826'] Fixed that OCG fix a little. -After the condition of a DARK battling a LIGHT is met, the card doesn't actually specify that the monster gaining the boost must be DARK at all. -The way you worded the discard would be a cost, so it'll go before a semi-colon. [/quote] Ahh, I see. Thank you, lol, even I'm not too good with the OCG yet. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Akeno_Ederis_17 Posted December 23, 2011 Author Report Share Posted December 23, 2011 [quote name='~Applejack~' timestamp='1324617326' post='5724826'] Fixed that OCG fix a little. -After the condition of a DARK battling a LIGHT is met, the card doesn't actually specify that the monster gaining the boost must be DARK at all. -The way you worded the discard would be a cost, so it'll go before a semi-colon. OT: Card is interesting, but oddly specific. Still is both 1)Honest done balanced, and 2) Ally of Justice done right. It has my approval. [/quote] thanks so uhm the final lore will be this? "During either player's Damage Step, when a DARK monster you control battles a LIGHT monster: You can discard this card to have 1 DARK monster on your field gain 1500 ATK until the End Phase of this turn." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sleepy Posted December 23, 2011 Report Share Posted December 23, 2011 Actually, the one in my post is a bit different: [b]During either player's Damage Step, when a DARK monster you control battles a LIGHT monster: you can discard this card and target 1 monster you control; target gains 1500 ATK until the End Phase.[/b] Also, if you capitalize the first letter of each word in the card name, and the first letter of the Type, they'll look more like the real life cards. For your second card, I like how the way it's written, one successful effect resolution from the first card is enough to trigger 3 copies of your second card from your Deck. As for it's OCG, I think it's more like: [b]Cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. Must be Special Summoned by it's own effect, and cannot be Special Summoned by other ways. If the effect of "Betrayer of Light - EVE" activates and resolves, banish this card from your hand or Deck. During your 2nd Main Phase, Special Summon this card banished in this way. When this card is Special Summoned: you can discard 2 cards; destroy all cards on the field, except this card. When this card is destroyed, return it to the Deck with 1 "Betrayer of Light - EVE" from your Graveyard.[/b] ^you should also know that, individual effects in this card that don't use a colon/semi-colon, by definition are continuous effects, and therefore, those effects cannot be chained to by other cards. If you want to change that from a certain effect(s) in this card, I can re-word some things here and there. Balance-wise, they are good. It's a specific combo, but it's rewarding once you pull it, and it sounds fun. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Akeno_Ederis_17 Posted December 23, 2011 Author Report Share Posted December 23, 2011 [quote name='~Applejack~' timestamp='1324619640' post='5724870'] Actually, the one in my post is a bit different: [b]During either player's Damage Step, when a DARK monster you control battles a LIGHT monster: you can discard this card and target 1 monster you control; target gains 1500 ATK until the End Phase.[/b] Also, if you capitalize the first letter of each word in the card name, and the first letter of the Type, they'll look more like the real life cards. For your second card, I like how the way it's written, one successful effect resolution from the first card is enough to trigger 3 copies of your second card from your Deck. As for it's OCG, I think it's more like: [b]Cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. Must be Special Summoned by it's own effect, and cannot be Special Summoned by other ways. If the effect of "Betrayer of Light - EVE" activates and resolves, banish this card from your hand or Deck. During your 2nd Main Phase, Special Summon this card banished in this way. When this card is Special Summoned: you can discard 2 cards; destroy all cards on the field, except this card. When this card is destroyed, return it to the Deck with 1 "Betrayer of Light - EVE" from your Graveyard.[/b] ^you should also know that, individual effects in this card that don't use a colon/semi-colon, by definition are continuous effects, and therefore, those effects cannot be chained to by other cards. If you want to change that from a certain effect(s) in this card, I can re-word some things here and there. Balance-wise, they are good. It's a specific combo, but it's rewarding once you pull it, and it sounds fun. [/quote] thanks for helping me on my OCG , im happy you liked it ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted December 23, 2011 Report Share Posted December 23, 2011 Now that the OCG is corrected I'll just focus on the effects for Betrayer of Light Eve, the atk gain is very good, but you might want to specify the monster you control yes it's only 1 turn, but 1 turn is all you really need, and for some monsters this is easy OTK set up with Valkyrie the summoning effect is fine, cost isn't really as high as it could be though personally this would be more powerful compared to Gandora the Dragon of Destruction (remember that one only lasts on the field for 1 turn) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sleepy Posted December 23, 2011 Report Share Posted December 23, 2011 [quote name='ragnarok1945' timestamp='1324627300' post='5724962'] Now that the OCG is corrected I'll just focus on the effects for Betrayer of Light Eve, the atk gain is very good, but you might want to specify the monster you control yes it's only 1 turn, but 1 turn is all you really need, and for some monsters this is easy OTK set up with Valkyrie the summoning effect is fine, cost isn't really as high as it could be though personally this would be more powerful compared to Gandora the Dragon of Destruction (remember that one only lasts on the field for 1 turn) [/quote] It is actually justified because: You need to have a DARK monster Your opponent needs to have a LIGHT monster The battle must be successful The effect of Betrayer of Light must be successful too. THEN it is the only time you can prepare for the important Summons, that still need 2 more of your turns. It's a bit hard to achieve actually, and the Valkyrie is only useful if you get to Summon it in that way. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Akeno_Ederis_17 Posted December 23, 2011 Author Report Share Posted December 23, 2011 [quote name='ragnarok1945' timestamp='1324627300' post='5724962'] Now that the OCG is corrected I'll just focus on the effects for Betrayer of Light Eve, the atk gain is very good, but you might want to specify the monster you control yes it's only 1 turn, but 1 turn is all you really need, and for some monsters this is easy OTK set up with Valkyrie the summoning effect is fine, cost isn't really as high as it could be though personally this would be more powerful compared to Gandora the Dragon of Destruction (remember that one only lasts on the field for 1 turn) [/quote] for me uhmm, i think gandora and my valykrie cant be compared, by power yes maybe my valkyrie may over power gandora but gandora appears on the field like a boom, while my valkyrie waits 2 turn before she hits the field, thus the opponent may prepare for her descent just by synchro summoning stardust dragon, or if they dont have stardust they can reserve their good traps for my valkyrie. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sleepy Posted December 23, 2011 Report Share Posted December 23, 2011 On that note, this is a real-life card that would also hurt the strategy in a funny way. It is also widely used as a side Deck option. [img]http://images3.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20110617071547/yugioh/images/thumb/8/86/BurialfromaDifferentDimensionSDLS-EN-C-1E.png/300px-BurialfromaDifferentDimensionSDLS-EN-C-1E.png[/img] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Akeno_Ederis_17 Posted December 24, 2011 Author Report Share Posted December 24, 2011 maybe i really designed her to be soo fragile Dx poor valkyrie , the 2 turns that shes banished is her time of transformation from a fallen angel to a really powerful creature and became the valkyria of destruction. ---she is an angel that betrayed her own kind because of love thus she was thrown away from their realm..the two turns were the times that she was so sad and fragile but she returned not as a fallen angel but as a seraphinian (from the word seraphim meaning to burn) with great power and the will to fight T.T --- just wanna share that Dx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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