my first card plz dont judge

[jixsel11]

just a colple of cards im a newb

[·Toot]

But we're supposed to judge :T

 

and a heads up... attachments aren't allowed (Unless they changed that rule... prob didn't)

 

if you want to post your card make the card... You've done that already... click on the card and an code will appear below it... copy and paste that into your post... and now you know how to post a card ;)

[REvan342]

Since these are your first cards i will go easy on you. OCG was invented for a reason, you should study up on it before deciding to post in the RC forum.

Honestly the second cards ability makes no sence at all.... the third one may be innapropriate ( the pic is a bit suggestive ) despite these flaws, they are not bad for a first attempt.

[Sergio Dark World General]

Since these are your first cards i will go easy on you. OCG was invented for a reason, you should study up on it before deciding to post in the RC forum.

Honestly the second cards ability makes no sence at all.... the third one may be innapropriate ( the pic is a bit suggestive ) despite these flaws, they are not bad for a first attempt.

In first attempts OCG its not that important. I know that 2nd card is a "lil" o'p it should have 2300 ATK or a little less.

However for first attempt i'd give an 7.8/10

[Akeno_Ederis_17]

I think the second card is balanced, as 2 turns is a very long time nowadays.

 

Only the artwork is somehow questionable, you can't actually make a card (monster card to be exact) who's artwork is one of the main character. i suggest you change that.

 

For the first and third card, they are cool (especially the third <3 ).

 

all in all i think it is only the OCG that you really need to fix, which is "normal" to newbies.

 

keep it up :)

[REvan342]

In first attempts OCG its not that important. I know that 2nd card is a "lil" o'p it should have 2300 ATK or a little less.

However for first attempt i'd give an 7.8/10

 

Im srry lol. OCG is just a pet-peve of mine. I sucked at OCG when i started making cards. He dosent seem to have a problem with balencing which is great =)

[Sander]

I think the second card is balanced, as 2 turns is a very long time nowadays.

 

Because Summoning a 3k beatstick whilst Skill Drain is activated is so freaking balanced, right?

 

Anyways, people should not go easy on a new person just because they're new, unless you've just started playing YuGiOh. If that's not the case, you're going to get criticism like other people on this site get.

 

Anyways: First card is broken, as it at the moment, it turns Foolish Burial, Lavalval Chain etc. etc into a 3k beater + 1000 LP to boot. Second card is broken because it turns into a fully attacking ready 3K beater with Skill Drain + it's a DARK monster so it gains a ton of support from DARK support cards.

[Lucas the Flame]

First Cards

When this card is sent to the graveyard; gain 1000 life points and summon 1 level 4 or lower “Egyptian” monster from your deck.

 

Second Card

This card cannot attack during the first two turn after it is summoned.

LVL: 5

ATK: 2600

 

Third Card

When this monster attacks an opponent’s, it gains 300 attack during the damage step only.

 

This is this how I think your cards should be changed, but it's your choice.

[REvan342]

Because Summoning a 3k beatstick whilst Skill Drain is activated is so freaking balanced, right?

 

Anyways, people should not go easy on a new person just because they're new, unless you've just started playing YuGiOh. If that's not the case, you're going to get criticism like other people on this site get.

 

Anyways: First card is broken, as it at the moment, it turns Foolish Burial, Lavalval Chain etc. etc into a 3k beater + 1000 LP to boot. Second card is broken because it turns into a fully attacking ready 3K beater with Skill Drain + it's a DARK monster so it gains a ton of support from DARK support cards.

 

All the second card really needs to be balenced is 2 or 3 added levels.... And zanda..... its just yugioh forum... dont get so worked up over this okay? its bad for the blood pressure =) and discouraging to new members.

[Sergio Dark World General]

Im srry lol. OCG is just a pet-peve of mine. I sucked at OCG when i started making cards. He dosent seem to have a problem with balencing which is great =)

I know how you feel *-*

[Sander]

All the second card really needs to be balenced is 2 or 3 added levels.... And zanda..... its just yugioh forum... dont get so worked up over this okay? its bad for the blood pressure =) and discouraging to new members.

 

Who in the world said I was getting worked up and how did you deduce that from my post? I was saying thatTC shouldn't expect people to treat him any different from older members just because he's new.

[REvan342]

Who in the world said I was getting worked up and how did you deduce that from my post? I was saying thatTC shouldn't expect people to treat him any different from older members just because he's new.

 

The way you say many of you suggestions sound "angry or arrogent" you do this to alot of newbies... you did it to me, and i didnt much appreiciate it.

just because youre a "legendary member" dosent give you the right to bully others in the forum.

"Because Summoning a 3k beatstick whilst Skill Drain is activated is so freaking balanced, right?" <--- this makes you sound like an arrogent jerk. no offence intended

[Sander]

The way you say many of you suggestions sound "angry or arrogent" you do this to alot of newbies... you did it to me, and i didnt much appreiciate it.

 

Do you actually think I care if people get upset when I criticize either them or their work? Of coarse not, and they shouldn't get upset because someone actually gave them criticism. The world isn't full of lollipops and candy canes, you know. And again, even if you're new, you're still expected to know the basic knowledge of the, let's say, job, that you're starting to work at.

 

tl;dr: If you can't take criticism, don't venture into RC.

 

just because youre a "legendary member" dosent give you the right to bully others in the forum.

 

Giving criticism is not bullying people. Some people just do it differently than others.

 

"Because Summoning a 3k beatstick whilst Skill Drain is activated is so freaking balanced, right?" <--- this makes you sound like an arrogent jerk. no offence intended

 

And I honestly do not give a rats ass about how you see me as a person. I give criticism to people, whether they're new or old, and if they don't like the criticism, that's their own problem.

[REvan342]

Zanda, there is a right, and a wrong way to post........ you do it the wrong way. use CONSTRUCTIVE critisism, not DESTRUCTIVE critisism.

When you act like this it only dis-credits you as a member. this is my final word on this matter.

[Strider Tigerwolf]

Destructive and Constructive criticism both go hand in hand. Destructive Criticism toughens up the weak, while Constructive Criticism directs an idea a little further than before. If we receive only 1 and not the other, we become incomplete and ignorant in our POVs and our card designs. Zanda is right on several aspects of his criticism, and as such he would need not change his opinion.

 

But aside of that: Cards are just horrid/useless card design :/ They are just relatively poorly thought out and are just downright not worth playing.

 

Sry dude: 2/10 :( You've received my lowers score thus far.

[Sergio Dark World General]

I do see that its ONLY Zanda that gives this kind of "criticism" which its not criticism , is imposing he's will. Help them , There are differente ways of doing it, criticism is one but you overuse it on people you shouldn't.When i first started here the one who helped me was Ragnarok and he did not say "THAT'S WRONG, DO THIS DO THAT!", he told me to change some of my cards easeli and slowly, that confidence you have is getting control of you. And if you play with a lil kid your not gonna say:"I win you loser"will you? maybe, but most of people let thyem win, of course im not syaing this guy should be treated as little kid, no , but encourage him to do better.

 

In no moment offence was intended however you'll see what you want to see.

[Strider Tigerwolf]

When i first started here the one who helped me was Ragnarok and he did not say "THAT'S WRONG, DO THIS DO THAT!", he told me to change some of my cards easeli and slowly, that confidence you have is getting control of you.

 

Its funny saying this as Ragnorak doesn't actually "play" the game XP

[Sander]

My style of criticism is more negative than destructive. Sure, my style has aspects of destructive criticism mixed into it, but that doesn't automatically make it destructive criticism.

[Master White]

Its funny saying this as Ragnorak doesn't actually "play" the game XP

 

Not once did he ever make a card either; and he had 50,000 posts and it took that long just to ban him.....Geezez, anyhow, these cards are what you have said, i really don't need to say whats already said by you and Zanda

 

Zanda is an okay criticism person, may be harsh at times, which can irrelevantly cause a non-trll to become a troll, but sometimes it can help older members to...I see Zanda Panda as an smart harsh troll, no offense, but I hardly see you post in a members post who is 5 to 6 stars or higher. Icy Blue actually posted in couple of my cards, and I've preferred that type of talke then any, I mean then any other people's talk before, because he actually didn't care about OCG, and 2nd, was truthful....But unfortunately, no one else can give that type of criticism anymore.....

 

@Zanda Panda: I think if you keep up, you'll eventually learn that type of criticism Icy use to do, and you'll learn that this type that we all seem to stick with is pointless.....I'm leaning on you for better constructiveness....

 

@OP:

 

 

1st Card: Not playable in todays meta, not even worth it... and the fact that Life Points today is IMO is worthless, it does not help you one bit; Unless your playing Psychic cards or Some type of Deck that is dedicated to Life points.

2nd Card:Op'd and again still not worth it, not even playable, it'd be wiped out in the first turn it Summoned by some spell/magic card. I'd rather bring out Winged of Ra, which is still a waste.

3rd Card: Good, balanced, playable, boring....Okay.....

 

Hope this helps, and we can't help but not Judge you as that is clearly the whole point of posting your cards, not showing them off, if you want to do that, go somewhere else, no offense....

[Sergio Dark World General]

Not once did he ever make a card either; and he had 50,000 posts and it took that long just to ban him.....Geezez

Its funny saying this as Ragnorak doesn't actually "play" the game XP

Kenji, you don't need to play football to know the rules, either do you? Ragnarok was really helpful to me and i really don't get why people hate him.

[Master White]

Paula Silvo; Over here, yes, or you'll get arse kicked by both your teammates and and your friends who are on the enemy side....Besides, rules may be set in stone for goody toshoes, but Rules are meant to be broken, no matter what....I haven't broke many rules here, only because I like this forum... Go over to Dragon Cave Forum, you couldn't even say arse without getting a 5 day ban.....Or better yet, go to the other places that are even more strict.

[Sander]

Kenji, you don't need to play football to know the rules, either do you? Ragnarok was really helpful to me and i really don't get why people hate him.

 

You can know the rules of football, sure, but if you're not actually good at football, ie actually playing it, people will not want to take advice from you. Such is the case here, only with card games. Ragnarok may have known the rules of YGO, but he lacked the knowledge of the game, as he had shown in multiple post whilst his stay on YCM, and he lacked the knowledge of the meta as well.

 

He also lacked the knowledge on how to balance cards and believed that "Synchros were made to be overpowered" or something in the lines of that.

 

tl;dr: Ragnarok's so called "advice" was lackluster and pretty much useless, as all he could suggest was to make certain effects once per turn, sometimes when not even needed, ie he didn't know how to balance cards.

[REvan342]

My style of criticism is more negative than destructive. Sure, my style has aspects of destructive criticism mixed into it, but that doesn't automatically make it destructive criticism.

 

Uh... YES IT DOES.... and your spamming.

 

To get back on topic.... The second card is really over powered (OP) raising the level to 7 or 8 (which would make it have to tribute 2 monsters to summon it) This would make it a basic ATK tank. The first card has mispellings, and grammatical errors (quite a lot actually) But the basic idea of the card is ok.

[Phantom Roxas]

Zanda, Ragnarok deserved to be banned, and just because Paulo had to bring him up and REvan decided to be nice doesn't mean you had to continue to derail the topic.

 

Attachments are not allowed, so I'm locking this.