My first Card

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What do you think of my first homemade card tips allowed and encouraged :D

 

 

 

 

 

[Trebuchet MS]

"Immolation of Water monsters"? Do I have to physically burn my WATER monsters to Summon this card?

 

Also, "Shark" is not a legal type here in Realistic Cards. Best would be to change it to "Fish". It's still scientifically accurate.

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OK and i will say my english is not the best but i will be better

is it so ok?

  I dont now but i think the effect is overpowered

[Trebuchet MS]

Okay, I'll take some liberties here in attempting to interpret your card lore.

 

"This card Cannot be Special Summoned. they can only be summoned by sacrifice of water monsters If you Tribute Summon this card, all Tributes must be WATER. When this card is played each other Summoned: All face-up WATER monsters, except this card, receives gain 700 ATK and 500 DEF."

 

Nice card image, rather mediocre effect. Useful for boosting monsters, but not much else. We're in an age where ATK/DEF is not everything to a powerful card.

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Thanks I will post it when the card is ready

but i lost the eyes of Jarbin that is what makes me a quite angry

i uploaded it and when i saw that there are no eyes RAAAAGE Moment but it was ok

Hope you can understand my "english" :D

[Trebuchet MS]

Careful with that copy-paste! Delete "played each other" in the last sentence.

 

Now, to tweak this card:

• LV9 looks too high for a monster with such stats. I'd bump that down to LV7. That way, when you're playing with A Legendary Ocean, it slides down to LV6, letting you Summon it with just one Tribute - a great bargain considering that you can't Special Summon this card.
• I would change its ATK/DEF boosting ability to a continuous effect. Remove the "When this card is Summoned:" phrase in the last sentence such that it becomes a continuous effect rather than a triggered ability.
• For a "Shark God", this doesn't quite have much synergy with any existing sharks in the game. Maybe if it Special Summoned Fish-Type monsters, or protected them from certain types of card effects? I'll let you decide what would be good.

And for a "Shark God", it gets rather easily beaten by a coelacanth. How embarrassing.

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I hope its ok now and by the way tthx. for the great help :-D

[Trebuchet MS]

Looking better. Let's polish off the text.

 

"Cannot be Special Summoned. If you Tribute Summon this card, the Tributes must be WATER. All face-up WATER monsters, except this card, gain 700 ATK and 500 DEF. This card cannot be destroyed by Trap Cards to choose it as a that target it."

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yes i now my english but another question How do I change the profile information such as gender and so on

[Flash Flyer - Sakura]

Your new card is a marked improvement over what you had initially posted.

Good support for WATER monsters by giving them a bit of a power raise and to compensate for this card being unable to gain anything; it gets immunity to destruction by targeting Traps (which is nice against cards like Sakuretsu, Bottomless [though you'd still get banished], etc.)

 

For a Level 7, decent stats (and usable with Legendary Ocean; 1 Tribute drop). While this card isn't exactly a "Shark" god by its name, it's a decent card for you starting out here; keep it up.

 

As a note, try to post all of your updates in first post instead of posting them in your replies to Gadjiltron's (or everyone else's) posts.