Far Far Away Dragon

[Rey07]

Let me know if this card is balanced. 

 

 

1 Dragon type tuner + 1 or more non tuner monster(s). When this card is in face up defense position it cannot be destroyed in battle nor targeted by spell cards. Once per turn if this card is face up on the field you can destroy one face up spell card your opponent controls, if your opponent controls no face up spell cards then you can draw one card from your deck. 

[Flash Flyer - Sakura]

1 Dragon-Type Tuner + 1 or more non-Tuner monster(s). 

While you control this Defense Position monster, it cannot be destroyed in battle or targeted by Spell Cards. Once per turn, you can destroy 1 face-up Field Spell Card your opponent controls. If your opponent does not control a face-up Field Spell Card: You can draw 1 card.

 

(Fix your OCG)

 

OK, we have a 3000 DEF monster that can't die by battle or get targeted by a Spell card (assuming you left it in Defense Position). Second effect is a limited version of AFD  or you get a draw if they don't have a face-up Field Spell.

 

Focusing on the 2nd effect, either you take out an opponent's Field Spell (against Decks using one) or you draw (everything else). Most of the time, this will just end up as a "Draw 1 card". My suggestion would be to change the Field Spell destruction to possibly a face-up S/T instead, for versatility, and remove the draw effect. Either that or you put a drawback on it.

[BatMed]

OCG Correction:

1 Dragon-type tuner + 1 or more non tuner monsters

This face-up Defense position card cannot be destroyed by battle or be targeted by Spell cards effects. Once per turn, you can destroy 1 face-up Spell card your opponent controls, if your opponent controls no face-up Spell cards; Draw 1 card instead.

[I'm not the best in correcting effects, but that's my best shot.]

I Think it's balanced, cause i can be banished, also it's not immune against Traps and monsters effects, but I suggest to lower its DEF, to 2800 maybe ?

[ (+)  I think that a Nice card = Nice Artwork, I mean can't you find a better one ?!]

Overall: 6/10 ... You mus improve your OCG ... but anyway nice try  :) 

[Rey07]

I made some changes based on your suggestions tell me what you think. 

 

1 Dragon-Type Tuner + 1 or more non-Tuner monster(s). 

While you control this Defense Position monster, it cannot be targeted by Spell Cards. Once per turn, you can destroy 1 face-up Continuous Spell or Trap card your opponent controls. If your opponent does not control a Continuous Spell or Trap card: You can draw 1 card.

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That's much improved OCG. I really like the changes in what the effect does, as well.

 

Small thing: I think Konami would write "1 or more non-Tuner monsters". Note that there is no s-in-brackets.

Also, there should be a colon (a :) after "Once per turn", not a comma.

 

Slightly bigger thing: It should read "[Dragon/Synchro/Effect]" above the effect text. (I don't know what you call that part of the card). Maybe you put a space after "Dragon", too. If so, there shouldn't be.

 

The art appears to have a faint website address written over it and a signature in the bottom-right corner. I don't know if I am overstepping my position as a critic by commenting on this, but it is very slightly irritating.

 

As for balance, You might make it Level 8, or not. You might lower the DEF slightly, or not. If you wanted to weaken it very slightly, you might want to remove the words "You can" before the words "draw 1 card", in order to make this card bad if someone it milling you. I am not very good at telling if something is balanced or not, though.

 

Overall, I like the card, especially in the new version.