Constellar + Evilswarm = Conswarm cards!

[jbenedict]

Hi Guys! I combined the Constellar and Evilswarm into Conswarm... I maked 3 cards of Conswarm, the "Conswarm Amyges" (from Constellar Sombres), "Conswarm Keion" (from Evilswarm Kerykeion) and "Conswarm Golden Dragon (new)... I dont know what to do, so i maked Conswarm... :D if the effect is kinda wrong, pls send me a message :)[attachment=41928:createcard (1).jpg][attachment=41929:createcard ( :cool:.jpg][attachment=41930:createcard.jpg]

[Flash Flyer - Sakura]

You could've placed this in the Realistic Section - Multiples (considering these cards aren't of Pop Culture stuff). Ask a mod to move it for you.

As such, I'll give RC-level CnC here.

 

In terms of Amyges, it says to SS a Keion (but note that both of them have a Nomi clause, so unless you add an effect to circumvent this, effect cannot be done). Second effect would wreck havoc on Crystal Beasts and other Decks that focus on Continuous Spells (stall), but does nothing against Artifacts (based on the wording that it only kills Spells), but the effect gives ATK to LIGHT monsters equal to S/T cards destroyed by its effect (which is nice). I will also assume this effect triggers upon summoning, in which case you need to word it as such. I'd also suggest you make it destroy Spell/Trap Cards or something, since outside of the aforementioned Decks, not many of them will have Cont./lingering Spells for this card to destroy. Additionally, you need to specify where the SS monster is coming from. The last effect is good for softening up monsters, especially combined with the Fusion.

 

Keion essentially provides protection from monster destruction, but I'd like to note that monster destruction via S/T cards is relatively common, combined with sweep cards like Torrential, Mirror Force and the like. That being said, there are still monster effects that destroy, so it helps this card's cause a bit. Second effect is pretty much going to trigger against any relevant monster that's played nowadays; I would raise this limit to 2000 ATK or more. The revival effect could help it see use in Chaos/Twilight builds and could set up for some other cards.

 

Golden Dragon's effect is contradicting itself: It is essentially a Black Rose Dragon that gains power, but since it's in the Graveyard at this point, how do you expect it to gain power? If you want to fix this, change the effect to "Destroy all other cards on the field". However at this point, depending on when you play this card, you could potentially have this card gain 1000+ ATK, not to mention its protection effect. The effect can be triggered rather easily at most stages of the game; factoring in Keion/Amyges being Synchro'd and any Fusion cards to bring this one out. Last effect also contradicts itself, as both Amyges/Keion have a Nomi summoning condition, thus this card cannot revive/SS either of them unless you remove the clause or fix that in the effect. The LP effect is fine, I suppose.

 

On another note, you need to work on your OCG (card grammar). This helps other members understand what your card does, how/when its effects are supposed to trigger and so forth. I had some difficulty understanding what you wanted to convey in your card's effects.

 

 

I'll send this review to you in a PM as well. We have a RC Tutoring committee that's here to help you improve your cards; you appear to be a good candidate for some help (if that's what you'd like).

[Aix]

Topic moved.

 

Also, jbenedict, you need to copy and paste your card text into your post as well for ease of viewing and not just show use your card images.

[GalaxyEyes5]

Overall, I like these cards. There interesting, but I truly would trade them if I had them, Mainly because their power is a bit underrated. I have level 5 monsters with 1200 ATK, but I don't tribute for it, due to it's weakness. The level 6 synchro monsters you made would be more worthy of summoning if there ATK and DEF was slightly higher, more like 2450 ATK 2300 DEF. Also, your making it too easy to perform the fusion summon. I have never perfomed one successful fusion summon in my few years of dueling history, mainly because they make it hard to summon. With your cards, You have made it possible to go from 2 monsters on the field to one mega fusion summon in one turn. In my opinion, that shouldn't be possible. I would not have added the part on the 1st card to summon the other. But, enough for a like.

[jbenedict]

Aw... I didnt check the effect of Conswarm Golden Dragon.... lol sorry.....