Rema98 Posted August 7, 2014 Report Share Posted August 7, 2014 Hi this is my first card here and im so glad that im gonna show it to you guys! This is Ancient Warrior Destroyer Atk:2700 Def:1400 He is Warrior/Effect Description: When this card is sent in graveyard by opponent's monster you can Special Summon 1 Warrior type monster (except Ancient Warrior Destroyer) from your deck with level 8 or less in face up position. I hope this card is Ok now. [attachment=42252:createcard.jpeg] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trebuchet MS Posted August 7, 2014 Report Share Posted August 7, 2014 As much as we would love it, there is no room for flavour text in the effect box. Let me fix that for you. Destroyer is ancient warrior and he is immortal because he is right hand of God Ares. When this card is sent goes to the Graveyard: You can pull out from deck another Special Summon 1 Warrior-Type monster from your Deck card and set it in face-up Attack Position, except "Ancient Warrior Destroyer". Please read this thread on how to phrase your effects in a way consistent with current cards, and this thread for an idea of what card balance is. Because your card is unintentionally powerful. As I read it, Destroyer's effect can trigger regardless of how he was sent to the Graveyard - this means you can discard it or send it from the Deck to the Graveyard and it will still trigger, turning things like Foolish Burial into very easy ways to set off the effect. And the effect itself fetches any Warrior from the Deck, regardless of ATK, Level, or archetype. How about Elemental HERO Neos to instantly set up a Neos Fusion? How about Satellarknight Altair or Deneb to get their combos going? Maybe Great Shogun Shien to lock down the opponent's S/T usage? And remember, these silly interactions can already be done without even using a Normal Summon, or even needing to properly Summon Destroyer. I would recommend you change the activation condition (i.e. be more specific on how he was sent to the Graveyard), and/or add restrictions on what kind of Warriors Destroyer can Summon/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Astolfo Posted August 8, 2014 Report Share Posted August 8, 2014 why the actual fuck is this in rc Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goddamnit names are a pain Posted August 8, 2014 Report Share Posted August 8, 2014 why the actual f*** is this in rc Because of two things 1. We don't have a test to make sure people know what YGO is before posting cards 2. Mods don't care Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flash Flyer - Sakura Posted August 8, 2014 Report Share Posted August 8, 2014 The only thing wrong with the card is the effect, which is just horribly worded. Thankfully Gadjiltron already fixed it so it's understandable. That being said, this really doesn't belong in RC so shafting this to Any Other Cards. Would help if newbies actually read the big red announcement at the top of the forum, but unfortunately they don't. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rema98 Posted August 9, 2014 Author Report Share Posted August 9, 2014 Ok guys, i'm gonna fix this card ! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Astolfo Posted August 9, 2014 Report Share Posted August 9, 2014 watRema, Gadjitron gave you the actual OCG (Official Card Grammar) fix.So as in, you should just use that, not reword it in your own words.Are you actually serious? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trebuchet MS Posted August 9, 2014 Report Share Posted August 9, 2014 wat Rema, Gadjitron gave you the actual OCG (Official Card Grammar) fix. So as in, you should just use that, not reword it in your own words. Are you actually serious? An OCG fix is just an OCG fix. I tend to leave the effect unedited, before going on to critique the effect. Just using my OCG fix will only correct the wording of the effects, but do nothing about how powerful it is. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Astolfo Posted August 9, 2014 Report Share Posted August 9, 2014 I get what you mean, but he just took what you said and reworded it in an incorrect way again.I said nothing about the effect itself, just the wording. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rema98 Posted August 10, 2014 Author Report Share Posted August 10, 2014 And why should i not reword it with my words ?! Is it a crime when you make it on your own ?!?! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Astolfo Posted August 10, 2014 Report Share Posted August 10, 2014 Because, there's specific card grammar that is used for Yugioh.It does change every now and then, but all cards within/after that change follow those set of card grammar rules.lolit's not a crimejust wholly incorrect Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Slinky Posted August 10, 2014 Report Share Posted August 10, 2014 The only thing wrong with the card is the effect, which is just horribly worded. Thankfully Gadjiltron already fixed it so it's understandable. That being said, this really doesn't belong in RC so shafting this to Any Other Cards. Would help if newbies actually read the big red announcement at the top of the forum, but unfortunately they don't. So, if the point of the big red announcement is for people to read it, and they dont read it. Why is it there? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rema98 Posted August 10, 2014 Author Report Share Posted August 10, 2014 And why is it incorrect ?! Just give me one reason ! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Astolfo Posted August 11, 2014 Report Share Posted August 11, 2014 Is this kid actually fucking serious I cannot even brain right now this level of stupidity Maybe because the goddamn company has a specific way of writing out the card effects, known as the OCG (Official Card Grammar)? And you decide to just throw that out the window and reword it in your own words which is nothing even slightly close to the actual OCG? Are you actually fucking serious? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trebuchet MS Posted August 11, 2014 Report Share Posted August 11, 2014 No point trying to continue to argue. I'm out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flash Flyer - Sakura Posted August 11, 2014 Report Share Posted August 11, 2014 You need to write your card effects using Konami's wording because that is the proper way to write cards. In doing so, it helps members to understand: When effect is supposed to trigger, what are you to do when said effect triggers and so forth. Gadjiltron already fixed the original effect for you; that's how you're supposed to write it. As noted already, it's only a fix for writing old effect properly; it's up to you to figure out how to balance it out. @Dyson: The point of the big red announcement is to give them a visible reminder to either follow the rules or risk getting your threads locked and possible warnings for repeated offenses. You all wished for the quality of this entire section to go up; that's what it's there for. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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