Red-Eyes Black Knight Posted December 7, 2014 Report Share Posted December 7, 2014 “Reborn Durandler” Effect/Plant Level 11 2500 atk/1200 def you can normal summon this card without tributing but this cards original attack becomes 0 and destroy it during your MP1. When this card is normal summoned you can special summon 1 “Reborn” monster from you hand, deck, or graveyard. If this card gets sent to the graveyard attach this card to an “Unborn” XYZ monster you control as XYZ material “Reborn Skraft” Effect/Plant level 11 1200 atk/1000 ef When this card is special summoned by the effect of a “Reborn” monster you destroy 1 spell/trap card your opponent controls. Your opponent cannot activate cards or effects in response to this cards summon or effect activation. If this card gets sent to the graveyard attach this card to an “Unborn” XYZ monster you control as XYZ material “Unborn Gift” Spell/normal Send 1 “Unborn” monster you control to the graveyard. Draw 2 cards. If this card gets sent to the graveyard attach this card to an “Unborn” XYZ monster you control as XYZ material “Forest of the Unborn” Spell/Field Up to thrice per turn, when you opponent activates a card or effect, or when your opponent summons a monster you can negate the effect/activation or summon. If this card gets sent to the graveyard attach this card to an “Unborn” XYZ monster you control as XYZ material “Unborn Agumateg” Effect/Plant Level 11 3000 atk/1200 def You can normal summon this card without tributes but when you do this cards ark becomes 0 and it is destroyed during your MP1. You can discard 1 “Unborn”, or “Reborn” card to special summon 1 “Unborn” monster from your deck, but its effects are negated and it is destroyed during your MP1. If this card gets sent to the graveyard attach this card to an “Unborn” XYZ monster you control as XYZ material “Unborn Kajimug” Normal/Plant Level 11 1200 atk/2300 def This wicked plant came about after the gods of Egypt went on a terrible rampage on the world! “Unborn Torment” Spell/quick-play When an “Unborn” or “Reborn monster you control is targeted by an opponents card effect negate the effect and destroy that card, and your opponent skips their next 3 draw phases If this card gets sent to the graveyard attach this card to an “Unborn” XYZ monster you control as XYZ material “Wanderer of the Unborn Forest” Effect/Warrior Level 11 3750 atk/ 1400 def You can tribute 2 “Reborn” cards you control to destroy all cards you opponent controls. If this card gets sent to the graveyard attach this card to an “Unborn” XYZ monster you control as XYZ material If this card gets sent to the graveyard attach this card to an “Unborn” XYZ monster you control as XYZ material “Reborn Sprout” Normal/Plant/tuner Level 1 0 atk/ 2000 def A sprout that fell off the Unborn Lavishraska. It is said that it contains the power to make anyone that obtains it to become the most powerful being on the world! “The Great Tree Devour” Effect/Plant/Synchro 4000 atk/ 2400 def 1 “Unborn” tuner + one or more “Reborn” monsters Once per turn you can make all monster you unaffected by monster effects until the end of your opponents next turn. Cards and effects cannot be activated to this cards activation. If this card gets sent to the graveyard attach this card to an “Unborn” XYZ monster you control as XYZ material “Unborn Maker” Effect/Plant/XYZ 0 atk/0 def 5 level 11 “Unborn” monsters When this card is XYZ summoned you opponent cannot activate cards or effects. While this card has no XYZ materials you XYZ summon 1 “Unborn” XYZ monster. Once per turn you can detach 5 XYZ materials from this card banish all cards on both sides of the field and in both players hand. If this is banished because of a card effect special summon 1 “Unborn” monster from your graveyard, it cannot attack this turn and is destroyed during your opponents next end phase If this card gets sent to the graveyard attach this card to an “Unborn” XYZ monster you control as XYZ material Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maeriberii Haan Posted December 7, 2014 Report Share Posted December 7, 2014 Moved to Multiple cards from singles. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flash Flyer - Sakura Posted December 7, 2014 Report Share Posted December 7, 2014 Where do I even begin with this? 1. I graded the first card already in Singles and told you to fix the effect dramatically. Especially now that you've provided more monsters to this to summon, you've essentially given yourself a way to spam very powerful high Level monsters. Just no. Add a restriction on their usage for Extra Deck spam AND reduce the ATK of the SSed monster to 0. 2. Reborn Skrapt basically is Night Beam + attaches itself as an Xyz Material to Maker when it goes to the Graveyard. OK... 3. Kajimug violates part of the BEWD clause in this section [no making Normals above Level 8] no words on this, really; aside from it being spammable for Rank 11 stuff. 4. Unborn Torment essentially negates the effect of whatever targets a Reborn, destroys it AND makes your opponent skip their next 3 Draw Phases + attaches as an Xyz Material to Maker. Tell me, did you even bother to read the guide .Saber wrote in RC-Singles; because this card is broken as hell. You know the card Time Seal? Yeah, it's banned because it cuts off your opponent's Draw Phase. This one does more than that; though thankfully it's not a Counter Trap like most negation things are. Get rid of the Draw Phase sealing and give a significant cost for using this. 5. Wanderer needs to have its ATK toned down severely, because a 3750 ATK that can be SSed by Durandler is not funny. Lower it to 3000 or something. 6. No comment on Sprout, because Vanilla (really only use is for that Synchro of yours). 7. Devour is missing its Level; I'm assuming its Level 12 [given the rest of the Archetype so far is Level 11]. Basically, this card gives you immunity to monster effects for a while; slapped with a Night Beam clause (can't chain effects to it); then becomes Xyz food for Maker when it dies. 8. Forest of the Unborn: So basically, you made a TPT (thrice per turn) combination of both Solemn Judgment and Warning, which lacks any form of cost. Considering the former is already banned for even being a one-use thing for half your LP; you already made this extremely broken beyond repair. Just scrap the card, or if you insist on keeping it; make it an OPT effect, choose one or the other [not both] AND give a significant cost. 9. Agumateg is essentially the SS enabler to make said boss + various other things. Yes, it costs you hand advantage by discarding a Reborn/Unborn, but because it's not OPT; it can lead to possible spam [especially with the aforementioned Wanderer and its 3.7k body]. That being said, the Boss needs all that investment to bring out, so really at a loss of what to say here. 10. Now, let's discuss the Xyz "boss". It requires 5 Level 11s, which is impossible on a normal basis, but here it seems plausible given Durandler and Aguamateg (or however you spell the thing) are SSers. Now what does this boss do. Banishes everything in both player's hand and field, in exchange for all its materials. Recall that Chaos Emperor got banned at one point for just sending stuff to the Graveyard + burning (it's Limited in TCG, but OCG still hasn't let it go). Unlike CED, this card can Special Summon another monster (possibly another Agumateg to SS more monsters + things). The excuse that Breakthrough Skill exists will not work here; even if the card requires 5 Level 11 monsters to bring out. Luckily, you can't Astral Force into this. --- In essence, you really need to fix the cards in here, so they don't come off as broken. I know you're a newbie and all, but really take the time to read the guides in Realistic Cards. In particular, read .Saber's guide and also Zaziuma's OCG one (you really need to work on this). Also, I fixed your first card's OCG; please use it instead of reverting to your version. As a warning, there are some members here who will grade your cards a lot harsher than I did with you just now. Take the comments I've given you, and fix the cards accordingly; especially the Spell Cards, with consideration that they're as bad or worse than things on the current banlist. (You have 24 hours to make some form of improvements) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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