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first card of my next archtype "Frightmatronics"


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This is the first card of the new archtype im working on, i dont have much to explain about them yet but this is the first one since he is my favorite character of the series i based them off, The effect will likely change when i get a more solid idea of what i want the deck to do but until then this is what i got, critisism is welcomed

Name: Frightmatronic Tail Chaiser/Level 6/Type Machine/Atribute Dark/Atk 2400/Def 1000
Effect: You can only control 1 "Frightmatronic Tail Chaiser" at a time.  you can special summon this card from your Hand or GY by shuffling a "Frightmatronic" Monster you control into the deck.
When this card destroys or is destroyed by battle you can add 1 "Frightmatronic" Card from your deck to your hand.

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Welp, let's hope the new archetype is not 500 cards long like some of the previous xD

It can use some grammar polish:

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You can Special Summon this card (from your hand or GY) by shuffling 1 "Frightmatronic" monster you control into the Deck. When this card, or a monster battling this card is destroyed by battle: You can add 1 "Frightmatronic" card from your Deck to your hand. You can only control 1 "Frightmatronic Tail Chaser".

Pretty similar, but there's no need for the "at a time", also that kind of clause is usually added at the end of the card. Use lowercase for hand and card, but capital D for Deck. Made the second effect a triggered activation.

A simple and effective card, 1 for 1 monster, but probably this is stronger than the one shuffled. Nothing too strong, so I'd say it is well balanced.

P.D. What's this series about, btw?

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Good Job like Rayfield said it It can use some grammar polish: Also one more thing When ever you make Tuner Monster it has to say this Dragon/Tuner/Effect You put it the other way around Dragon/Effect/Tuner this is not the right way to do it I'm sorry I'm not Trying to insult you or anything I will give you an Example of Tuner an Monster konami Made vs the one you made: You always put Tuner after the Effect when you should be putting the Tuner part before the Effect part. 

Konami's card                                                                                          Your card

The Right Way:                                                                                        The Wrong Way:

image.png.5051392512a43a0b1aeceec99e294f4e.png   Spirit Avatar Lost Luinor.jpg

 

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51 minutes ago, Zamazenta said:

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This dragon. I like this Dragon. Although the proper typing order is Dragon/Tuner/Effect.

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