Purple Dinosaur Posted July 30, 2008 Report Share Posted July 30, 2008 Rewrite in Progress... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kale Posted July 31, 2008 Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 this has an interesting story line for sure. his friends have all died, and there is a group of duelists. ^_^ not much has happened yet, as is expected in the first episode, but i will continue to read, hopefully, if i dont forget to read it of course. one thing i did notice was that you sometimes repeated yourself in the same sentence, but that is okay. you didnt do it often. and you go pretty quickly from one idea to the next. slow down, and transfer from one idea to the next with some time in between. i am not a fan of the story layout, but it is okay. it is my personal opinion to have it written like a novel, and not a script. But i see several stories like that, and it is fine. ^_^ thank you for inviting me to read it! that was very kind. ^_^ ooc: how did you do that with parshath in your sig? that is brilliant! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Dinosaur Posted July 31, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 this has an interesting story line for sure. his friends have all died' date=' and there is a group of duelists. ^_^ not much has happened yet, as is expected in the first episode, but i will continue to read, hopefully, if i dont forget to read it of course. one thing i did notice was that you sometimes repeated yourself in the same sentence, but that is okay. you didnt do it often. and you go pretty quickly from one idea to the next. slow down, and transfer from one idea to the next with some time in between. i am not a fan of the story layout, but it is okay. it is my personal opinion to have it written like a novel, and not a script. But i see several stories like that, and it is fine. ^_^ thank you for inviting me to read it! that was very kind. ^_^ ooc: how did you do that with parshath in your sig? that is brilliant![/quote'] Thanks for taking the time to read and review! You truly are reliable! As for Parshath, I found the image on Photobucket. I'll put the credit right after. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
swiftbirdman Posted July 31, 2008 Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 wow this is awesome! I don't like andrix's character but all round its the best one I've read so far Im seriously looking forward to the next Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Dinosaur Posted July 31, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 Thank you very much! I feel good about this one! I feel as though I can develop the characters very well gradually! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kale Posted July 31, 2008 Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 oh, I wanted to learn something new. :cry: Anywho, that is a good way to make a fic, the develop a character gradually. It leads the reader into the character, instead of presenting him. @swiftbirdman: obviously you havnt read Edge of Justice. XD I hope this fic gets more responses than 4, 2 of which are yours, so here is a tiny bump from me. ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr. Judgment Dragon Posted July 31, 2008 Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 Pretty good so far. Not much has happened yet, but that should probably be expected with the first episode. Its pretty interesting how Andrix had to dig deep and use Judgment Dragon without its full power. Cant wait for the next episode. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aelsthla-Mental Posted July 31, 2008 Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 Well, looks pretty good. Are you going to use custom cards though? Anyway, not much has been revealed yet, we just had the snack, can't wait for the main course (I think i'm using the wrong course... what's the food one again?)! Not to mention the protagonist has lost so much already... I wonder what will happen as the story progresses. So yeah, good luck. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Dinosaur Posted July 31, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 Even more sad things will happen... But I won't spoil them for you guys. @Goldshine Dragon: I summon Judgment Dragon... Oops, I don't have 1000 Life Points!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Star Posted July 31, 2008 Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 Seems nice. I skipped through some of the duel, but the plot itself seems well-developed, and I'll definitely be reading more of it. Nice job, it's much better than Reversal of Fear. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Dinosaur Posted July 31, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 Thnaks, I think... Just Kidding, I do know it's better than Reversal of Fear! +rep is coming. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yogg-Saron Posted July 31, 2008 Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 I love it! The story is good, from what I have seen, and the duel was very nice. Good job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sander Posted July 31, 2008 Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 Nice episode PD ^_^ Can't wait for the next episode ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Dinosaur Posted July 31, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 Merci Buckets to all, your Reps are coming. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spire Posted July 31, 2008 Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 Great start. The duel was pretty enjoyable. There is certainly potential here. Keep it up! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Seth Graystone Posted July 31, 2008 Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 It's actually a cool fic, and it's better than most of the stuff I've read on these websites. I can't wait to see this Cabriole guy's deck. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Dinosaur Posted July 31, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 @Seth Graystone: ... Cabriole is a Girl. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:|Fallen|:. Posted July 31, 2008 Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 i love it i cant wait for the next bit this is better than mine Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Seth Graystone Posted July 31, 2008 Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 My bad. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Dinosaur Posted July 31, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 [[[EPISODE 2 ADDED]]][/breaking news] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Seth Posted August 1, 2008 Report Share Posted August 1, 2008 Interesting, I'll have to keep reading this.The storyline is very original and unique.The duels are pretty good. I just think it could use a little more descriptive writing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inverted{Craze} Posted August 1, 2008 Report Share Posted August 1, 2008 Very Good.I Like The Duel Between Katee And Andrex.It Was Well Thought Out And Wanted You To Keep On Reading. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Dinosaur Posted August 1, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 1, 2008 Thx for the comment(s) everay-baw-day! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Dinosaur Posted August 3, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 3, 2008 BUMP Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chaos Impact™ Posted August 8, 2008 Report Share Posted August 8, 2008 sad to hear you stopped reaversal of faer seems like all of the great fan fics are stopping Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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