End Of The Abyss Posted September 7, 2008 Report Share Posted September 7, 2008 Today, Rising Moon finished they're debut song, but only the instrumental part. You may download that instrumental song here: http://files.filefront.com/Abandonedwav/;11718249;/fileinfo.html We've decided to change the lyrics. But we're gonna have a contest. If you can write lyrics to the song above, [GOOD LYRICS] you get 1000 points and 2 reps. Good luck to those who'd like to enter. The album will consist of 7 more songs, and should be available next month. ~Dustin Shukizo, Singer and Guitarist Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Poc Posted September 7, 2008 Report Share Posted September 7, 2008 Parts dont flow very well, you might really want to fix that. Also the guitar track completly overpowers the other tracks, you'll need to adjust the volumes of each track. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodrun Posted September 7, 2008 Report Share Posted September 7, 2008 Hmm, the song, is.. good, but ill deff. see what kind of lyrics i can come up with ^_^ Suggestion, you might want to turn the instrument volume on the right down.. its distracting and it will become a bother once a voice is added. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
End Of The Abyss Posted September 7, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 7, 2008 Sure, Bloody........And wash off that blood when you get teh chance.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CeDeFiA Posted September 7, 2008 Report Share Posted September 7, 2008 Meh... The song isn't that good at all... Well, the instrumental part you've done. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Willieh Posted September 7, 2008 Report Share Posted September 7, 2008 In short; this will be the last post that I post today. :P I'm actually being more active than I had planned. (2 posts in 4 days. :O). It's a pretty nice song, needless to say. But it sounds like it was edited with audacity or something... it doesnt "flow" very well. I think you should get rid of that blank spot in the song where it's just the drums and a crash symbol and fill it in with something. And the lyrics should be a mixture of upbeat happiness and sadness at the same time to actually go well with the music. But like I said, a nice song, none the less. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
End Of The Abyss Posted September 7, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 7, 2008 Auduacity. How'd u guess? I didn't edit it with Auducity but that's where I put it together.. Thanks for the advice, Willie. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CeDeFiA Posted September 7, 2008 Report Share Posted September 7, 2008 Auduacity. How'd u guess? I didn't edit it with Auducity but that's where I put it together.. Thanks for the advice' date=' Willie.[/quote'] Willieh is a musical genius. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodrun Posted September 7, 2008 Report Share Posted September 7, 2008 Sure' date=' Bloody........And wash off that blood when you get teh chance..[/quote'] o.0 are you spying on me? Anywho, I have the lyrics, do you want to PM you, or post them here? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
End Of The Abyss Posted September 7, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 7, 2008 Bloodrun has sent me teh lyrics, and his chances are high. Contests ends 2moro at n00b...I mean n00n. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Willieh Posted September 7, 2008 Report Share Posted September 7, 2008 Pretty weird rhythm to it. But I'm sure you can figure it out. ___________ Abandoned (Rising Moon) Slowly falling into sleepA never ending winter stands before meHopelessly intoxicated byThe pain of my forsakened life Fade awaySlowly, into the darknessShade the dayNow I feel alone Abandoned, now What's to say?Easily describedHopeless to revive, anysense of comfort I may have felt before Helplessly deprivedSickened on the insideWeathered beyond repair by any mean Fade awaySlowly, into the darknessShade the dayNow I feel alone Abandoned, now ___________ I was thinking of that going with maybe a heavier song or something. But you know. The song is pretty short, so I made the lyrics pretty short. If you think that these are good, but they should be longer, by all means tell me and I will make them longer. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodrun Posted September 7, 2008 Report Share Posted September 7, 2008 Added the general time of where each part should be.. (starts at 12.4 seconds of the song)When I stand still..I can hear your voice..Telling me..Showing me..(ends at 20 seconds) (starts at 20.1 seconds)Being me, I cannot stand to see you so far away..This is who I am..(ends at 22.2 seconds) (starts at 23.2 seconds)I am abondoned!No where left to go..I am here..You have gone, and now I am left to be, the one breathe I cannot stand to take.(ends at 29.3 seconds) (starts at 29.3 seconds)This is has come, to be the day, I have grown to fear..Be within me, while I stand to share..My feelings upon which I fear..(ends at 34.4 seconds) (starts at 36.1 seconds)I am abondoned...Only no where left to go..Follow me, beside me, preside in me, let me be, that one last hope to share..(ends at 44.1 seconds) (starts at 49.3 seconds)I am abondoned...Only no where left to go..Follow me, beside me, preside in me, let me be, that one last hope to share..(ends at 56.4 seconds) (starts at 57.3 seconds)This is the day, This is the time,Now let it be, Come to me,Be with me, And we can rule the world,But as it stands..I am..who I am... Abandoned....(ends the song) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Willieh Posted September 7, 2008 Report Share Posted September 7, 2008 Just out of curiosity, is this song supposed to be about a drug addiction of some sort (more so what my lyrics implied), or love (more so like Bloodrun's implied), or political etc... A little elaboration on that would help a ton. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodrun Posted September 7, 2008 Report Share Posted September 7, 2008 Just out of curiosity' date=' is this song supposed to be about a drug addiction of some sort (more so what my lyrics implied), or love (more so like Bloodrun's implied), or political etc... A little elaboration on that would help a ton. :)[/quote'] yeahh like totally, cuz id pretty upset if it was about your flower that died... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
End Of The Abyss Posted September 7, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 7, 2008 More like Bloodrun's. Love-loss. :( Sad day I had. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Willieh Posted September 7, 2008 Report Share Posted September 7, 2008 Oh well, I don't write love songs. Sorry. :( Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
End Of The Abyss Posted September 7, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 7, 2008 Bloodrun already won the contest.... lolz Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr. Best Male 2008 Posted September 8, 2008 Report Share Posted September 8, 2008 I love this song. It's much better than Amy Lee or Children of Bodom, and MUCH better than KoRn. I hate those bands actually. I wish the lead singer of all those bands would just die. Nice song. :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted September 8, 2008 Report Share Posted September 8, 2008 I love this song. It's much better than Amy Lee or Children of Bodom' date=' and MUCH better than KoRn. I hate those bands actually. I wish the lead singer of all those bands would just die. Nice song. :D[/quote'] Krow's having teenage angst. The son'gs good, but it's not my style. You can't change that, though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benraino Posted September 9, 2008 Report Share Posted September 9, 2008 I wish I could DL the song. I would but my computer died. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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