Guest JoshIcy Posted September 23, 2008 Report Share Posted September 23, 2008 [align=center]Here I stand, Amidst the land, Gazing upon whispered lands, With my optic mind, Embracing a sight, Seeing it all, I witness creation, I breathe destruction, I comprehend, Having seen it all, Feeling their empathy, I harbor emotion, I watch feelings, I care for it all, Having felt it all, Yet now I run, Beneath myself, Afraid and terrified, Desperate for a balance, I see nothing... [/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
「tea.leaf」 Posted September 23, 2008 Report Share Posted September 23, 2008 Needs to be song lyrics. Some hardcore electronic would suit this well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted September 23, 2008 Report Share Posted September 23, 2008 haha I will take that as a compliment ^_^ btw, this poem is written in the first person and about me xD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sbamber Posted September 23, 2008 Report Share Posted September 23, 2008 Very good If only I would write like this Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frlf Posted September 23, 2008 Report Share Posted September 23, 2008 Sounds like a song :D. Thats awsome Icy :P. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr. Best Male 2008 Posted September 23, 2008 Report Share Posted September 23, 2008 It's pretty kewl. But I don't like it. Not my style D: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted September 23, 2008 Report Share Posted September 23, 2008 lol my style is sorta hard for some, (apparently). Thanks Sbamber and Frlf ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Posted September 23, 2008 Report Share Posted September 23, 2008 Well, I like it. It has depth and feeling to it, which is a definite plus ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted September 24, 2008 Report Share Posted September 24, 2008 lolminor bumps? And thanks Browarod. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted September 24, 2008 Report Share Posted September 24, 2008 You know my compliments as well as I do. Very....Very...Very Poetically Awesome! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted September 24, 2008 Report Share Posted September 24, 2008 You know my compliments as well as I do. Very....Very...Very Poetically Awesome! Haha thanks very much Meti. Any changes etc? lol.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted September 24, 2008 Report Share Posted September 24, 2008 Nothing yet. I will review this poem and see if there any thing I can fix for you to make it flow better. Though, you probably have it set to your own rhythm while I have my own. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
End Of The Abyss Posted September 24, 2008 Report Share Posted September 24, 2008 Wow. Icy, that's awezome. Bloodrun is beetah, Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted September 24, 2008 Report Share Posted September 24, 2008 Wow. Icy' date=' that's awezome. Bloodrun is beetah,[/quote'] I hardly read his poems. And it is likely that we are on the same level... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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