My girl was gone over the weekend, so I wrote this to express my longing for her. :B

[「tea.leaf」]

[align=center]The TV's been saying it's one-fifty or so.

And the thermometer blew a few days ago,

Kind of like how my old man went under;

Pools of red and alcohol all over.

Baby, come home soon, from your sea so blue,

Or my heart might just give in, too.

F***, it's so cold here without you.[/align]

[Riku]

I wish I was that good!

[Static]

I don't feel the third line or the fourth line, that mostly due to the third line being right before it.

 

Otherwise it's fine. :)

[Pikachu]

Good poem indeed.

 

I just don't get the third and fourth lines though.

[Guest KAJN]

I was wondering where you were :?

[Womi]

=,3

Nice.

[Archbaron Larry]

Good poem indeed.

 

I just don't get the third and fourth lines though.

 

This is just a wild guess, but I think she means about "my old man going under" means the writers father died??? And "pools of red and alcolhol" might refer to how he died by drinking too much and getting murdered?!?

 

I don't get those lines either, but awesome poem!

[Shonen Jump™]

lolIlikelol

lolnicepoemlol

[WTF]

Wow that was funking deep =3

[Dismal Euphony]

Not feeling the F-Bomb in the last line... I was really liking it up until then. It just seems really unnecessary and out of place in a poem like this.

[Insert_Name_Here]

Well i may not be a big poet guy, but that was realy good. High Fives

[「tea.leaf」]

Thermometers used be filled with red alcohol to mark temperature.

[Sparta™]

I love the poem, it's a fascinating one, but I never knew you were homosexual. =/

[Raelen]

Not feeling the F-Bomb in the last line... I was really liking it up until then. It just seems really unnecessary and out of place in a poem like this.

 

Amen!

 

Other than what BMars said, pretty good poem!

 

And yes, I know you miss me. ^_^

[herpderp]

I love the poem' date=' it's a fascinating one, but I never knew you were homosexual. =/

[/quote']

 

How are we absolutely certain Tea's a girl?

[Guest JoshIcy]

Good poem indeed.

 

I just don't get the third and fourth lines though.

 

I was thinking, drunk with Love. And the thermometer meaning the heat and passion.

 

As for this poem. Great Job Tea, you make me jealous ^^

[Dragoon_lord]

nice

[-Berserker-]

I have some problems understanding poetry except in my language, but I noticed your emotions in this poem.

[Sparta™]

I love the poem' date=' it's a fascinating one, but I never knew you were homosexual. =/

[/quote']

 

How are we absolutely certain Tea's a girl?

 

I'm not certain, but it does say in her profile that she is a female.

[Cyber Altair]

That's pretty awesome.

[Sailor Gourmet]

Deep poem, man.

Nice job.

Hope to hear more from you.

^^\m/

[bury the year]

The F-bomb in there actually works well for me. It's sentimental without being cliched, which is hard to find on here. Good job. :3

[「tea.leaf」]

The F-bomb in there actually works well for me. It's sentimental without being cliched' date=' which is hard to find on here. Good job. :3

[/quote']

 

That's exactly what I was getting at. :'D

[Super Half Vamp Riku]

damm thats sad and good sheds tears

[Kitty]

kool poem wish i could write that good..