Flash Flyer - Sakura Posted January 1, 2011 Report Share Posted January 1, 2011 Hey YCM, I decided to try the Excess concept out for myself and so, I give you my attempt at it. For those that don't know how Exceed Monsters work, it's in [url="http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/232776-cc-excess-community-brawl-%E2%99%A5lovely-chan%E2%99%A5-taking-over-judging-due-to-real-life-situations/"]here[/url] [img]http://img824.imageshack.us/img824/3456/103963s.jpg[/img] Lore: When this card is Excess Summoned, return cards in your Graveyard equal to the number of cards Overlaid on this card to the bottom of your Deck. Cards that are sent to the Graveyard are instead returned to their owner's hand. Once per turn, you can send 1 Overlaid monster on this card to the Graveyard to have this card gain 400 ATK until the End Phase of your next turn. [I don't have a Support Card for Exceed Monsters at the moment, so this is pretty much it for now] Anyway, rate/comment/CnC. [My OCG may be off a bit] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sploda Posted January 1, 2011 Report Share Posted January 1, 2011 OCG Corrections: When this card is Excess Summoned, return cards in your Graveyard equal to [b]the number of[/b] cards Overlaid [b]on this card[/b] to the bottom of your Deck. Cards that are sent to the Graveyard are instead returned to their owner's hand. Once per turn, you can send 1 Overlaid monster on this card to the Graveyard to have this card gain 400 ATK until the End Phase of your next turn. Of course seeing as how there are only a few precedents I can't be 100% sure, but this seems to be the most correct way to state it. All in all it's a nice card. The Effect doesn't seem to fit the level but then again I've seen worse. Not bad. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flash Flyer - Sakura Posted January 1, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 1, 2011 Thanks for the comment. I'll fix the OCG and try to figure out something that'll work for a Level 6 monster when I make another one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
wero-vasto Posted January 1, 2011 Report Share Posted January 1, 2011 Simple... but you effects states that cards won't touch the Graveyard and would go directly to the hand so the last effect of your card won't be activated... seems good and it's simple :3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mobumak Posted January 1, 2011 Report Share Posted January 1, 2011 Nice effect but put a better picture ! 6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yang Xiao-Long Posted January 1, 2011 Report Share Posted January 1, 2011 [quote name='mobumak' timestamp='1293921364' post='4904241'] Nice effect but put a better picture ! 6/10 [/quote] 6/10 just because of the picture? Put a better reason than "put a better picture" Now then. I'm not that all familiar with Excess, so forgive me. OCG has already been corrected. I like the stat gain, since a Level 6 with 2500 or possibly more can put it toe-to-toe with some Level 7s and even some Level 8s, but as Wero-vasto said, it's hard to do that if its own effect doesn't allow it to do that. Fix it and it'll be quite the card to have when in a pinch. I like the picture. It suits the card, and it fits the Attribute. Rate: 9/10 Just fix the little kinks and it'll be good to go. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sploda Posted January 1, 2011 Report Share Posted January 1, 2011 I feel that, since I missed that error, I should assist in correcting it now. OCG Corrections Version 2: When this card is Excess Summoned, return cards in your Graveyard equal to the number of cards Overlaid on this card to the bottom of your Deck. Cards that are sent to the Graveyard are instead returned to their owner's hand, excluding cards sent to the Graveyard by this card's effect. Once per turn, you can send 1 Overlaid monster on this card to the Graveyard to have this card gain 400 ATK until the End Phase of your next turn. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flash Flyer - Sakura Posted January 2, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 2, 2011 [quote name='wero-vasto' timestamp='1293921263' post='4904235'] Simple... but you effects states that cards won't touch the Graveyard and would go directly to the hand so the last effect of your card won't be activated...seems good and it's simple :3 [/quote] Yeah I just remembered that my card prevents cards going to the Graveyard. [quote name='LichKing Lelouch' timestamp='1293925882' post='4904389'] I feel that, since I missed that error, I should assist in correcting it now.OCG Corrections Version 2: When this card is Excess Summoned, return cards in your Graveyard equal to the number of cards Overlaid on this card to the bottom of your Deck. Cards that are sent to the Graveyard are instead returned to their owner's hand, excluding cards sent to the Graveyard by this card's effect. Once per turn, you can send 1 Overlaid monster on this card to the Graveyard to have this card gain 400 ATK until the End Phase of your next turn. [/quote] I'll add the new changes. Thx LichKing (I'll + rep you for that) @Shion: Thanks for the rate/CnC. All I need to do is edit the "return to hand" part of the effect so that the ATK boost one can work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
wero-vasto Posted January 2, 2011 Report Share Posted January 2, 2011 May I suggest this?: "When this card is Excess Summoned, return cards in your Graveyard equal to the number of cards Overlaid on this card to the bottom of your Deck. Cards that are sent to the Graveyard are instead returned to their owner's hand. Once per turn, you can [b]return[/b] 1 Overlaid monster [b]from[/b] this card to [b]its owner hand[/b] to have this card gain 400 ATK until the End Phase of your next turn." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flash Flyer - Sakura Posted January 2, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 2, 2011 That works too, but I think I'll stay with what I have for now. However, I will keep your suggestion in mind if I think it'll work better. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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