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[Pokemon Fan-Fic] Descent Into Darkness (PG-13) [Chapter 4 says hello.]


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You told me Chapter 3 sucked.

You LIAR.

 

Jon is a interesting character. I half-expected him to say: "If anything happens to you, I anit answerin' to him." or something. Regardless, it was pretty good. The flashback was probably one of my favorite parts. ;D

 

Oh, and Zack's a wuss.

I <3 it.

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You told me Chapter 3 sucked.

You LIAR.

 

Jon is a interesting character. I half-expected him to say: "If anything happens to you' date=' I anit answerin' to him." or something. Regardless, it was pretty good. The flashback was probably one of my favorite parts. ;D

 

Oh, and Zack's a wuss.

I <3 it.

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Thanks. <3

I know I can do better, though.

 

You can thank Nex for supplying me with Jon and Max. ;D

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CHAOS IN THE BEDROOM!

 

Lulz.

 

Jon is essintially a man in middle age, trying to fulfill his dream by helping others fufill his.

 

His power resides solely on the fact that he won't give up.

 

Max, on the other hand, is skilled but easily exhausted.

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Chapter 3 is your worst chapter, but that really isn't saying anything. Most people take "worst" in a super-negative connotation, when it's the worst out of four good chapters. This one is borderline decent, but it's not a pile of shit. Don't be too harsh on yourself.

 

As long as you make it clear to the reader in the sentence before (and use italics), you don't need flashback tags.

 

Plot is coming along pretty nicely. AND CROBAT CAN TOTALLY DEFEAT 12 POKEMON MHMM.

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You're still better than me..XD

 

I can't wait till Ryan makes his way here XD

Nonsense. ^^

 

He's coming in a few chapters. ;D

 

Good. It has Crobat' date=' sooooooooooo.....

 

[b']TO THE MAX!!![/b]

 

YEAHHHH! :D

 

Read all of them' date=' can't wait four chapter four :D

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Thanks! ^^

And thank you for submitting a character. <3

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Dark' date=' maybe you can check mine out...?

 

Moar chapters

This is actually cool =D

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Ehh, if I have time. But if it's not about Pokemon, I'll most likely be bored out of my mind. I'm not into writing/reading Fan-Fics... AT ALL.

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Thats callled Pokemon Solar so of course not.

 

I'm talking about the totally unradical nonpokemon movies that Hollywood keeps churning out.

 

 

Dudes' date=' unless you have like, a pikachu or something, it isn't a story worth seeing.

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This be the truth.

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