Corpse-Manipulating Familiar

[Tourmaline]

I would have had Bandito somewhere in the name, as the familiar is supposed to be that sort of guy.
Anyway.

[img]http://i.imgur.com/m18ay.jpg[/img]

[b]Lore:[/b] 1 Tuner + 1 or more non-Tuner Zombie-Type monsters

Any monster Special Summoned by this card's effect on the field and in the Graveyard become Zombie-Type monsters. Once per turn, during your Main Phase or when a monster in either player's Graveyard is targeted by an effect: Banish 1 Zombie-Type monster from your Graveyard; select 1 monster from either player's Graveyard and Special Summon it to your side of the Field, negate its effect and decrease its ATK and DEF by its level x200.  When a monster Special Summoned by this card's effect is removed from the Field; send it to your Graveyard. 

[Garthfunkle Vii Backwards]

you forgot rank should add rank to the effect as well chaos dragons and zombies oh my make this an op'ed in a way as you can grab anything but much desired concept high atk monster that can be ss from the grave when this card is synchro summon you can grab it no matter what you should get a monster 1500atk or more what make this worse you can keep special summon cards like spore pleaguespreader zombie or quillbolt for massive xyz and or synchro abuse

[Thar]

First thing I noticed: There is no extra space after the Synchro material line. Getting rid of that line might make the lore in the card look a lot cleaner.

Also -
/...[b][color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)]to your side of the Field[/background][/size][/font][/color][size=5][color=#FF0000][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)];[/background][/font][/color][/size][color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)] negate its effect[/background][/size][/font][/color][/b][color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)].../[/background][/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)]It just reads awkward with just a comma.[/background][/size][/font][/color]

[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)]Lastly, the last part of the effect looks a bit too ante-ey, as in: The card says [i]"...[/i][/background][/size][/font][/color][i][color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)]select 1 monster from either player's Graveyard and Special Summon it to your side of the Field..."[/background][/size][/font][/color][/i][color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)] Which means it could be your opponent's card that you're adding to your Graveyard, which sounds risky.[/background][/size][/font][/color]

[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)]On a personal note: The card name is a bit meh. The card's just another necromancer, so giving it the name "Corpse-Manipulator" is like giving a philosopher card the name "Mega-Mind." Giving the card flavorful names makes them much more interesting.[/background][/size][/font][/color]

[Sander]

[quote name='Thar Ablaze' timestamp='1347913740' post='6026808']
Also -
/...[b][color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)]to your side of the Field[/background][/size][/font][/color][size=5][color=#FF0000][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)];[/background][/font][/color][/size][color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)] negate its effect[/background][/size][/font][/color][/b][color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)].../[/background][/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)]It just reads awkward with just a comma.[/background][/size][/font][/color]
[/quote]

Cept that's now the correct wording for it. The correct way to word it would be like this:

[i]"Once per turn, during your Main Phase or when a monster in either player's Graveyard is targeted by an effect: Banish 1 Zombie-Type monster from your Graveyard to target 1 monster from either player's Graveyard; Special Summon that target to your side of the field. That monsters effect(s) are negated, and its ATK and DEF are reduced equal to its Level x200."[/i]

Anyways, I feel like the card is broken. I mean, it is a walking Monster Reborn with a 2600 body that can revive [i]anything. [/i]I really have no idea why you designed the card this way, but that aspect breaks the card.

[Sleepy]

I agree with Panda's wording.

The card itself. I actually think it's ok.
I most likely forgot what Zombies use to fill in the Graveyard quickly other than Pyramid Turtle, but Zombies in your Graveyard are valuable resourses.
Also, having the effects negated and reducing it's ATK, makes it an obvious "use it for Synchro/Xyz/Tribute" card as the main purpose of the revived targets.

*Uses Vylon Prism + Mezuki to Synchro for this*

and it's nice that it randomly is a Recurring Nightmare target.