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Flash Flyer - Sakura Posted April 5, 2015 Report Share Posted April 5, 2015 Swordsman isn't a real Type; however an appropriate substitute for it is "Warrior". Fix this. Anyway... Dealer basically acts like a "Necromally" discard/search engine to get more out; however as is right now; you only have 2 of them. Also know that she lacks an OPT clause, so for all we know, this card can just spam the Graveyard repeatedly (well, right now it's not too bad because you can only have 9 Necromallys). Gearess basically Special Summons another one when NSed. Right now, nothing it can really do, aside from reviving another copy of itself + going into an R5. Dragona is a Level 7 Vanilla with Level 3 stats. To be honest, you'd only use this for Xyz Summons at this point; given that it really can't do much. --- I assume you'll add more in the future. Also, you have more than one card; so moved to Multiples. Next time, read the forum description. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thefamemonster Posted April 5, 2015 Author Report Share Posted April 5, 2015 Ok look, i barely know anything more than the basics of Yu Gi Oh so PLEASE stop riding my ass. Im thankful for your "suggesttions" but im not trying to reinvent Yu Gi Oh im just making some cards that I think are interesting. So all I wanna hear is.... "Thats cool!" "Thanks for sharing!" "Hey it would be cool if you could make......____________" ok. Thank you :) Swordsman isn't a real Type; however an appropriate substitute for it is "Warrior". Fix this. Anyway... Dealer basically acts like a "Necromally" discard/search engine to get more out; however as is right now; you only have 2 of them. Also know that she lacks an OPT clause, so for all we know, this card can just spam the Graveyard repeatedly (well, right now it's not too bad because you can only have 9 Necromallys). Gearess basically Special Summons another one when NSed. Right now, nothing it can really do, aside from reviving another copy of itself + going into an R5. Dragona is a Level 7 Vanilla with Level 3 stats. To be honest, you'd only use this for Xyz Summons at this point; given that it really can't do much. --- I assume you'll add more in the future. Also, you have more than one card; so moved to Multiples. Next time, read the forum description. Ok look, i barely know anything more than the basics of Yu Gi Oh so PLEASE stop riding my ass. Im thankful for your "suggesttions" but im not trying to reinvent Yu Gi Oh im just making some cards that I think are interesting. So all I wanna hear is.... "Thats cool!" "Thanks for sharing!" "Hey it would be cool if you could make......____________" ok. Thank you :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flash Flyer - Sakura Posted April 5, 2015 Report Share Posted April 5, 2015 By section rules, I do have to critique you on your design; although certainly not as hard as I would for things in the Advanced section. That goes for everyone else who grades your stuff. Giving comments like "good job" is fine, but really doesn't help you to improve or figure out what you can do to make your cards work better. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lokun489 Posted April 6, 2015 Report Share Posted April 6, 2015 The levels are incredibly off, and the fact that Sister of the Necromally-Dealer can use it's effect an infinite number of times, you can totally just stack your graveyard, and seeing as how it is a graveyard centric deck, it kind of sucks. Too overpowered. Gearess being level five means no deck will use her. Her level means she's slow, you can only play her if you already have a monster on the field. Even if she let's you get one back, without an extra deck she's, again, lame. Dragona, a level seven vanilla with useless stats. unless you give her some support, useless. Overall a deck with two worthless cards and an overpowered one so bad, that it would be banned before it came out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Marco Polo Posted April 6, 2015 Report Share Posted April 6, 2015 Ok look, i barely know anything more than the basics of Yu Gi Oh so PLEASE stop riding my ass. Im thankful for your "suggesttions" but im not trying to reinvent Yu Gi Oh im just making some cards that I think are interesting. So all I wanna hear is.... "Thats cool!" "Thanks for sharing!" "Hey it would be cool if you could make......____________" ok. Thank you :) Ok look, i barely know anything more than the basics of Yu Gi Oh so PLEASE stop riding my ass. Im thankful for your "suggesttions" but im not trying to reinvent Yu Gi Oh im just making some cards that I think are interesting. So all I wanna hear is.... "Thats cool!" "Thanks for sharing!" "Hey it would be cool if you could make......____________" ok. Thank you :) Serious anger issues you have there. 1.You barely know any basics of Yugioh? well then why in hell would you make cards for this game then? I assume you somewhat play it, and for that reason you should design cards according to the actual game. 2.None's riding your ass, Sakura is in fact one of the most frustratingly polite members in this forum. You get a constructive & polite comment that'll actually help you improve cards here, so you claim someone's riding your ass? 3.The comments you're looking for are redundant. "Thanks for sharing" - means hey, I haven't given a single glimpse at your cards, but just let me reply here to fill blank space. "That's Cool" - means tl;dr "Hey it would be cool if you could make..." is a reply you'd never get here for a simple reason, all you do is slap a picture on the card maker, write 5 words and post it here. < why ask for it, they can do the same. ^ that is called riding your ass thnx Making cards is a fine! but strive to make something of quality. share your creativity in a way that will interest and attract people, this forum is for stimulating your ideas and this thread is completely fine - because you're doing that. Just don't backfire when you hear feedback. Good luck. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Supreme Gamesmaster Posted April 8, 2015 Report Share Posted April 8, 2015 Yeah, honestly, you could just make these Warrior-Type and lose nothing. As it is, they're basically in Experimental for no reason. (If nothing else, change the Types to Warrior-Type, get the topic moved to Casual Cards, and you'll get a lot more traffic. :P) I see the synergy here - Dealer sends to Graveyard, Gearess pulls from Graveyard, and Dragona, er... well, Dealer and Gearess have obvious synergy, anyway. That said, I am a bit confused about the wording on Dealer. First of all, what does "pull" mean? Are you sending cards from the Deck to the Graveyard? Are you fetching cards from the Deck to your hand? (In the latter case, that seems like far too good searching for a Deck that mainly focuses on the Graveyard anyway.) And second of all, when you say "the same number," does that mean the same number you sent from your hand? Lastly, will you, erm, "pull" any card you'd like, or can you only do it to Necromally cards? Rewording the effects would make that a lot clearer. As for Dragona, er, hrm. Not only is it useless, it would have been useless back during Legend of Blue-Eyes White Dragon. If she's a boss monster meant to be Summoned by Gearess, why not give her some kind of effect that activates when she's Summoned from the Graveyard? Also, on the bright side, you didn't fall into the common trap of giving the cards way too high battle stats. Actually, you have the reverse problem - everyone's stats are way too low. Their effects are focused on swarming, so stats aren't irrelevant, but they're statted out as if their effects are much more direct than they actually are. Gearess probably needs 1000 points' boosting; Dragona needs 1000-1500, depending on what effect she gets and what role you'd like her to play. If she's a pure boss monster, making her a 2700-ATK beatstick might be apropos; if she's more a swarmer or protector, 2200 ATK might be more suitable. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flash Flyer - Sakura Posted April 9, 2015 Report Share Posted April 9, 2015 I did tell them to fix the Typing, and yeah once that problem gets fixed; I can shaft this back to Casual Multiples. Basically, Casual works on the same principles as Advanced; except we allow Divine-Beasts and not as critical about the metagame. Fake Types stay over here in Experimental; and frankly you shouldn't NEED to use one; where one of the 23 legal Types would suffice (or a combination). Swordsman can easily be classed into Warrior, and that's it. Doing that allows them to gain support from the various cards Warriors already look forward to. For Dealer, assume that "pull" translates to "add cards"; which a lot of other cards have. ---- As a reply to the TC, I just gave you simple critique on what your cards can do to become better. In no way did I attack your cardmaking skills. If you really wish to see someone be harsh with your cards, go speak to one of my predecessors. Before coming into the section, you should have a general idea of the cards that exist in the game. Again, you are NOT required to know about our metagames and all that; but at the minimum, know what's out there. Remember, you are not in a vacuum when designing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Supreme Gamesmaster Posted April 9, 2015 Report Share Posted April 9, 2015 Sorry, was unclear - I meant that it's in experimental because of the fake types, so the TC should probably change the Type to Warrior and that won't be an issue anymore. And sorry about not knowing what "pull" was; I confess I've never seen it before. ^^; Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flash Flyer - Sakura Posted April 9, 2015 Report Share Posted April 9, 2015 It's alright; that's one of the problems when members don't use proper OCG. Nothing really major. And yeah, I told the TC to change the Type earlier, but as you can tell, they threw a sort of fit. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Horu Posted April 14, 2015 Report Share Posted April 14, 2015 I'm gonna say "pull" is another term for "drawing" or "picking up" cards from the deck or graveyard. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Supreme Gamesmaster Posted April 14, 2015 Report Share Posted April 14, 2015 Why not just say "draw," then? :/ Also, I just realized - why on earth are all of these cards Swordsman-Type when none of them have swords? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flash Flyer - Sakura Posted April 15, 2015 Report Share Posted April 15, 2015 I'm gonna say "pull" is another term for "drawing" or "picking up" cards from the deck or graveyard. We technically have terms for those in PSCT (or even older OCG styles). Since the user in question chose not to use standard OCG, it's anyone's guess what "pull" means. I just chose "pull" to mean search. Why not just say "draw," then? :/ Also, I just realized - why on earth are all of these cards Swordsman-Type when none of them have swords? I would assume the TC doesn't know how to write OCG properly; a lot of new members don't, and usually they end up copying manga OCG, which isn't very accurate. But yeah, it really makes no sense if they're Swordsman and lack swords. And then again, they're female monsters, so... If they were Warrior-Type, like we all suggested, then it'd make some logical sense. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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