Kitty Posted August 30, 2009 Report Share Posted August 30, 2009 I DON'T have a problem with Poetryjust the way people do it.... Poetry is meant to be from the heart, not for the lulz.... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Huntar! Posted August 31, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 Thanks Kitty. Everything is censored. Get over it. You have no rights in an internet forum except for the ones that are given to you. So, you can't win this battle, sir. But I'm trying to be accepting. I haven't warned OMGAKITTY or yourself for being borderline. But Yeah, WiiOmi got what was coming to him.---------- On a serious note, I'd post this in Music but I haven't recorded it and it can pass as a poem whilst written. My Little Gun-Hunter This song is like a gunIn more ways than one After all that crying on the floor, girlI'd say you'd have won.But not after I explain this, my girlHow this song's like a gun. I dont want you crying, on the floor, girlThats not for you-I just want you dying, on the floor, girlI am just so through; with you This song is like a gunIn more ways than one Now lets have some funWith, my little gun I dont hate you now, not anymore, girlI have no reason to-But you look like gore, girl; it makes me hurlAnd I have better things to do. This song is just like a gunYou dont believe me do, you?-Well this gun makes me number oneYou'll be dead in a minuite or two; too- Well that was a tonOf jolly, good ole' fun I dont want you crying, on the floor, girlThats not for you-I just want you dying, on the floor, girlYour not worthy, of being my boo- By now I hope you're crying, on the floorDear, thats just the startSo I'll just be closing the door-To your tainted heart By now I think I've wonWith, my little gun I've got my gun up to your head-Play time's over nowIt might just leave you dead-And all I can say is "wow" You just gave me the ammo, I needed-, girlFor this gun of mineYour memories just feed- it, girlThis'll keep you in line. So I pull that nasty trigger-Aimed at your faceAs my grin gets bigger-I wonder how it'll taste... *gunshot sound* ...So now your dying, on the floor, girlThe way I thought you wouldI wont dream of you, anymore, girlAs if I even could And yes I think I wonWith, my little, dear gun Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kitty Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 1st of all you welcome Princey and secondlyO.0 you Song/Poem scared me Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Huntar! Posted August 31, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 Then it served its purpose. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Juuzou Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 epic song Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kitty Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 Then it served its purpose. o.0; remind me not to get on your bad side... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Huntar! Posted August 31, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 Thanks.  I really have no clue how stuff like that comes into my head. I get a random tune and a line, then it just expands. Weird.Then it served its purpose. o.0; remind me not to get on your bad side... Lol, thats a good idea. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kitty Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 Thanks.  I really have no clue how stuff like that comes into my head. I get a random tune and a line' date=' then it just expands. Weird.[hr']Then it served its purpose. o.0; remind me not to get on your bad side... Lol' date=' thats a good idea.[/quote']  Weird is rightyou write depressing stuff....honestly.. it's sad really... D=makes me depressed. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Huntar! Posted August 31, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 Well, if you read it fast, it'll be sad. Â But if you read it slow, and to the tune I imagined it to, its really ironic, in a sense. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Juuzou Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 Well' date=' if you read it fast, it'll be sad. Â But if you read it slow, and to the tune I imagined it to, its really ironic, in a sense.[/quote']Â at the first two lines, i thought you meant the gun, um... wasn't a real gun Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kitty Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 but i don't blame you for writing it, at times i could write depressing things.... but meh.... I get yelled at if I'm depressed.... so I'm just a happy Kitty.. =/It don't rhyme but al ways remember Times are bluebut there is anewThings will changeJoy will come to you Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Huntar! Posted August 31, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 Well' date=' if you read it fast, it'll be sad.  But if you read it slow, and to the tune I imagined it to, its really ironic, in a sense.[/quote'] at the first two lines, i thought you meant the gun, um... wasn't a real gun It isn't a real gun. I'm not actually shooting anyone. But the song is meant to hurt like a real gun, and leave someone dead inside. Wow, I'm cruel. =/ Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kitty Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 Well' date=' if you read it fast, it'll be sad.  But if you read it slow, and to the tune I imagined it to, its really ironic, in a sense.[/quote'] at the first two lines, i thought you meant the gun, um... wasn't a real gun It isn't a real gun. I'm not actually shooting anyone. But the song is meant to hurt like a real gun, and leave someone dead inside. Wow, I'm cruel. =/ no you're expressing how someone did you... it's acceptable Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Juuzou Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 Well' date=' if you read it fast, it'll be sad.  But if you read it slow, and to the tune I imagined it to, its really ironic, in a sense.[/quote'] at the first two lines, i thought you meant the gun, um... wasn't a real gun It isn't a real gun. I'm not actually shooting anyone. But the song is meant to hurt like a real gun, and leave someone dead inside. Wow, I'm cruel. =/ sick freak =P anyways, it would probably sound good when sung Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Huntar! Posted August 31, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 It sounded good in my head. Probably a song that if someone bought the album, they'd listen to and love it, but never talk about it. I'm writing a new song right now. Its more upbeat.Sick-Hunter I'm sick and tired of writing sappy love songsYou should know by nowI'm sick and tired of you in my dreamsGet out! get out now- Get out of my head, get out of my dreams!The tears I shed, the sound of your screamsI'm so sick of you, so sick of this sheetI want to for get you, forget all of it- I'm sick and tired of thinking about youYou should go right nowI'm sick and tired of you, and us, and me!I just, dont know how-... So I wrote this song, to help me out!If my head is wrong, thats what its aboutGo out and have some fun! get your mind offNah, shes not the one, now dont get soft I'm sick and tired of your damn faceNo! dont need you-I'm sick and tired of losing the raceYou know I'll make it through!- So I'm out with my friends, havin a blast!I'm glad it was the end, that we didn't last-Go out and chase some tail, have a good ole' timeHave a drink of ale, or somethin with lemon and lime- I'm so sick and tired of this damn song!Cus it was about youI'm sick and tired of me being wrong-You make me blue-... So I got back up! right on the horseI'll fill up my cup, it cant get worse-Kiss some random chick, for the hell of it!Wont remember you one bit- I'm just so sick of being sickAnd I know its trueI just deal with it oh-so quick-Its me- without- you!- So I'm out with the guys, once again!Ha, nobody's died, we're all just friends-Hey little girly, whats your name?You'll be mine surely, thats the game!- I'm just so happy, without youwelcome in-I'm just so happy with her now!(Haha) Your mad cus shes so thin- I'm not destined to be aloneI've been waiting on my own-Now I start my life, without you!-I start my life, without being- so blue-... I'm sick and tired of writting sappy love songsAnd thinking of you-I couldn't forget you if you were on my mind...But I'm better off with her. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 @ Prince Hunter: fair enough. This poem is just a big metaphor. No rhymes. The ocean,The deep waters within.How long will it take?For said ocean to drain? Diving deep...Deeper and deeper.Getting closer...To the edge. Underneath the ocean...A seperate world.Not yet discovered,Yet not a mystery. Once the ocean has drained,And the water is gone,There will be no swimming.It's over. TBQH, this was partially written for the lulz, and partially written because I wanted to make a poem about a metaphor about death. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Huntar! Posted August 31, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 its strange. I kinda like it though. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 I broke up with my girlfriend awhile ago, but I really wasn't hurt. So this haiku is a lie. But it has comedy. :DÂ Love is like arrow,So very dangerous, man.Do not mess with it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Huntar! Posted August 31, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 Do not mess with it. Don't is one syllable. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OMGAKITTY Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 They tell me I can't,That it isn't allowed,"From the heart! From the heart!"is their plaintive cry I'm told I mock an art,that what I write is no good.Who are they to say? Van Gogh was called a radical,may I remind thee. "Drink to me,drink to my health,you know I can’t drink any more."Said Picasso,before death took his soul.At least,this is what wikipedia told me. So this I proclaim,from the corner in my room,poetry from the stomach,is just as good as the stuff from the heart. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 Do not mess with it. Don't is one syllable. Crap. I should have been sleeping 7 minutes ago. I AM LOSING MY MIND. Thanks for the fix. They tell me I can't' date='That it isn't allowed,"From the heart! From the heart!"is their plaintive cry I'm told I mock an art,that what I write is no good.Who are they to say? Van Gogh was called a radical,may I remind thee. "Drink to me,drink to my health,you know I can’t drink any more."Said Picasso,before death took his soul.At least,this is what wikipedia told me. So this I proclaim,from the corner in my room,poetry from the stomach,is just as good as the stuff from the heart.[/quote'] It has some lulz, but also rebellion. Not being sarcastic, this is the mere image of epic. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Huntar! Posted August 31, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 They tell you? Its just me, mate. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 Is "poetry from the stomach" a metaphor I did not understand? That means lulzy poems, right? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OMGAKITTY Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 They tell you? Its just me' date=' mate.[/quote'] Kitty has been whining about how all poetry has to come from the heart also. Is "poetry from the stomach" a metaphor I did not understand? That means lulzy poems' date=' right?[/quote'] More or less. Probably expanded a bit to mean any poem that is more fun; ie, Seuss and Silverstine. Not all poetry has to be srs business to be good. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Posted August 31, 2009 Report Share Posted August 31, 2009 I'm glad you brought up Seuss, it's gonna help our argument. Seuss also wrote stuff for the lulz, albeit it actually had a lesson behind it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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