Blake Posted August 9, 2011 Report Share Posted August 9, 2011 Nah, I was saying it was understandable. ... ^^; Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted August 9, 2011 Report Share Posted August 9, 2011 Should've known Andx would do something to end it all One question bro y u no add epic marine captain? and why is Lora in her 30's-20's? wouldn't that make DEF like 70-80? Jake I'd say overall it was 4 maybe 4.5 Why didn't I add the epic Marine Captain Remo? I believe I did . . .Also Lora is her right age, but she looks younger; since her and I are not human we age differently. I am actually surprised people are giving it a good rating, I personally think I rushed it too much for it to be any goodPersonal Rating -> 3/5 because of the laughs. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Desu the Blue Nerd Posted August 9, 2011 Report Share Posted August 9, 2011 4/5=80%=B- I think that's a fair rating. It's not bad but it can defintiely be WAY better. 3/5=60%=D- Actually, that may just be an F. Not so much. 3/5 is in my book a pretty bad rating. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lord JZ of the Enigma Posted August 9, 2011 Report Share Posted August 9, 2011 @.@ personally I liked the story as a whole...but I'm so confused as to who the kids were.....now I really feel Mexican cause I don't know who my kid was....if I even had one....also I will be submitting this to Kari and Kana and they will punish Daisuke properly, lol Good Job fuse, you did something I could only dream of doing (Cause I'm waaaaayyyy to lazy) and entertained various people along the way.....also....Shadow can indeed NOT hold any liquor. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lt. Colonel Remo Posted August 9, 2011 Report Share Posted August 9, 2011 @Remo: y u no read mah one-shot? 0-o I didn't know you had a one-shot I'll check if Fuse put it on the front Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted August 9, 2011 Report Share Posted August 9, 2011 I has 2 =3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lt. Colonel Remo Posted August 9, 2011 Report Share Posted August 9, 2011 The read the one where you scrabbled to get to your daughters birth I could totally imagine El being that wasted Though I figured Black would've used....more colorful language I sure as hell would...then again I'm not the type to stay in relationships in the first place xD I was half expecting Amelia to ask Caeda what a hooker xD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted August 9, 2011 Report Share Posted August 9, 2011 The read the one where you scrabbled to get to your daughters birth I could totally imagine El being that wasted Though I figured Black would've used....more colorful language I sure as hell would...then again I'm not the type to stay in relationships in the first place xD I was half expecting Amelia to ask Caeda what a hooker xDSEE? xD ... I thought about it, and in the first draft, he did... Then it got deleted ;A; I thought about having her ask, but it might come up in a later one-shot. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lt. Colonel Remo Posted August 9, 2011 Report Share Posted August 9, 2011 .... Wouldn't Caeda attempt to murder you for corrupting her child? She sure as hell wouldn't have any second thoughts if it was anyone else I was reading your first one-shot that scene in the beginning where you talk to Arm...about dangerous cakes...at the end where hands you the bills and such That would've been a perfect Uncharted level kinda cutscene Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted August 9, 2011 Report Share Posted August 9, 2011 Yes, sweetie would kill me =D You'll find a bit of slapstick comes with Black and Caeda, in relation to Amelia. Arm is the greatest fic character, ever. Uncharted? Huh? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lt. Colonel Remo Posted August 9, 2011 Report Share Posted August 9, 2011 Well it's good material for a game cutscene a DEF game cutscene Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted August 9, 2011 Report Share Posted August 9, 2011 Aaah, I getcha now. lolarm Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted August 10, 2011 Report Share Posted August 10, 2011 You know what I wanna know? How Chris and Aka fell in love?There was NO hint of it in the story 8/ One-shot material, me thinks? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kazooie Posted August 10, 2011 Report Share Posted August 10, 2011 I'm telling you all. Fuse is lying to us and Chris is lying to the world of DEF. ChrisxClair is completely canon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted August 10, 2011 Report Share Posted August 10, 2011 I'm telling you all. Fuse is lying to us and Chris is lying to the world of DEF. ChrisxClair is completely canon. Oh the wack parrings that there be XDDD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kazooie Posted August 10, 2011 Report Share Posted August 10, 2011 i swear, if i was a decent writer i would totally write that one shot. then for extra drama throw cherry in somewhere Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted August 10, 2011 Report Share Posted August 10, 2011 Agreed!Kazooie you never commented on the Halloween one-shot Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted August 10, 2011 Report Share Posted August 10, 2011 @.@ personally I liked the story as a whole...but I'm so confused as to who the kids were.....now I really feel Mexican cause I don't know who my kid was....if I even had one....also I will be submitting this to Kari and Kana and they will punish Daisuke properly, lol Good Job fuse, you did something I could only dream of doing (Cause I'm waaaaayyyy to lazy) and entertained various people along the way.....also....Shadow can indeed NOT hold any liquor. Thanks man, I'm surprised you actually read this far, lol.Your kid's Hiru.One of the two guys at the very end.You know, the one that called himself ENIGMA. You know what I wanna know? How Chris and Aka fell in love?There was NO hint of it in the story 8/ One-shot material, me thinks? Pfft, course.Might make for a few of them actually .-.It's challenging though, because I suck at writing girls v_v I'm telling you all. Fuse is lying to us and Chris is lying to the world of DEF. ChrisxClair is completely canon. o u Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted August 10, 2011 Report Share Posted August 10, 2011 Pfft, course.Might make for a few of them actually .-.It's challenging though, because I suck at writing girls v_v I could help! Also, the one-shot wont be happening for a LONG time.I am going to buckle down and get SoP II ready, since it's been delayed for WAY too long. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted August 10, 2011 Report Share Posted August 10, 2011 Is what you're doing really a one-shot, though :/More like a...project.But yeah, do whatever works.And I've put off writing this one-shot long enough, I'll go get started.Maybe my writer's block will go away as I write. Like honestly, this is the first time writer's block has been a problem for me.Nothing like the epilogue, where I typed everything at once....you guys know I wrote that thing 7 hours straight until it finished?That never happened to me either, not even for chapter 27. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Desu the Blue Nerd Posted August 10, 2011 Report Share Posted August 10, 2011 You know what I wanna know? How Chris and Aka fell in love?There was NO hint of it in the story 8/ One-shot material, me thinks? Actually, it was hinted in chapter 36. :/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted August 10, 2011 Report Share Posted August 10, 2011 Actually, it was hinted in chapter 36. :/ That is true, but it was very subtle, so I don't really blame him for missing it.Jake, Aka mentioned she'd like getting to know Chris and Chris acted awkward around her like he always does with any pretty girl he meets. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted August 10, 2011 Report Share Posted August 10, 2011 That is true, but it was very subtle, so I don't really blame him for missing it.Jake, Aka mentioned she'd like getting to know Chris and Chris acted awkward around her like he always does with any pretty girl he meets. Ah . . . question answered 8 /And Fusion yes it'd count more as a project. But once more it is going to be delayed so I can get SoP II up and going. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Desu the Blue Nerd Posted August 10, 2011 Report Share Posted August 10, 2011 Subtle? Crab asked Aka if she liked him. It was pretty damn obvious. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted August 10, 2011 Report Share Posted August 10, 2011 But Aka shut that down.ALTHOUGH, the very fact that the author had Crab ask the question in the first place is kind of a tease, ain't it? Anyways, I hate myself.I went about cleaning up all the bios instead v__vHOWEVER, now they are all...right.Information that never wormed its way into the fic, like Kana liking DL or whatever, has been removed. A lot of them are the same, but some are different. I set the bios back so they provide information up until the beginning of the fic, hence the missing Post-Time Skips. I figured those would spoil new readers on what's to come and everyone here knows what happens to them anyways.That's why the ages are also a year younger than they're supposed to be.I have added birthdays to the bios. They are the birthdays of the actual members they are based on, barring those who blocked them, in which case I randomly generated a birthday for them like I did for my OC's.I have also added 2 new bios, Jake's and King's.IN ADDITION, I've split the bios into Part 1 and Part 2.If a character was introduced in Part 2 as opposed to Part 1, they go in the Part 2 spoiler. I actually went looking for Jake's bio in this thread and stumbled upon some good memories...The time Nexev used to like this fic...The time Mikhail came in to troll me...The time DL wrote 3 Fan Fixtions sending me into a mini-depression...The time where people constantly bickered about updates and bios... Those sure were some good times... You know what else I realized?After the end of the 3rd arc, this thread reached 100 pages.Meaning the entire last half of this thread happened during the final arc...What the heck.Also, I think it was around 50 where Part 1 ended and Part 2 started.So the commenting rate like...doubled, for each end of the arc. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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