Marco Polo Posted November 9, 2014 Report Share Posted November 9, 2014 So there was this card I always liked ever since I played Yugioh Forbidden Memories. that was [spoiler='Blue Winged Crown']http://img1.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20140109033237/yugioh/images/9/92/BlueWingedCrown-MRD-NA-C-1E.png[/spoiler]. Now, I'm making card art and thought to give this little guy and his Fusion counterpart, Mavelus, some credit. You can return this Normal Summoned card to your hand; Special Summon 1 non-Effect Winged Beast-Type Fusion Monster from your Extra Deck. During either player's turn: You can discard this card from your hand and target 1 non-Effect Winged Beast-Type Fusion Monster you control; that monster is unaffected by other card effects this turn. this has Divine Winds of Mist Valley at it's fingertips and has a few targets, all which it can protect. it's designed to say surprise beatstick, (((with tha abilitiz to overcome Winda! ((whispers yay quitley)))) Crimson Sunbird 2300/1900 Punished Eagle 2100/1800 Skullbird 1900/1700 Mavelus 1300/900 three top targets are level 6. and this card will soon become a *small* archetype, consisting of a few other crowns bringing bird fusions to the field and making them potent. Opinions? thoughts? is the card art any good? leave a comment :P thanks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Toffee. Posted November 9, 2014 Report Share Posted November 9, 2014 Divine Wind only works if you returned a WIND monster, you know.... That aside, I like how you made this virtually unsearchable. .... 'Cept by maybe something like Onslaught of the Fire Kings, but this needs to be Normal Summoned. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spinny Posted November 9, 2014 Report Share Posted November 9, 2014 Summoning crimson sunbird would make more sense since it's fire and has 2300 attack..... Card art is amazing. Not a WIND so divine wind isnt there.... If you made it a wind then you could this -> mavelus -> divine wind -> instant rank 4..... but divine wind is limited and mst isnt so its a weak tactic.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Marco Polo Posted November 10, 2014 Author Report Share Posted November 10, 2014 Divine Wind only works if you returned a WIND monster, you know.... That aside, I like how you made this virtually unsearchable. .... 'Cept by maybe something like Onslaught of the Fire Kings, but this needs to be Normal Summoned. Oops. :O I thought Divine Winds affects all Winged Beasts, huh. should I make it wind (as it kinda contradicts with this card's sun-bird look?) Summoning crimson sunbird would make more sense since it's fire and has 2300 attack..... Card art is amazing. Not a WIND so divine wind isnt there.... If you made it a wind then you could this -> mavelus -> divine wind -> instant rank 4..... but divine wind is limited and mst isnt so its a weak tactic.... Thanks, the other members of this mini archetype will utilize each fusion. So far only reliable fusion is Crimson Sunbird, ofc.. Yup my mistake on divine winds, and I kinda try to discourage exceeds, rank 4 wasn't really the point. So how else do you suggest shall I tweak this? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
razzy Posted November 10, 2014 Report Share Posted November 10, 2014 You forgot the GB fusion. Which could use be last game to beat-down/or in the deck iself to just get it and field and set up next urn. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Marco Polo Posted November 10, 2014 Author Report Share Posted November 10, 2014 You forgot the GB fusion. Which could use be last game to beat-down/or in the deck iself to just get it and field and set up next urn. it says non-Effect.. non-Effect is a term covering all monsters who don't have effects, i.e vanillas, vanilla fusions, vanilla synchros etc. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
razzy Posted November 10, 2014 Report Share Posted November 10, 2014 ah sorry missed that part/sick :p Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sleepy Posted November 13, 2014 Report Share Posted November 13, 2014 Random suggestions, and I say random because they aren't corrections since your card works well as is save for the Attribute issue already mentioned: -You could give this card an insanely weird Level like 9 or 11 and the ability to not require Tributes, if you REALLY want to avoid easy Xyz access to it. It'd also help the Calculator. -You could technically make it have the flavor of a solar wind and make it be treated as both Attributes as to not take away the FIRE and not miss out on the WIND. only problem is that it'd increase even more the amount of text it has. Not much though. Speaking of text btw, this line needs correction: you control: Until the end of the turn, that monster is unaffected by other card effects. It doesn't have a cost and the condition to use it is already covered before the colon. A semi-colon is not needed here. "Until the end of the turn" is not a cost either, so that's that.... just a minor thing. To shorten it up you can also change everything after the colon for: It is unaffected by other card effects this turn. and it'd be fair game. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Marco Polo Posted November 13, 2014 Author Report Share Posted November 13, 2014 Random suggestions, and I say random because they aren't corrections since your card works well as is save for the Attribute issue already mentioned: -You could give this card an insanely weird Level like 9 or 11 and the ability to not require Tributes, if you REALLY want to avoid easy Xyz access to it. It'd also help the Calculator. -You could technically make it have the flavor of a solar wind and make it be treated as both Attributes as to not take away the FIRE and not miss out on the WIND. only problem is that it'd increase even more the amount of text it has. Not much though. Speaking of text btw, this line needs correction: you control: Until the end of the turn, that monster is unaffected by other card effects. It doesn't have a cost and the condition to use it is already covered before the colon. A semi-colon is not needed here. "Until the end of the turn" is not a cost either, so that's that.... just a minor thing. To shorten it up you can also change everything after the colon for: It is unaffected by other card effects this turn. and it'd be fair game. changed now, the rephrasing is brilliant. however doesn't this apply as a cost? the discarding is a cost, isn't it? anyway, second card of the same archetype is up! there's a set thread ready, check it out ;) http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/325236-non-effect-fusion-o-crown-birds-original-art-26/#entry6517066 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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