Boss Beast Archetype

[Yami Kiniko]

@Horu Ishayuki@Rayfield Lumina@TheBlackCatter@The Nyx Avatar@Yuno Unisa

The boss beast archetype has powerful Level 7-11 Boss monsters. They are all Limited to 1 and have "You can only have 1 "Boss Beast" Monster on your field at a time" in their effect

[Pommelo]

Let me help you a bit with the card grammar

Boss Beast Revenge

Gains 300 ATK/DEF each time a monster you control is destroyed by battle.

Boss Beast Commander

Once per turn: You can Special Summon 1 "Boss Beast Minion Token" (Beast/EARTH/Level 4/ATK 1200/DEF 1200).

I added You can because it'd be a mandatory effect otherwise. Also, you needn't the part that says in either attack or defense position. If the card doesn't specify in which position you have to Special Summon a monster, you're free to Special Summon it in any position you want (as long as it's face-up)

Boss Beast Shade

You can Special Summon this card (from your hand) by Tributing 2 Dark monsters. Cannot be destroyed by battle by Level 9 or higher monsters.

Here, I took the liberty of using Special Summon instead of the Normal Summon you used, since it's quite redundant to ask for 2 tributes in the effect because it's a Level 9 card which needs two tributes to be summoned by default. If the tribute of Dark monsters was meant to be mandatory, then you must use "Must be Tribute Summoned by Tributing 2 Dark monsters". The effect I'm suggesting is beneficial instead of a limitation, but I don't know which one you want to give to the monster. Finally, in the original says "cannot be destroyed". That would include both by battle and by the card effect of Level 9 or higher monsters. If it's the latter, ignore my suggestion in the "by battle" part.

[TheBlackCatter]

While I like the concept of having a big boss monster that you can use to devastate your opponent with, I don't see what makes these cards so powerful that they need to be in a Limited status. Don't get me wrong, the effects are great, it's just that I don't think they're Limited great. Maybe if you had something like "This card can only be destroyed in battle by Warrior/Beast-warrior type monsters." for each card then I could see why they would be Limited cards.

However, you don't have to take my advice as I'm no that great at creating cards. I just wanted to share my two bits. :)

 

[Yami Kiniko]

9 hours ago, Rayfield Lumina said:

Let me help you a bit with the card grammar

Boss Beast Revenge

Gains 300 ATK/DEF each time a monster you control is destroyed by battle.

Boss Beast Commander

Once per turn: You can Special Summon 1 "Boss Beast Minion Token" (Beast/EARTH/Level 4/ATK 1200/DEF 1200).

I added You can because it'd be a mandatory effect otherwise. Also, you needn't the part that says in either attack or defense position. If the card doesn't specify in which position you have to Special Summon a monster, you're free to Special Summon it in any position you want (as long as it's face-up)

Boss Beast Shade

You can Special Summon this card (from your hand) by Tributing 2 Dark monsters. Cannot be destroyed by battle by Level 9 or higher monsters.

Here, I took the liberty of using Special Summon instead of the Normal Summon you used, since it's quite redundant to ask for 2 tributes in the effect because it's a Level 9 card which needs two tributes to be summoned by default. If the tribute of Dark monsters was meant to be mandatory, then you must use "Must be Tribute Summoned by Tributing 2 Dark monsters". The effect I'm suggesting is beneficial instead of a limitation, but I don't know which one you want to give to the monster. Finally, in the original says "cannot be destroyed". That would include both by battle and by the card effect of Level 9 or higher monsters. If it's the latter, ignore my suggestion in the "by battle" part.

8 hours ago, TheBlackCatter said:

While I like the concept of having a big boss monster that you can use to devastate your opponent with, I don't see what makes these cards so powerful that they need to be in a Limited status. Don't get me wrong, the effects are great, it's just that I don't think they're Limited great. Maybe if you had something like "This card can only be destroyed in battle by Warrior/Beast-warrior type monsters." for each card then I could see why they would be Limited cards.

However, you don't have to take my advice as I'm no that great at creating cards. I just wanted to share my two bits. :)

 

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